CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from nitad
Interesting comparison of a nuclear testing to a divorce. Like the bomb, the ripple effects of a divorce can be felt for quite some time after the initial "explosion." Its effects impacting the lives of those outside of the family's nucleus as well as those living at its core. You captured it well.
Nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Nita
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Interesting comparison of a nuclear testing to a divorce. Like the bomb, the ripple effects of a divorce can be felt for quite some time after the initial "explosion." Its effects impacting the lives of those outside of the family's nucleus as well as those living at its core. You captured it well.
Nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Nita
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Nitad, thanks again for reviewing my work. Your very generous review is much appreciated! With regards, Sue
Comment from Shane Marquardt
Powerful stuff. As a writer, you left a big impression on me here early in the a.m. Kudos to you. You created a great mental image, and it was a scary one.
I appreciate you sharing, and look forward to more of you work.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Powerful stuff. As a writer, you left a big impression on me here early in the a.m. Kudos to you. You created a great mental image, and it was a scary one.
I appreciate you sharing, and look forward to more of you work.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Shane, I am so glad you liked my work! And thank you for your most generous review and comments. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from bard owl
Divorce is devastation with fallout affecting so many family members and friends in so many adverse ways. Excellent comparison! The emotional impact of your words is amazing. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Divorce is devastation with fallout affecting so many family members and friends in so many adverse ways. Excellent comparison! The emotional impact of your words is amazing. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Linda, thank you again for reading my work! And thank you for your most generous review and comments. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from P1
you always write with such passion
the images you paint here are not
very plesant but unfortuantley very
real.. great piece of writing. hugs lynda
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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you always write with such passion
the images you paint here are not
very plesant but unfortuantley very
real.. great piece of writing. hugs lynda
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Paige, thank you again for reading my work. I really appreciate your kind comments. And many thanks for your most generous review! With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from dportwood
Sixteezkid,
Your analogy is right on. Divorce is so heart-wrenching and difficult for families, yet more commonplace than a society can imagine.
Thanks for 'Nuclear Family' and the author notes.
Duane
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Sixteezkid,
Your analogy is right on. Divorce is so heart-wrenching and difficult for families, yet more commonplace than a society can imagine.
Thanks for 'Nuclear Family' and the author notes.
Duane
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Duane, thank you for reading my poem and for your most generous review! Yes, when one's family is "nuked", it is a long time before the healing takes place, as all are forced onto a new path of uncertainty. But, there is always hope in life and thankfully, that is what we all look for. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from rizaroza
Very creative and profound. I especially liked the last three lines, it brings it all together and accurately details a nuclear blast and a family healing.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Very creative and profound. I especially liked the last three lines, it brings it all together and accurately details a nuclear blast and a family healing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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rizaroza, thank you so much for your most kind review and comments. And am so glad you 'felt' those last lines, as that is ALL the hope! Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from honeytree
Great descriptive words written here. The words describe what has happened and is still happening and when will this situation stop.
"Ground Zero - shock, carnage, silence
Dreams lying flat, their branches brittle
Broken in scorched scapes
Ground Zero plus five - no dream alive
Hopes spiraled from their once sure destiny
Buried in a gray arena
Ground Zero plus ten - resurrection
Self-titled Survivors growing sprigs
Breathing the dirty air
The Outpost - dare they claim victory
Is the horizon safe to glance at
With its brightness and color
And Beyond - Its name is Future
Not looking back,
We call it Fragile "
Yes this world is very fragile with the weapons on this earth and those wanting to harm us.I felt the writer's words are brilliant and should be read by others.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Great descriptive words written here. The words describe what has happened and is still happening and when will this situation stop.
"Ground Zero - shock, carnage, silence
Dreams lying flat, their branches brittle
Broken in scorched scapes
Ground Zero plus five - no dream alive
Hopes spiraled from their once sure destiny
Buried in a gray arena
Ground Zero plus ten - resurrection
Self-titled Survivors growing sprigs
Breathing the dirty air
The Outpost - dare they claim victory
Is the horizon safe to glance at
With its brightness and color
And Beyond - Its name is Future
Not looking back,
We call it Fragile "
Yes this world is very fragile with the weapons on this earth and those wanting to harm us.I felt the writer's words are brilliant and should be read by others.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Honeytree, thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem and am so glad it resonated. And thank you for your very generous review! Most sincerely, Sue
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I am glad you likedthe review.All the best. Honeytree.
Comment from thickwig
Amazing imagery, fantastic! I would give six stars but I don't have any.
The metaphor of the nuclear blast should by itself be brilliant, but each and every line is powerful and packed with emotion. I really don't know what else to say.
This should be all time best.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Amazing imagery, fantastic! I would give six stars but I don't have any.
The metaphor of the nuclear blast should by itself be brilliant, but each and every line is powerful and packed with emotion. I really don't know what else to say.
This should be all time best.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I am most humbled by your very generous comments and review. To lay one's naked feelings out there, it can be tough, but sharing them and knowing they resonate with others is powerful in itself. Thank you so much for your words. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from mstad55
A very interesting analogy, but it needed an explaination. I don't know that without the authors notes I would have even considered it a family, divorce and healing. Again a very interesting way to look at the devastation of a family in crisis at the time of, going through, and after the divorce. Nice job. mstad55
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2008
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A very interesting analogy, but it needed an explaination. I don't know that without the authors notes I would have even considered it a family, divorce and healing. Again a very interesting way to look at the devastation of a family in crisis at the time of, going through, and after the divorce. Nice job. mstad55
Comment Written 20-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2008
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Yes, someone else pointed to this very same thing and I am now working on how to incorporate the meaning (without the explanation). Hmmm.....going to be tricky. But thank you very much for raising this issue; it is, indeed, very important.
And I want to thank you very much for your very generous review and all comments. So appreciated. Yours, Sue
Comment from Joan E.
Very creative device--comparing the devastation of divorce to the impact of a nuclear bomb and measuring of distance from "ground zero"
I especially enjoyed phrases like: dream lying flat; branches brittle; self-titled survivors-- and its alliteration, I also liked the capitalization of Future and Fragile.
Thank you for sharing what sounded very personal.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2008
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Very creative device--comparing the devastation of divorce to the impact of a nuclear bomb and measuring of distance from "ground zero"
I especially enjoyed phrases like: dream lying flat; branches brittle; self-titled survivors-- and its alliteration, I also liked the capitalization of Future and Fragile.
Thank you for sharing what sounded very personal.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2008
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John, I wrestled a lot with those capitalized words, but in my heart, they seemed to be a pronoun and in my heart, deemed necessary. I really want to thank you for pointing that out. And for your specific comments on the phrases you liked. And thank you for your most generous review. With warmest regards, Sue