Declined: An Earth Day Lament
a rhymed poem for Earth Day144 total reviews
Comment from Lise Deangelo
This is a perfect poem for Earth Day. I love the artwork too. Sawyer's going to love this one when he's older. I worry for the state of the Earth when he is a grandfather. I love these lines,
still test her patience,
as if she doesn't mind.
It is most clever the way you depict humankind as her problem child that she is always indulging.
Your brilliance as a writer and your amazing self shine through in this poem. Thanks so much for sharing :) Lise
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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This is a perfect poem for Earth Day. I love the artwork too. Sawyer's going to love this one when he's older. I worry for the state of the Earth when he is a grandfather. I love these lines,
still test her patience,
as if she doesn't mind.
It is most clever the way you depict humankind as her problem child that she is always indulging.
Your brilliance as a writer and your amazing self shine through in this poem. Thanks so much for sharing :) Lise
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Lise, thank you so very much :-) I worry too - one wonders how piss poor a job we can do and still let our grandchildren inherit breathable air and drinkable water... Brooke
Comment from hifein
we reap that which we sow. but the mother knows best and will show her disapproval, and we likely won't like it. you say it well, brooke, as we 'continue to test her patience'. when will we learn? best, hi
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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we reap that which we sow. but the mother knows best and will show her disapproval, and we likely won't like it. you say it well, brooke, as we 'continue to test her patience'. when will we learn? best, hi
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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hifein, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jade Lawson
Well articulated, nice flow and well structured verses. Also quite introspective... Your message it is so true and made me think.
We ought to value and preserve what God provides us, what the nature gives us, but humans take all for granted.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Well articulated, nice flow and well structured verses. Also quite introspective... Your message it is so true and made me think.
We ought to value and preserve what God provides us, what the nature gives us, but humans take all for granted.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Angel, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A very clever poem in honor of earth day Brooke. Everyone wants things to get better but they think rules are there for other people.They go on poluting etc. Good thought here. :-) Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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A very clever poem in honor of earth day Brooke. Everyone wants things to get better but they think rules are there for other people.They go on poluting etc. Good thought here. :-) Nancy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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Nancy, you've hit the nail on the head - everyone shakes their heads at how terrible things are, and then they neglect to recycle their own trash :-) Brooke
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Scary isn't it? I saw footage where the waterways were being contaminated daily by chemical waste and nothing was being done about it because of big money involved. Unrelated, but the chemicals being used by these big food producers are killing off the bumble bees that pollinate the fruits and vegetables.
This poem has excellent flow. Great artwork choice for this theme. Super job!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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Scary isn't it? I saw footage where the waterways were being contaminated daily by chemical waste and nothing was being done about it because of big money involved. Unrelated, but the chemicals being used by these big food producers are killing off the bumble bees that pollinate the fruits and vegetables.
This poem has excellent flow. Great artwork choice for this theme. Super job!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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oh, it's all inter-related! There is a documentary that I've only seen the trailer for that shows birds on an island that's a couple thousand miles from "civilization" - a naturalist was cutting open the stomachs of dead birds to show all the junk they had ingested, stuff like bottle caps. It is very discouraging. Thank you so much, midnightwriter :-) Brooke
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If it is that far out, imagine the damage here. Such an inexcusable shame. :(
You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from steevie
Its true what you say, Brooke. We need to respect our natural resources. They can be ruined like anything else.
A fine write, I enjoyed this poetic format as well!
steve
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Its true what you say, Brooke. We need to respect our natural resources. They can be ruined like anything else.
A fine write, I enjoyed this poetic format as well!
steve
smiles
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much, Steve :-) Brooke
Comment from judiverse
I do admire your imagery in this. Earth as the mother whose patience is being tried is excellent. Mothers do have limits to their patience, as you suggest, and when the time comes they will say no. Great rhyme in this. Very attractive presentation, and I like the way you've arranged the lines. Sometimes humans are "problem children" where the environment is concerned. judi
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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I do admire your imagery in this. Earth as the mother whose patience is being tried is excellent. Mothers do have limits to their patience, as you suggest, and when the time comes they will say no. Great rhyme in this. Very attractive presentation, and I like the way you've arranged the lines. Sometimes humans are "problem children" where the environment is concerned. judi
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
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Judi, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You're so welcome. judi
Comment from c_lucas
One day the fury leads to denial. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. This has a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2013
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One day the fury leads to denial. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. This has a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
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Thank you so very much, Charlie :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the way we need to treat the earth with more respect. i enjoyed reading this one...
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the way we need to treat the earth with more respect. i enjoyed reading this one...
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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sweetwoodjax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
This poem just gave me a chill. It should serve as a wake up call for most of us. I am quite sure that most of us take from the earth more than we give. Most times without even thinking about it. I promise I will be better in future, because I do not want to be given a timeout by mother nature. Great poem Brooke.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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This poem just gave me a chill. It should serve as a wake up call for most of us. I am quite sure that most of us take from the earth more than we give. Most times without even thinking about it. I promise I will be better in future, because I do not want to be given a timeout by mother nature. Great poem Brooke.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013
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thanks so much, nomi, and yes, I know I could do better too :-) Brooke