All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Wildest Rainbows"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from c_lucas
Life is neer o'er
We approach the distant shore
Holding each other hand
Wondering about the Promise Land
The race for each,nearly done
Most of it, we won
*******unedited--thoughts provoked by your words. Can we truthfully look at death and laugh? Well done.
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Life is neer o'er
We approach the distant shore
Holding each other hand
Wondering about the Promise Land
The race for each,nearly done
Most of it, we won
*******unedited--thoughts provoked by your words. Can we truthfully look at death and laugh? Well done.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Only in defiance, Charlie, only in defiance. :)
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You're welcome, Sharlyn. Charlie
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is very well written my friend a sonnet something I have yet to accomplish this reads beautifully full of imagery and feeling well done I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
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Yes this is very well written my friend a sonnet something I have yet to accomplish this reads beautifully full of imagery and feeling well done I enjoyed good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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thx so much Jill! :)S
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Sharyn,
Excellent, as ever, in rhyme, metre and form with great use of enjambment, good volta and closing couplet. In fact, everything that a Sonnet requires. I love your "sky of softest peach chiffon".
Best regards
Reg
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Dear Sharyn,
Excellent, as ever, in rhyme, metre and form with great use of enjambment, good volta and closing couplet. In fact, everything that a Sonnet requires. I love your "sky of softest peach chiffon".
Best regards
Reg
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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bless you Reg - high praise from the master! :)))S
Comment from Dawn Munro
Woman, are you trying to make me weep? (I'm a sap for beauty, too...) This is my very favorite form of poetry, and what you have written here is a masterpiece; a pure and elegant expression of love if ever there was one. Bravo, my friend. (And yes, I am weeping for the exquisite beauty and sentiment of this sonnet.)
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Woman, are you trying to make me weep? (I'm a sap for beauty, too...) This is my very favorite form of poetry, and what you have written here is a masterpiece; a pure and elegant expression of love if ever there was one. Bravo, my friend. (And yes, I am weeping for the exquisite beauty and sentiment of this sonnet.)
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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So funny - I was just reading yours at the same time! I love it that you love it! Blessings for your much-valued opinion and, of course, for the fab six! :)S
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Aha - see? I rest my case about universal vibe...LOL. Oh Sharyn, you are so welcome! And I neglected to mention your wonderful author's notes - I think it is so generous of people to spell out certain forms, especially if they are complex or new. In this case, I am familiar (though I rarely manage it!!!) but it's a kind thing to do on a site like this - my poetry (as you know) is simply me - mostly untrained, unstructured - so it's great to learn!
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well I was moved to do it by reading someone's blank verse entry the other day - and I had to ask her if she'd intended it to be free verse and had perhaps called it blank verse by mistake as there wasn't an iambic pentameter to be found anywhere. She replied haughtily that no, it was written as blank verse with "some attempted at iambic pentameter" ... I had to smile ...
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Hmmm, ah, it bothers me to hear it, not only because I know you are always tactful and try to help, but because (and here's where my insecurity shows glaringly about this), I have a very articulated style of writing, I think (at least most of the time), and it is SO easily misunderstood as being 'haughty'. Now having said that, I highly doubt you would, but it's caused problems for me more than once. And (pardon me if I sound 'haughty' right now) I'm DARNED well going to keep writing that way, 'cause it's how I write! (LOL)
All kidding aside, though, I do know what you mean - when I feel a piece is worth it, I will take a chance and offer help (providing I feel I'm qualified, of course), but mostly it's as I mentioned before - I'd prefer to skip, especially if it's someone I don't know (who will not bite my head off). LOL
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yes, there's a lot wrong with the "star" thing - I sort of wish it didn't exist but you just got feedback for feedback's sake. It would be more honest - but, let's face it, less fun!
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Well, yes, I never thought of that, but it's true - it is fun. But it is also a pain in the neck sometimes! LOL
Comment from 9999pool
A good sonnet about love and how the doubt of love surfaced and greeted the two lovers. Are they done yet. Is there more to share in their lives and to be together. Doubts give rise to contemplation and in a sonnet there will be a twist in the love story and instead of the norm of love and then not love, this poem took it the other way around. We got stung but luckily we got the band aid to heal the drift. So this is a bandage aid story of love perhaps? LOL.
Good write as usual and the words are weaved in nicely.
Hug and best wishes.
Ritchie.
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A good sonnet about love and how the doubt of love surfaced and greeted the two lovers. Are they done yet. Is there more to share in their lives and to be together. Doubts give rise to contemplation and in a sonnet there will be a twist in the love story and instead of the norm of love and then not love, this poem took it the other way around. We got stung but luckily we got the band aid to heal the drift. So this is a bandage aid story of love perhaps? LOL.
Good write as usual and the words are weaved in nicely.
Hug and best wishes.
Ritchie.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Bless you Ritchie - thx so much! :)S
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow what a beautiful poem Sharyn. I love the iambics of the Sonnet especially for romance and you did this sweet justice.
Perfectly pentametered in a vibrance of colour and emotion and the volta in the third had me worried for a minute...(I think thats what I dread into the future)...but it all came good and you and hubby get to drink each other in for another number of years in a brand new chapter...now that nest is empty. LOL My fave stanza the third. Superrrrrb.
Please have a sixer on me...beautiful poem mate.
Cheers Phillippa xo
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Wow what a beautiful poem Sharyn. I love the iambics of the Sonnet especially for romance and you did this sweet justice.
Perfectly pentametered in a vibrance of colour and emotion and the volta in the third had me worried for a minute...(I think thats what I dread into the future)...but it all came good and you and hubby get to drink each other in for another number of years in a brand new chapter...now that nest is empty. LOL My fave stanza the third. Superrrrrb.
Please have a sixer on me...beautiful poem mate.
Cheers Phillippa xo
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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hey Phillippa - I'll take it! yeah!! Thank you so much for your lovely six on this one! :)S
Comment from JM daSilva
I don't think you are done with love, but love changes over time. And it has to change because we are always changing. Maybe you didn't forget the person, you just don't remember the new changed person in front of you.
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I don't think you are done with love, but love changes over time. And it has to change because we are always changing. Maybe you didn't forget the person, you just don't remember the new changed person in front of you.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Of course! totally agree! thx Joe! :)S
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welcome.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I love your Sonnet - so apt for a girl from Hawaii! I found the images colourful enough to suit the picture, and excellent author notes. Giddy
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I love your Sonnet - so apt for a girl from Hawaii! I found the images colourful enough to suit the picture, and excellent author notes. Giddy
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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bless you Giddy! :)Sharyn
Comment from Curly Girly
Well, it certainly meets all the necessary requirements for a sonnet poem. It was a lovely poem to read, but I particularly liked the last two lines. This should do well - best wishes.
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Well, it certainly meets all the necessary requirements for a sonnet poem. It was a lovely poem to read, but I particularly liked the last two lines. This should do well - best wishes.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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thx so much Nicole! :)S
Comment from Tina McKala
Beautiful sonnet about the real adult love, companionship. You had wonderful flow and perefect rhymes, I loved the part with us commanding the earth and dolphins dancing to oceans' blues. Also the ending couplet. Wonderful!
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Beautiful sonnet about the real adult love, companionship. You had wonderful flow and perefect rhymes, I loved the part with us commanding the earth and dolphins dancing to oceans' blues. Also the ending couplet. Wonderful!
Comment Written 05-May-2013
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Bless you for your magic sixer on this one Tina - thank you SO much! :))S