All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 71 "Twenty-five Years"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from LilHippie
Well bravo, you chose a very different approach to a prompt regarding loneliness, I like that. Yes, how many couples live this way. I am 56, been alone for over 20 years, many issues, but I always feel better to not have romance because there is no one in your life, than to have someone and not have it. Your piece is well written, honest, a very different approach again, to the loneliness prompt.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Well bravo, you chose a very different approach to a prompt regarding loneliness, I like that. Yes, how many couples live this way. I am 56, been alone for over 20 years, many issues, but I always feel better to not have romance because there is no one in your life, than to have someone and not have it. Your piece is well written, honest, a very different approach again, to the loneliness prompt.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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thank you LH - being alone is not necessarily being lonely (luckily, hmm!?) - so good for you! Fortunately this one is fictional - I just get tired of all the moaning/groaning responses to these prompts! :)
Comment from N.K. Wagner
You've absolutely filled the contest requirements with your free verse card. Wow! How very sad to be so lonely (and so many couples are). Well done. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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You've absolutely filled the contest requirements with your free verse card. Wow! How very sad to be so lonely (and so many couples are). Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Thx Nancy!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author,
I take your entry poem is a satire poem met to be humorous what could happen after 25 years of marriage.
I just wonder what it will be like when my hubby and I get our wal-mart card for our up coming 60 years of marriage bliss
smiles and good luck.
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Hello author,
I take your entry poem is a satire poem met to be humorous what could happen after 25 years of marriage.
I just wonder what it will be like when my hubby and I get our wal-mart card for our up coming 60 years of marriage bliss
smiles and good luck.
Gert
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Thx Gert! 60 years deserves much better than a Walmart card my dear!!!! :)
Comment from c_lucas
There is no time to re-evaluate your time together. There should always be time to enjoy the life you are building. This is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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There is no time to re-evaluate your time together. There should always be time to enjoy the life you are building. This is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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thx Charlie - fortunately this is fictional, but I know couples where this is the way they exist ... :)
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You're welcome.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Twenty Five years. That is a rough period in a marriage. We had a short separation at that time. Didn't last long.I mentioned a lawyer and that put an end to it. It happens. Do you have trouble picking a card that say's the truth about your life? I did. That is tell tale LOL Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Twenty Five years. That is a rough period in a marriage. We had a short separation at that time. Didn't last long.I mentioned a lawyer and that put an end to it. It happens. Do you have trouble picking a card that say's the truth about your life? I did. That is tell tale LOL Nancy
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Oh yeah - those cards are always SOOOO awful!!! thx HC :)
Comment from misscookie
Nice couple all smiles
I love the words to your poem
To me its what I call a food for thought poem ....meaning after you read it you go Hmmmmm.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Nice couple all smiles
I love the words to your poem
To me its what I call a food for thought poem ....meaning after you read it you go Hmmmmm.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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thx misscookie - with such a nasty prompt, it would definitely be a food for thought poem, hmm? :)
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Have a blessed Sunday.Until next time.
Comment from Xelmyrion
I don't give out 6-star ratings, almost as a rule. But this...wow.
I have a BA in writing, with an English minor. One of the 400-level course I took was one that focused on multi-genre writing. It's something that is difficult to do well because it blends so many writing styles and genres.
This poem "feels" multi-genre because it blends emotion with reality and reality with a fantasy notion of true love.
Bravo!
Well done.
Xel
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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I don't give out 6-star ratings, almost as a rule. But this...wow.
I have a BA in writing, with an English minor. One of the 400-level course I took was one that focused on multi-genre writing. It's something that is difficult to do well because it blends so many writing styles and genres.
This poem "feels" multi-genre because it blends emotion with reality and reality with a fantasy notion of true love.
Bravo!
Well done.
Xel
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Then hopefully you'll enjoy my other work as well, Xel - when identities are revealed of course - because this is my writing style!!! yeah! thank you SOOOO much for your special '6' - I'm honored, and look forward to seeing some of your own pieces :)
Comment from rtoddwatts22
After reading so many "magical and perfect love poems" on this sight, it is so refreshing to read the truth that many escape with denial. Your words deftly describe the feeling of two hearts drifting apart over the years and seemingly content to live out their lives as strangers. Tremendous Job!
Best Wishes, Todd
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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After reading so many "magical and perfect love poems" on this sight, it is so refreshing to read the truth that many escape with denial. Your words deftly describe the feeling of two hearts drifting apart over the years and seemingly content to live out their lives as strangers. Tremendous Job!
Best Wishes, Todd
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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I get awfully tired of all those magical/perfect things too I'm afraid - and the "Lonely" prompt cried out for something different, yes? Thank you so much Todd - and a very special 'thank you' for your magic '6'!
Comment from MelReyn
Sigh, harsh truth of reality. This makes me sad. I thought it was well written. I think the point of poetry is to express emotion and you not only did that but made me feel it too. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Sigh, harsh truth of reality. This makes me sad. I thought it was well written. I think the point of poetry is to express emotion and you not only did that but made me feel it too. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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then I have been successful - thank you so much Mel!
Comment from artemis53
Wow. What a piece. It truly gets down to the core of a myriad of relationships. The perks of being together for the sake of being together doesn't seem to be a fair trade off for misery. Excellent piece.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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Wow. What a piece. It truly gets down to the core of a myriad of relationships. The perks of being together for the sake of being together doesn't seem to be a fair trade off for misery. Excellent piece.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2012
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thx Diane!