Comment from Bloomer Burbs

Excellent

Hi the author

This poem is certainly very original and laced with creative imagery throughout.

Some excellent alliteration, especially the opening lines.

A unique entry.

I wish you the best of luck in the competition. Pete

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012

thx so much Pete! :)

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

This poem has a pleasing style. Verbal dexterity, with nice effects piling up on one another, to create a feeling of emotional intensity. Are you a fan of Dylan Thomas, by any chance?

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012

absolutely! and Gerard Manley Hopkins :)

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

love gone wrong. unfortunate after every breakup we become more cynical.but i believe in love as i believe in god.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x

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 Comment Written 29-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012

thx rebekka - fortunately, so do I!

Comment from Dollie Mason

Excellent

so beautiful and well written. You have done a bautiful job. and I like it very much, Sorry I didnt see any negatives to give you. Hope to see more of your work.

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 Comment Written 28-Nov-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2012

thx so much, Dollie!