The Night
This poem describes the mysterious beauty and magical music of the night.139 total reviews
Comment from speakup
What a great write, simplistic and true. When you read the word melting, I instantly thought of a scoop of ice cream sitting in a cone. The pic is well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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What a great write, simplistic and true. When you read the word melting, I instantly thought of a scoop of ice cream sitting in a cone. The pic is well done.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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Ah!Thank you so much for your kind review.
I am glad that my poem reminds you of ice cream
cone..thanks once again.
Comment from invisible.touch
This is a calming and gentle read. You still the reader with 'senile', 'melting' and 'lullaby'. In a very short poem you have captured a vast illusory image. It is lovely. Thank you very much. invisible.touch x
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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This is a calming and gentle read. You still the reader with 'senile', 'melting' and 'lullaby'. In a very short poem you have captured a vast illusory image. It is lovely. Thank you very much. invisible.touch x
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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you'r most welcome and thank you so much for your great comment.I appreciate it a lot.
Comment from jmdg1954
When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby.
I haven't heard the moon described as senile, but it works here. I love the line, "Goes on melting in the sky", very descriptive and creates many thoughts.
Well done... John
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby.
I haven't heard the moon described as senile, but it works here. I love the line, "Goes on melting in the sky", very descriptive and creates many thoughts.
Well done... John
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your great review. I am glad that you like my poem.
Comment from Janet Foor
When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby.
What a different take on the waning moon.
Lovely.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby.
What a different take on the waning moon.
Lovely.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your great review.I appreciate it.
Comment from costellsgirl33
This was lovely! I've never heard of a moon described as senile. That was my favorite line. Short, sweet, and lovely! That is how I would describe your poem! Great job
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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This was lovely! I've never heard of a moon described as senile. That was my favorite line. Short, sweet, and lovely! That is how I would describe your poem! Great job
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your sweet review.Glad that you like the poem.
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You're welcome! It was great :-)
Comment from JessicaAshley
Very nice job! I have never been able to write this particular type of poetry, so kudos for doing it so well. Beautiful picture, by the way!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Very nice job! I have never been able to write this particular type of poetry, so kudos for doing it so well. Beautiful picture, by the way!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Hi Jessica
Thank you so much for this sweet review.Much appreciated.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi firdousy,
You have penned a fabulous 5/7/5 contest. Your word choices are expressive and the syllable count is spot on. The notion of the moon melting in the sky is a line I wish I had written. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Hi firdousy,
You have penned a fabulous 5/7/5 contest. Your word choices are expressive and the syllable count is spot on. The notion of the moon melting in the sky is a line I wish I had written. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Hi Chey
Thank you so much for your kind review. I am glad that you like it.
Comment from KathySueWiddowsAdams
I enjoyed your thoughts of the nights lullaby. There is a beauty in all things and the nights sound do have there own lullaby. Thank you for Your Poem, I enjoyed it Very Much.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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I enjoyed your thoughts of the nights lullaby. There is a beauty in all things and the nights sound do have there own lullaby. Thank you for Your Poem, I enjoyed it Very Much.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks for your kind review.Glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Redwing
This paints such a beautiful picture in my mind when the moon goes on melting in the sky. Night does sing a lullaby with all the singing of birds and crickets and such.
Lovely
Betty
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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This paints such a beautiful picture in my mind when the moon goes on melting in the sky. Night does sing a lullaby with all the singing of birds and crickets and such.
Lovely
Betty
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review.Glad you enjoyed the poem..
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is interesting, except I wasn't sure why the word 'senile' was used. I was trying to connect the idea of singing a lullaby to calm a senior citizen down but felt that might need more development.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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This is interesting, except I wasn't sure why the word 'senile' was used. I was trying to connect the idea of singing a lullaby to calm a senior citizen down but felt that might need more development.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you.
