All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Beginnings and Endings"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Terry wrote
This is a poem of wonderful words written and offering whirling motion. Your author notes provide excellent detail for readers. The science teacher in me loves this - as does the inner poet. Thank you for offering this!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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This is a poem of wonderful words written and offering whirling motion. Your author notes provide excellent detail for readers. The science teacher in me loves this - as does the inner poet. Thank you for offering this!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thank you so much Terry! :)Sharyn
Comment from Tina McKala
wow, this was very good philosophy poem. looking for the meaning, retrospection to find out what went wrong. very interesting, thought - provoking and so well written!
(I just couldn't find the waltz rhythm - it should be BAM tam tam - BAM tam tam - ... - shouldn't it?)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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wow, this was very good philosophy poem. looking for the meaning, retrospection to find out what went wrong. very interesting, thought - provoking and so well written!
(I just couldn't find the waltz rhythm - it should be BAM tam tam - BAM tam tam - ... - shouldn't it?)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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hey Tina thanks for asking - the iambic at the beginning can be confusing if you're looking for the waltz as you'll often need to take that as a half-note when you're singing it - the real BAM of the waltz ONE two three starts on the SECOND beat of each line, yes?
Now, when we were small we were totally sure
da(now (hold)/ WHEN we were SMALL we were TOT tal ly SURE
so - da/ DUM da da DUM da da DUM da da DUM
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haha, okay, now it makes sense and rhythm :)
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Comment from misscookie
The artwork that you choose is beautiful and truly sets the mood.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last. Your words are on the money and, I agree with it all the way.
Thank you for sharing this meaningful poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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The artwork that you choose is beautiful and truly sets the mood.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last. Your words are on the money and, I agree with it all the way.
Thank you for sharing this meaningful poem.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Well aren't you a sweetiepie! Thank you so much for your lovely six on this one misscookie dear! :)Sharyn
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You're very welcome, until next time.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
What is a feminine ending???
This is awesome, which is what I've come to expect from you.
one variation with a feminine ending << explain please.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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What is a feminine ending???
This is awesome, which is what I've come to expect from you.
one variation with a feminine ending << explain please.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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just an extra unstressed syllable Phyllis - all the other lines end in a strong stress, but 'ocean' is DUM da, right, so the 'da', being unstressed, is referred to as a 'feminine' ending (how DARE they!)
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How dare they INDEED! Implying that women are weak! Or maybe they are just saying MEN are always STRESSED! LOL!
Comment from chasennov
'Beginnings And Endings.' A very fine poem you wrote here, which you describe in almost technical terms. I enjoyed it anyway. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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'Beginnings And Endings.' A very fine poem you wrote here, which you describe in almost technical terms. I enjoyed it anyway. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx so much chas! :))S
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You're most welcome, S.
Comment from Dean Kuch
"We circle and spin in perpetual motion
and outgoing tides are the tides of all men,
the incoming tides just the breath of the ocean
and these tides will turn, and then turn once again"
What a beautifully penned piece, visionary. You've painted a serene portrait in elegant words with your poet's quill with this waltz. As you have so eloquently put near the ending of this, we are, indeed, all here by design. It is no mistake, no consequence of genetic evolution. We were put here, purposefully, created by the hand of a master designer. You've said it in Beginnings and Endings oh, so well...
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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"We circle and spin in perpetual motion
and outgoing tides are the tides of all men,
the incoming tides just the breath of the ocean
and these tides will turn, and then turn once again"
What a beautifully penned piece, visionary. You've painted a serene portrait in elegant words with your poet's quill with this waltz. As you have so eloquently put near the ending of this, we are, indeed, all here by design. It is no mistake, no consequence of genetic evolution. We were put here, purposefully, created by the hand of a master designer. You've said it in Beginnings and Endings oh, so well...
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Bless you Dean - thank you so much - you've chosen my favorite verse by the way :)S
Comment from bossladyone
I like this poem a lot. It is well written and flows nicly. The picture is beatiful and works well with the poem. I also like the color scheme. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I like this poem a lot. It is well written and flows nicly. The picture is beatiful and works well with the poem. I also like the color scheme. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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My great pleasure, my dear - and thank YOU for your wonderful six on t his one! :)Sharyn
Comment from JM daSilva
You made me hear your voice in this poem. I saw you sitting at a table thinking of it. The place is open like a bar, and behind you I see a counter on the right, in front of the counter there is a man, to the left. There is a kind of column at the center near the bar. You are sitting, looking down, your right leg is not under the table. Wow. Interesting. love your poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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You made me hear your voice in this poem. I saw you sitting at a table thinking of it. The place is open like a bar, and behind you I see a counter on the right, in front of the counter there is a man, to the left. There is a kind of column at the center near the bar. You are sitting, looking down, your right leg is not under the table. Wow. Interesting. love your poem.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Well, all my stuff is written to be read/ sung aloud Joe - thx for 'seeing' me - it is written to be both plaintive and thoughtful, gradually picking up speed with the refrain. Love your sensitive ear!
:)Sharyn
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It was funny how I saw it. lol. I guess I was picturing something, then I read your poem.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Beginnings and Endings' is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work is in my opinion, open to several interpretations. It was a pleasure to review a work of this caliber.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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'Beginnings and Endings' is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work is in my opinion, open to several interpretations. It was a pleasure to review a work of this caliber.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx your Grace! :)))Sharyn
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Sharyn, you're more than welcome.
Best wishes, the Duchess:))))
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
This is amazing, and it does feel especially lyrical. :)
We circle and spin in perpetual motion
and outgoing tides are the tides of all men,
the incoming tides just the breath of the ocean
and these tides will turn, and then turn once again.
I absolutely love this stanza.... Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful creation! :)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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This is amazing, and it does feel especially lyrical. :)
We circle and spin in perpetual motion
and outgoing tides are the tides of all men,
the incoming tides just the breath of the ocean
and these tides will turn, and then turn once again.
I absolutely love this stanza.... Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful creation! :)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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oh you have my favorite stanza there! That's the one that, as soon as I finished it, I went oh YES!!! and then started to sing it. I'm so glad you liked this one Gypsy - thank you so much for your wonderful six!
Blessings,
Sharyn