Chip's Poetry
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102 total reviews
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi who dares do this...right to the edge of anything is fearful in fact ,but go to the ultimate ledge and dance your fear away, well beyond me,definitely.
Still thie write so short is full of beauty, determination and pith which need to be uncovered again and again.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Hi who dares do this...right to the edge of anything is fearful in fact ,but go to the ultimate ledge and dance your fear away, well beyond me,definitely.
Still thie write so short is full of beauty, determination and pith which need to be uncovered again and again.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thanks, Benny.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is gorgeous. But it's not always easy to get rid of our fears, don't you think?
I love the last line.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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This is gorgeous. But it's not always easy to get rid of our fears, don't you think?
I love the last line.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thanks Maria!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, Chip.
-Your note is appreciated.
-The syllable count
and rhyme are very good.
-A good topic, too.
-Fear can be paralyzing
to many people.
-I like your comparison to
being on the ledge, as
well as the personification.
-Good concluding line, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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-Nice image and
presentation, Chip.
-Your note is appreciated.
-The syllable count
and rhyme are very good.
-A good topic, too.
-Fear can be paralyzing
to many people.
-I like your comparison to
being on the ledge, as
well as the personification.
-Good concluding line, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thank you, Pam!
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You are welcome.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Chip,
You've written an excellent poem on the idea of going outside one's "comfort zone." It reads well with the abba rhyme within the 1-5-5-9 structure.
A nice touch of alliteration, too.
Excellent advice, but difficult for many to put into practice.
Perfect picture to accompany your words
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Hello Chip,
You've written an excellent poem on the idea of going outside one's "comfort zone." It reads well with the abba rhyme within the 1-5-5-9 structure.
A nice touch of alliteration, too.
Excellent advice, but difficult for many to put into practice.
Perfect picture to accompany your words
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thanks, Robert.
Comment from Lance S. Loria
I like the title and message. Consider getting all four lines to rhyme. "your fear a hedge". A rough idea. No edits or adjustments necessary from me.
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I like the title and message. Consider getting all four lines to rhyme. "your fear a hedge". A rough idea. No edits or adjustments necessary from me.
Comment Written 31-May-2019
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Thanks, Lance.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great contest entry, Chip. Great job on its message. I really enjoyed the added bonus of rhyme. Your art choice is perfect. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
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This is a great contest entry, Chip. Great job on its message. I really enjoyed the added bonus of rhyme. Your art choice is perfect. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 31-May-2019
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Thanks, Jan.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Chip Kuzborski,
Lovely piece of Self-Improvement Poetry meeting the desired norms, and depicting its theme in a very interesting way.
Impressive phraseology.
Smooth and enchanting flow throughout from top to bottom.
The last line is particularly noteworthy.
Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Hello Chip Kuzborski,
Lovely piece of Self-Improvement Poetry meeting the desired norms, and depicting its theme in a very interesting way.
Impressive phraseology.
Smooth and enchanting flow throughout from top to bottom.
The last line is particularly noteworthy.
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thank you for the kind words and generous rating, RP!
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Chip Kuzborski, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Alex Rosel
I like this four line poem. The juxtaposition of beyond comfort's edge (i.e. going beyond the extreme) and tiptoe on the ledge (i.e. staying just the safe side of the extreme) is excellent. It will likely subliminally pull the reader's emotions in different directions.
A good contest entry. Good luck with this when the judging starts :)
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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I like this four line poem. The juxtaposition of beyond comfort's edge (i.e. going beyond the extreme) and tiptoe on the ledge (i.e. staying just the safe side of the extreme) is excellent. It will likely subliminally pull the reader's emotions in different directions.
A good contest entry. Good luck with this when the judging starts :)
Comment Written 31-May-2019
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Thanks, Alex!
Comment from Dean Kuch
You have to possess a spirit of adventure if you want to lead an interesting life.
I believe so anyway.
Sure, those who take risks can sometimes get burned. But they are also some of the wealthiest, intelligent and happy-go-lucky people you could ever want to meet.
We must live for today because, God knows, there may not be a tomorrow.
Good four-liner, Chip.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
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You have to possess a spirit of adventure if you want to lead an interesting life.
I believe so anyway.
Sure, those who take risks can sometimes get burned. But they are also some of the wealthiest, intelligent and happy-go-lucky people you could ever want to meet.
We must live for today because, God knows, there may not be a tomorrow.
Good four-liner, Chip.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 31-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thanks, as always, Dean!
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Anytime...
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Discomfort Zone", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With a minimum of words, this talented poet has told it as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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"Discomfort Zone", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With a minimum of words, this talented poet has told it as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thank you, Duchess!
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Chip, as always, you're more than welcome.
Take care and God bless you,
the Duchess !(-_-)!
