Comment from dragonqueen1983

Excellent

the wnadering man is a good poem with a great pic. i liike how your poems flows as well as the sections that you gave it. well done

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thank you, Queen :-). I'm really looking forward to continuing this story.

Mike

Comment from Dall

Excellent

This was deep, it showed a life not so kind but one of our own making. This rhymed and flowed well. I enjoyed it very much... Very well done!

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thank you, Dall. I really appreciate your taking the time to read and review :-)

Mike

Comment from JW

Excellent

Great job in telling a story in poetic form. The use of description was fantastic. I could not help but wonder about where the future of our own world is heading, and will this be it's end.

Thanks for sharing this - I'm curious to where this story will go next.
Jonathon

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thanks, Jonathon :-). I do like to be as visual as possible with my writing, so I'm thrilled you picked out the description for mention. So glad you enjoyed the read!

Mike

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

This is rather a dark piece
in a way, but nevertheless,
so well written, the content,
the flow to the words, to
the rythm and rhyme, all excellent.

So cleverly thoughtout, Mike.

Margaret.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thank you, Margaret. I was trying to create a dark atmosphere without being graphic or violent; this one's all about the imagery. Thanks for your wonderful comments :-)

Mike

Comment from prophetess

Excellent

Excellent poem! It brings reality to surface in a lighthearted way, that doesn't offend. It is what has happened and what is happening. We should all be searching for our purpose, that's what life is all about. Thank you for bringing this very real message to us all.

Prophetess

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thank you, Prophetess. I'm so glad the meaning came through for you and that you found my poem had the depths I was trying to instill it with.

Mike

reply by prophetess on 19-Apr-2010

you're welcome

Comment from connied

Excellent

My first reaction is this is dark--really enjoyed the vivid descriptive phrases and the heavy feel of this, not to mention the rhyme and meter.
thank-you,

Now radiation suckles me
upon a nuclear teat,
the fallout fuels my apathy
and no day is discreet.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thank you, Connie :-). I was going for dark without necessarily being violent, so I'm glad the oppressive atmosphere came across. So pleased you enjoyed the read!

Mike

Comment from chaswriter

Exceptional

Mike - The immortal, wandering man who seeks a undetermined purpose. Powerful imagery you use in describing his plight. The rhythm is smooth and the rhyme feels natural. Awesome imagination. Am looking forward to reading more of his adventures.
Charlie

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thank you so much Charlie! Yeah, he's a cynical soul, in search of a destiny worth fulfilling. Hopefully he'll find it through the next few episodes of his life. Thanks for the great review and hugely encouraging comments :-)

Mike

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Well, Sir Fleedle, this is a great start in a series of your poetry about the Wandering Man. It kinda reminded me a bit of one of my favorite books by Cormac McCarthy "The Road". I look forward to more about the wanderer.
Indy :>)

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thanks, Indy :-). That's a book that's on my 'must read' list; several people have told me how good it is. I think the whole concept of how mankind would fare if all our synthetic evolution was stripped away in a heartbeat is utterly fascinating.

Mike

Comment from harleyangelbrat

Excellent

This is very good! I really like your poem. You take fantasy to the highest of quality. This is very descriptive and haunting at the same time. I love it! The flow reminds me of Edgar Alan Poe for some reason. Excellent read! God bless you.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thank you for the fantastic, flattering review :-). I like my fantasy pretty dark, and I couldn;t decide whether tio write a story or a poem next, so I went with both!

Mike

reply by harleyangelbrat on 19-Apr-2010

You are most welcome. I hope you have a blessed week. Marilyn :)

Comment from Sasha

Exceptional

I found this absolutely fascinating and very well written. You have done a marvelous job conveying the despair of your wandering man and I anxiously look forward to his journey. Excellent work with this one.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm now reading over chapter two, worried that it's not good enough :-/. Do I edit, or get on with chapter 3? Argh, a writer's dilemma!

Mike