My Little Muranos
the night life79 total reviews
Comment from marym224
Very good imagery here, victortouche. It speaks of luxury, lust, and lovely glassware. Some of your phrases are outstanding; e.g. My little Muranos, pouring light through me. Such power, atop the mammalian tree. Well done, poet.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Very good imagery here, victortouche. It speaks of luxury, lust, and lovely glassware. Some of your phrases are outstanding; e.g. My little Muranos, pouring light through me. Such power, atop the mammalian tree. Well done, poet.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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God, I think I'm starting to like the British.
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LOL! Yeah... we're not a bad bunch. Mx
Comment from Katchoo_Ledeux
I really like the style of this poem, it flowed beautifully and really brought me into the moment. Well done, and now, Italy just gained a few notches on my wish list of places to visit before I die. By the way, those muranos are so pretty!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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I really like the style of this poem, it flowed beautifully and really brought me into the moment. Well done, and now, Italy just gained a few notches on my wish list of places to visit before I die. By the way, those muranos are so pretty!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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And I really liked ur review. Thank you.
Comment from Aarondodd1989
Nice free form. I like the seeming double meaning to this piece. If it was by accident, even better. An odd choice of content but one that worked. Good imagery and solid flow. Thanks for sharing.
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Nice free form. I like the seeming double meaning to this piece. If it was by accident, even better. An odd choice of content but one that worked. Good imagery and solid flow. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Thank you very much. There are some double meanings/links to other thoughts in there. But I tend to write a little that way. Meaning not that I am so accomplished, but rather I try to evoke the complicit kaleiascope of feelings that come at once sometimes.
Comment from denhagan
This is avery interesting poem about the muranos glasses which contain the drinks in a bar. Written in the free verse style, the poem also describes some of the features of the bar.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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This is avery interesting poem about the muranos glasses which contain the drinks in a bar. Written in the free verse style, the poem also describes some of the features of the bar.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Thank you. You know, by the picture I used, (it is Murano like), it didn't occur to me that perhaps the natural interpretation of Murano would be the drink glasses. I think your deduction is very logical. However, for your information, the Murano generically refers to glass, not a glass, and the Muranos in my setting are actually the lights above the bar. By the way, thank you.
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You're welcome, and thanks for the explanation. Dennis
Comment from amahra
Oh such a beautiful glass; I've never seen one, but of course I've never been to Italy. I loved your poem and it was in keeping with real poetry which is to write about the things around you. Great job.
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Oh such a beautiful glass; I've never seen one, but of course I've never been to Italy. I loved your poem and it was in keeping with real poetry which is to write about the things around you. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Thank you my dear.
Comment from HeavenlyDreads
Thank you for explaining what a murano is in your notes. Very tasteful and adult poem. You vividly created images of nightlife in my mind. It was like an intimate poetic soliloquy. I enjoyed your words and the picture that accompanied them. :)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Thank you for explaining what a murano is in your notes. Very tasteful and adult poem. You vividly created images of nightlife in my mind. It was like an intimate poetic soliloquy. I enjoyed your words and the picture that accompanied them. :)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Thank you.
Comment from amada
Very ritzy night life, I see. This is an enchanting work of great images and much fun with the many repetions of "She crosses her legs. (Sigh)." :-)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Very ritzy night life, I see. This is an enchanting work of great images and much fun with the many repetions of "She crosses her legs. (Sigh)." :-)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Oh did I repeat...sigh...where was I? Oh yes, thank you. LOL
Comment from closetpoetjester
Drinkin' again? LOL Or perhaps the drink just beckons...me thinks the latter. Guess there is no better place to drown your sorrows or watch others doing it, than where the pretty people play and let their hair down. Seven you say? What a lucky set of peepers you have. LOL Loved this bit:
"Those legs just scissorin' and unscissorin' me." Hahaha...mmmmm...good imagery Vic. Careful, scissor are SHARP! LOL
Now mister...This does NOT sound right: "Such power the top the mammalian tree"
Might I suggest: "Such power (atop)the mammalian tree"
Me thinks maybe "atop" instead of "the top" as I feel it displays the Muranos prowess slightly better. Yes.
Anyway good job with your observation skills.
Would give you a sixer if I could only work out wtf a "Muranos" is. LOL...I googled and only got "Murano"...a style of vehicle. Got a funny feeling it aint a vehicle you is lookin at! Bahahaha Great work and thanks for the teenciest bit of spice in my day.
Cheers closet xo
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Drinkin' again? LOL Or perhaps the drink just beckons...me thinks the latter. Guess there is no better place to drown your sorrows or watch others doing it, than where the pretty people play and let their hair down. Seven you say? What a lucky set of peepers you have. LOL Loved this bit:
"Those legs just scissorin' and unscissorin' me." Hahaha...mmmmm...good imagery Vic. Careful, scissor are SHARP! LOL
Now mister...This does NOT sound right: "Such power the top the mammalian tree"
Might I suggest: "Such power (atop)the mammalian tree"
Me thinks maybe "atop" instead of "the top" as I feel it displays the Muranos prowess slightly better. Yes.
Anyway good job with your observation skills.
Would give you a sixer if I could only work out wtf a "Muranos" is. LOL...I googled and only got "Murano"...a style of vehicle. Got a funny feeling it aint a vehicle you is lookin at! Bahahaha Great work and thanks for the teenciest bit of spice in my day.
Cheers closet xo
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Hi Jester. Ok you're right about atop. Just a little three letter typo. (Ahem) I'm not looking for a sixer but did you read the author notes? You may have read the poem before I went back and added an explanation about the Muranos. That was nice of you to review me right away. It's been a little while between poems. How's down under?
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"Down Under" is fine thanks.
Hahaha
I go back to read your notes.
x
Comment from Lois Delaney
Victor, you have me yearning to go to Italy. Scissor legs! Never quite thought of legs like that before. Guess I'm from the old school. LOL Good work on this poem.
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Victor, you have me yearning to go to Italy. Scissor legs! Never quite thought of legs like that before. Guess I'm from the old school. LOL Good work on this poem.
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
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Old school always scissor their legs. Tee hee.
