They saunter....
Shadows past.115 total reviews
Comment from gypsycaravan
Such truths in here. Past regrets, sins, mistakes and choices will not have the hold on you if you keep your faith strong. Those old ghosts certainly work overtime sometimes, though. Nice work.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Such truths in here. Past regrets, sins, mistakes and choices will not have the hold on you if you keep your faith strong. Those old ghosts certainly work overtime sometimes, though. Nice work.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
Comment from jim lawler
A very nice poem with a smooth flow. You're in sync with your rhyming and your choice of words is excellent. I didn't see any typos and it certainly doesn't need any revision! n excellent submission! God bless and good luck! Jimmy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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A very nice poem with a smooth flow. You're in sync with your rhyming and your choice of words is excellent. I didn't see any typos and it certainly doesn't need any revision! n excellent submission! God bless and good luck! Jimmy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much Jim, for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very good poem and a very haunting one. I read it and it gave me goose pimples all up my arm. Your words were all that was needed to paint this picture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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This is a very good poem and a very haunting one. I read it and it gave me goose pimples all up my arm. Your words were all that was needed to paint this picture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to keep poem flowing from line to line
good alliteration in faith puts them to flight/fetid
and rubbed raw/rasp
powerful emotion with a strong spiritual message
I very much like your poem but I'm not sure it qualifies for this contest with its rules about writing about a particular ghost
Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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solid use of abcb rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to keep poem flowing from line to line
good alliteration in faith puts them to flight/fetid
and rubbed raw/rasp
powerful emotion with a strong spiritual message
I very much like your poem but I'm not sure it qualifies for this contest with its rules about writing about a particular ghost
Brooke
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thanks Brooke, I still enjoyed writing it, thanks for the thoughtful and excellent review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from IndianaIrish
I enjoyed your calling out the ghost of your past mistakes for your contest entry, Roy. I liked the myer, rhyme, and enjambment of your poem, and your choice of ghost is unique and creative. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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I enjoyed your calling out the ghost of your past mistakes for your contest entry, Roy. I liked the myer, rhyme, and enjambment of your poem, and your choice of ghost is unique and creative. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much Indy, for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
Comment from pipersfancy
Hi Roy,
Good, even rhythm throughout this piece, with strong ABCB rhyme scheme. Strong message of faith conveyed through uplifting word choice. I enjoyed this piece a lot - good luck with the contest!
Christina
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Hi Roy,
Good, even rhythm throughout this piece, with strong ABCB rhyme scheme. Strong message of faith conveyed through uplifting word choice. I enjoyed this piece a lot - good luck with the contest!
Christina
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much Christina, for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
Comment from Dean Kuch
Night always overtakes the light of day, Roy. Then day returns once more to claim the victory. It is an endless battle -- the constant struggle between light and darkness...much like life.
Well done, an excellent entry for the contest.
I wish you the very best of luck with it. ~Dean
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Night always overtakes the light of day, Roy. Then day returns once more to claim the victory. It is an endless battle -- the constant struggle between light and darkness...much like life.
Well done, an excellent entry for the contest.
I wish you the very best of luck with it. ~Dean
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much Dean, for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
Comment from patcelaw
I like this very much. I am so glad the ghosts of my past have been drowned in the deepest sea and are not remembered any more. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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I like this very much. I am so glad the ghosts of my past have been drowned in the deepest sea and are not remembered any more. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Amen Patricia,. Thank you so much for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
Comment from Eternal Muse
That was extremely well done, as far as rhyming, flow and imagery. Loved every word, especially the first stanza:
The ghosts that saunter through my thoughts
are wraiths of shadow's blight,
they steal my joy and torture me,
but faith puts them to flight.
The reason for a reduced rating is that the contest called for a particular ghost, not ghosts in general. I wouldn't want this work to get disqualified, so look into this.
Hugs, Y.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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That was extremely well done, as far as rhyming, flow and imagery. Loved every word, especially the first stanza:
The ghosts that saunter through my thoughts
are wraiths of shadow's blight,
they steal my joy and torture me,
but faith puts them to flight.
The reason for a reduced rating is that the contest called for a particular ghost, not ghosts in general. I wouldn't want this work to get disqualified, so look into this.
Hugs, Y.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
Comment from Ekim777
Nice; you handle your phrases, images and rhymes with aplomb. Despite this no image of the ghost appears clearly in sight. As I understand it, the ghost takes form out of our past that holds us hostage. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Nice; you handle your phrases, images and rhymes with aplomb. Despite this no image of the ghost appears clearly in sight. As I understand it, the ghost takes form out of our past that holds us hostage. -Ekim777
Comment Written 01-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review, lovely comments and excellent rating, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy
