If I Can't Make the Shot
a swap quatrain133 total reviews
Comment from elchupakabra
This was an excellent piece about perseverance and finding a way to overcome, which at the end of the day is what life is really all about. I think this is an excellent poem to help kids learn about overcoming obstacles and rising to the occasion when presented with a challenge. Great work as usual and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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This was an excellent piece about perseverance and finding a way to overcome, which at the end of the day is what life is really all about. I think this is an excellent poem to help kids learn about overcoming obstacles and rising to the occasion when presented with a challenge. Great work as usual and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Thank you, elchupakabra, thanks for your thoughtful response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
LOL! He's a pretty determined little fellow! This is a delightful little poem. It gives so many examples of grace under fire. I loved the repeating lines. The rhythm moves the images at a terrific pace. Sweet, Brooke!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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LOL! He's a pretty determined little fellow! This is a delightful little poem. It gives so many examples of grace under fire. I loved the repeating lines. The rhythm moves the images at a terrific pace. Sweet, Brooke!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Adrienne, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from jadapenn
Another super poem with the same positive vibe as the previous poem. I hope Sawyer is being raised in this positive spirit. It will be so good for him. Always to go it again or reach just that much further.
Thanks for sharing this. I feel all ready to go now. Hmmm, what shall I tackle first. lol. luv jada
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Another super poem with the same positive vibe as the previous poem. I hope Sawyer is being raised in this positive spirit. It will be so good for him. Always to go it again or reach just that much further.
Thanks for sharing this. I feel all ready to go now. Hmmm, what shall I tackle first. lol. luv jada
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Jada, thanks so much. My daughter and her husband definitely encourage Sawyer to live this way. They are such great parents :-) Brooke p.s. - I'm still waiting on a new chapter of your novel
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:) working on it. I hate rewriting that's why the chapters take so long to materialise. lol. Bad huh? :)
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Hey, I voted for you in the book of the month contest, so I expect results! LOL
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Lol, are you supposed to tell me that? :) Love you to bits. Okay, I'll see what I can do about that re-writing. The story should get more involved now. :) jada
Comment from Bryan G
This is a wonderful poem about determination. Once again you have helped me look at the world in better light. Thanks for sharing your gift of encouragement with us.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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This is a wonderful poem about determination. Once again you have helped me look at the world in better light. Thanks for sharing your gift of encouragement with us.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Bryan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Alan K Pease
If I can't find a Adewpearl/Brooke poem, 'l search FanStory through and through
She always comes up with the most charming, The girl should be of letters too.
Sawyer leads us to her with razzmatazz. If I cannot find Brooke he will be there
with lovely written jazz.
Not the best writing I have done but it is the thought that counts.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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If I can't find a Adewpearl/Brooke poem, 'l search FanStory through and through
She always comes up with the most charming, The girl should be of letters too.
Sawyer leads us to her with razzmatazz. If I cannot find Brooke he will be there
with lovely written jazz.
Not the best writing I have done but it is the thought that counts.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much for your delightful review, Alan :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Another very good swap quatrain. Perfect - and your first quatrain just right for the picture of Sawyer. Each stanza is good and does not sound at all contrived to fit the demands of the poetry form. Nice alliteration in 'dream a different dream'. An enjoyable read. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Another very good swap quatrain. Perfect - and your first quatrain just right for the picture of Sawyer. Each stanza is good and does not sound at all contrived to fit the demands of the poetry form. Nice alliteration in 'dream a different dream'. An enjoyable read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a hopeful poem saying if you try hard you can find a way around any problem. Very inspiring.
I like the format of switching around the first line to create the last line of the stanza. Is this a form you just created or is it one I missed.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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This is a hopeful poem saying if you try hard you can find a way around any problem. Very inspiring.
I like the format of switching around the first line to create the last line of the stanza. Is this a form you just created or is it one I missed.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Joan, thank you so much for your thoughtful review. I learned about this form, the swap quatrain, when Warren Rogers posted one. He found it at shadowpoetry.com in their section about different forms of poetry :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome. I must of missed it. I check out that website to see if I can try something I've never tried before. I learned a lot of forms of poetry from it.
Joan
Comment from Aussie
Where there's a will, there's a way! I enjoyed your swap quatrain. The path is not always straight and we all have to make detours to get to our destinations. Well done friend.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Where there's a will, there's a way! I enjoyed your swap quatrain. The path is not always straight and we all have to make detours to get to our destinations. Well done friend.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Kay - he really does have this spirit to him :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
What format of poetry is this, Brooke? I really like the way in which it's written, where the first line in each stanza is turned around, becoming the fourth, or last, line in the stanza. I know I've seen it before, but I just can't recall the name and am too lazy to Google it, LOL.
All that aside, this is saying in reality is that we should never give up, despite our limitations. And, if one course of action had been stymied, go on to plan B.
Very well done,inspiration in poetic truths.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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What format of poetry is this, Brooke? I really like the way in which it's written, where the first line in each stanza is turned around, becoming the fourth, or last, line in the stanza. I know I've seen it before, but I just can't recall the name and am too lazy to Google it, LOL.
All that aside, this is saying in reality is that we should never give up, despite our limitations. And, if one course of action had been stymied, go on to plan B.
Very well done,inspiration in poetic truths.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Dean, it's a swap quatrain, which Warren Rogers found at shadowpoetry.com. I wrote another one just a couple of days ago, but up till then had never heard of the form. I've taken a real liking to it.
Thanks so much for your review, my friend :-) Brooke
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You've certainly mastered it quickly. But then again, your adewpearl, so why would you?
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...you're adewpearl, so why wouldn't you?
Damn, I'm tired, LOL...
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
This poem had a great positive message for young and old alike. Great work with the pure rhymes and repeating lines. Also, the idea of "craft", learning to do something, held an important place, as it should. Great job--Ted
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Dear Brooke,
This poem had a great positive message for young and old alike. Great work with the pure rhymes and repeating lines. Also, the idea of "craft", learning to do something, held an important place, as it should. Great job--Ted
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Ted, thank you so much :-) Brooke