No Such Luck
Revision of an earlier poem145 total reviews
Comment from vfbryant
Thoroughly agree! You've done a good job of exactly what your notes explain as your intention. I like that you used so many specifics. People base their welfare or fears on so many things other than the guidance and love of God. Nothing touches those of us who belong to Him unless it goes through His hands first, right? What a comfort.
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Thoroughly agree! You've done a good job of exactly what your notes explain as your intention. I like that you used so many specifics. People base their welfare or fears on so many things other than the guidance and love of God. Nothing touches those of us who belong to Him unless it goes through His hands first, right? What a comfort.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you Bryant.
Comment from J. Dark
I really liked this. I thought it was extremely well done and a very good point too. Loved the phrase "unamused culture's insidious imagination". Top job.
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
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I really liked this. I thought it was extremely well done and a very good point too. Loved the phrase "unamused culture's insidious imagination". Top job.
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you Dark.
Comment from Onixxiya
I love the occasional rhyme in this poem and the message that luck is a fable.
"Ladders and black cats are too stagnant to be a bore"
"Too stagnant to be a bore", implies they are not a bore. You might want to look at amending so it fits with the theme throughout the rest of the poem.
I enjoyed the read, thank you for sharing this.
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I love the occasional rhyme in this poem and the message that luck is a fable.
"Ladders and black cats are too stagnant to be a bore"
"Too stagnant to be a bore", implies they are not a bore. You might want to look at amending so it fits with the theme throughout the rest of the poem.
I enjoyed the read, thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you On.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! A message for all. The poem flowed and connected well. The artwork was perfect and enhanced the read. This poem was thought provoking.
Thank you, harmony13
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Excellent Poem! A message for all. The poem flowed and connected well. The artwork was perfect and enhanced the read. This poem was thought provoking.
Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you harmony.
Comment from Pen&Ink
Well stated, Justin. You use an unusual, yet fitting rhyme scheme in this piece. God gave us free will. Silly superstition flies in the face of that.
Ray
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Well stated, Justin. You use an unusual, yet fitting rhyme scheme in this piece. God gave us free will. Silly superstition flies in the face of that.
Ray
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you Ray.
Comment from BLACKDYKE
Coinsidence is that by which
many live their lives Justin
but think rather of elves and
greblins. Luck? there is no
such thing! Your brilliant poem
answers all the questions one
might encounter through life.
And I just love the picture.
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Coinsidence is that by which
many live their lives Justin
but think rather of elves and
greblins. Luck? there is no
such thing! Your brilliant poem
answers all the questions one
might encounter through life.
And I just love the picture.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you Black.
Comment from fictionwriter
What a marvelous poem. It is true that superstition and fairy tales used to account for something, but in today's world not many still believe, but there are some. Well done.
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What a marvelous poem. It is true that superstition and fairy tales used to account for something, but in today's world not many still believe, but there are some. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you writer.
Comment from jb wade
Wow. Wow. Wow. Great message. I am glad to see you debunk the myths and people's ignorant superstitions. Again, great message. I like that color choice. It sure grabbed my attention. 'Because God has created a beautiful scene' is just perfect. Thanks for a great read.
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Wow. Wow. Wow. Great message. I am glad to see you debunk the myths and people's ignorant superstitions. Again, great message. I like that color choice. It sure grabbed my attention. 'Because God has created a beautiful scene' is just perfect. Thanks for a great read.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you very much for the six stars and the review JB.
Comment from kashmayank
nice message given through the poem,well written and well thought liked the art work and flow of words all the best for future
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nice message given through the poem,well written and well thought liked the art work and flow of words all the best for future
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you Kash.
Comment from Starlit Ink
This poem is so true. Fortune tellers are scam artists, and when you go to them you will have bad luck, because you're wasting your money. God is the one who will help us make our own luck, and give us the riches that we need. You made a great point.
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This poem is so true. Fortune tellers are scam artists, and when you go to them you will have bad luck, because you're wasting your money. God is the one who will help us make our own luck, and give us the riches that we need. You made a great point.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you Starlit.