All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "You are ... Are you?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Oldsteamer
Went to a ten years after concert in 1970 and never came back. Got picked up by some dudes in aold Wonder Bread truck. Now they had beads baby.
Some kind of herb that gave me the verb and I got beads baby.
I'm hipper than I look. Got a cue ball for a head and we still got beads baby?
Cept they're 18 ct.
Regards,
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Went to a ten years after concert in 1970 and never came back. Got picked up by some dudes in aold Wonder Bread truck. Now they had beads baby.
Some kind of herb that gave me the verb and I got beads baby.
I'm hipper than I look. Got a cue ball for a head and we still got beads baby?
Cept they're 18 ct.
Regards,
- R -
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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and what's wrong with 18ct dear?? You can give ME the beads, baby ... any time you NEED, baby ...
Comment from ennahanid
Congratulations on your win, so darn worthy I gotta say. What a fun read this was of course I never liked the Beatles or Elvis come to think about it, although I liked John Lennon once he was no more a Beatle. I must have read it wrong as I didn't notice any 'cuss' words. Good Heavens! a Volkswagon, lost my virginity in the back of a little bug LOL
This was a lot of fun and you took it down the page in fine form and I thank you for the great read - Dinah
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Congratulations on your win, so darn worthy I gotta say. What a fun read this was of course I never liked the Beatles or Elvis come to think about it, although I liked John Lennon once he was no more a Beatle. I must have read it wrong as I didn't notice any 'cuss' words. Good Heavens! a Volkswagon, lost my virginity in the back of a little bug LOL
This was a lot of fun and you took it down the page in fine form and I thank you for the great read - Dinah
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Dinah!
Comment from Keyana4Life
I love your poem. Very creative and I love the flow. It is also funny, I can tell that this is your personality and I love the end of it, "love is all that matters, maybe because I got the beads, yeah? yeah" Love it.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I love your poem. Very creative and I love the flow. It is also funny, I can tell that this is your personality and I love the end of it, "love is all that matters, maybe because I got the beads, yeah? yeah" Love it.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx so much my dear!
Comment from EMB
This was great. I remember wearing a button in high school on my jean jacket (Levi's, of course) that said "I refuse to grow up." In so many ways, I'm still living by that button, damn it!
I enjoyed this a great deal, V.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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This was great. I remember wearing a button in high school on my jean jacket (Levi's, of course) that said "I refuse to grow up." In so many ways, I'm still living by that button, damn it!
I enjoyed this a great deal, V.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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well I should have had one of those buttons too dear!
Comment from artemis53
Of course I love it! i remember the vans of course and sitting on the floor flyin' into each other at the sharp turns. The stereos were the best with extra speakers for the outside. And of course, sittin' out at night around a campfire with a case of the "giggles" for some strange reason!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Of course I love it! i remember the vans of course and sitting on the floor flyin' into each other at the sharp turns. The stereos were the best with extra speakers for the outside. And of course, sittin' out at night around a campfire with a case of the "giggles" for some strange reason!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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oh you were a naughty thing!! This was actually WAYYYYY before my time of course ..... jk!
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Of course it was ;) Right up there with seeing Crosby, Stills and Nash in '77 after sneaking out of the house.
Comment from kra-z-ka-z
Oh how I relate to this! In fact I still have my fringed vest and floppy hat with the sunflower (fake) on the side and, of course, my peace sign necklace!.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Oh how I relate to this! In fact I still have my fringed vest and floppy hat with the sunflower (fake) on the side and, of course, my peace sign necklace!.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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aaah - amazing how all these folks are coming out of the closet kra-z-ka-z!!! we want incriminating photos!!! yeah yeah yeah!
Comment from Maria C.
You brought back some cool memories. The 'Hair' song, the Beatles, flower power, VW's, peace signs and the love beads. Yeah! Of course I was very young back then, but I remember it all. Good idea breaking this into two parts... the before and after...then and now. LOL
Congratulations on your win.
Maria C.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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You brought back some cool memories. The 'Hair' song, the Beatles, flower power, VW's, peace signs and the love beads. Yeah! Of course I was very young back then, but I remember it all. Good idea breaking this into two parts... the before and after...then and now. LOL
Congratulations on your win.
Maria C.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Maria - this was actually a mistake! I'd written something else for the prompt, then realized it was supposed to be funny and the deadline was fast approaching - so I put this one together in half an hour and threw it in just because I was too mean to waste my five bucks! funny,hmm?
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Well, I hope that five bucks made you a haul, cause this WAS funny. You did great putting it together in only a half hour.
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only a few entries - just enough to pop me up to Featured page though, so I was happy! Now I'm saving up to put the REAL one up ...
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I'll be watching for it...
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don't hold your breath dear ... the swimming pool's calling!!!
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I am so jealous!
Comment from yonashalom
LOL! This is so funny. Goodness, brings back memories ... when I was a child. I watched the older teens and young adults during these days. They were so cool. Yeah, the veggies they were growing were leaves. LOL :) Congrats on this. ~Yona
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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LOL! This is so funny. Goodness, brings back memories ... when I was a child. I watched the older teens and young adults during these days. They were so cool. Yeah, the veggies they were growing were leaves. LOL :) Congrats on this. ~Yona
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Yona!
Comment from donaldww
I love this poem, yeah, yeah, yeah! Great mango colour for the background, too. It's WILD!
But what gives with your Author Notes?! Marking down for naughty words?
I thought writers love words, naughty or otherwise. Sounds like some kind of wordism, perpetrated by zealous wordists.
Cheers!
DW
Great payout here, too. It must have taken almost all of your winnings! Thanks.
Later that same day . . .
I went back to search for bad words. Huh? Where are they?
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I love this poem, yeah, yeah, yeah! Great mango colour for the background, too. It's WILD!
But what gives with your Author Notes?! Marking down for naughty words?
I thought writers love words, naughty or otherwise. Sounds like some kind of wordism, perpetrated by zealous wordists.
Cheers!
DW
Great payout here, too. It must have taken almost all of your winnings! Thanks.
Later that same day . . .
I went back to search for bad words. Huh? Where are they?
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I'd originally written this:
"I admit
puts me in a snit,
oh shit, what the hell, I still ...
grow my own veggies, over the hill,"
but changed it to avoid more God Squad nasties ... I actually like the first version better ... what do you think?
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I think that's pretty mild. Well, I think language warnings on an adult writing site are ridiculous. When was the last time you picked up a book and saw "Bad Words Inside" printed on the cover?
You should be able to do write whatever you want. I like your original version. It has an extra internal rhyme. The new version is good too, just a little less spice and energy. I read the New Yorker every week, and believe me, these words of yours are MILD!
What has religion got to do with the word shit, anyway? Isn't their purview words that have to do with Jesus and the like? Are they the self appointed word police for bodily function and waste product words too?
Well, fight fire with fire. Mark 'em down if you see the word Jesus in a poem. That's swearing! Using Jesus's name for the vain purpose of attracting satan-inspired, filthy star ratings? What could be more egregious? It's bloody outrageous blasphemy!
Next time, if they don't have a language warning in place, it's an automatic 4 stars or less (depending if the poem made any sense in the first place).
DW
Comment from Healthyheartpoet
I love this poem its so nostalgic, it brings back so many memories. It truly deserves to be a contest winner. The sentiments expressed are so cool. Thanks
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I love this poem its so nostalgic, it brings back so many memories. It truly deserves to be a contest winner. The sentiments expressed are so cool. Thanks
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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thx Hhp!