CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from giftid3
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts, view and concept with the rest of us.
I enjoyed reading this and the simplicity of life that emanated from the words. I found this to share of a great wealth of knowledge learnt over the years of life and love, including all of its flaws. A new adventure has begun, ever so cautiously and yet ever so full of anticipation and excitement. There also flows a new experience never taken before, but one that once begun will spiral and encompass all who venture near, for they too will become caught up in the wonders now new revealed.
Thank you for the journey your words took me on and the imagery that came forth for me. Many blessings to you
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts, view and concept with the rest of us.
I enjoyed reading this and the simplicity of life that emanated from the words. I found this to share of a great wealth of knowledge learnt over the years of life and love, including all of its flaws. A new adventure has begun, ever so cautiously and yet ever so full of anticipation and excitement. There also flows a new experience never taken before, but one that once begun will spiral and encompass all who venture near, for they too will become caught up in the wonders now new revealed.
Thank you for the journey your words took me on and the imagery that came forth for me. Many blessings to you
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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I am so happy that you enjoyed my poem. Thank you so much for your generous review and beautiful, moving comments. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. yours.......Sue
Comment from LadyMary
Conquering free is always challenging and at times traumatic. Writing has captured well meeting that challenge to free oneself from devastating frustration and depravation of self-worth. Excellent choice of wording to express that triumph. LadyMary
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Conquering free is always challenging and at times traumatic. Writing has captured well meeting that challenge to free oneself from devastating frustration and depravation of self-worth. Excellent choice of wording to express that triumph. LadyMary
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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LadyMary, thank you so much for your generous review and comments. Your words only inspire me more. Much appreciated.....Sue
Comment from WordPainter
I love your poem. With 6 children, how you must feel a sense of hallowed ground you tread, knowing that little footsteps will follow and you will willingly set them free. Not sure if that is the impact you had in mind for your poem, but as a mother and grandmoother, that is what it says to me!
Bless you,
Lois
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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I love your poem. With 6 children, how you must feel a sense of hallowed ground you tread, knowing that little footsteps will follow and you will willingly set them free. Not sure if that is the impact you had in mind for your poem, but as a mother and grandmoother, that is what it says to me!
Bless you,
Lois
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Lois, I am SO glad it has its own meaning for you!! We, as mothers, have no words to describe the timeline of it all, do we? I most certainly appreciate your generous review and lovely comments! Much appreciated.....Sue
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You are right, no way to describe it.
Bless you,
Lois
Comment from okiboy
I enjoyed reading this poem. The flow was very good. It took on a very commanding sort of voice, which gave it the power required. Very enjoyable to read. Thanks!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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I enjoyed reading this poem. The flow was very good. It took on a very commanding sort of voice, which gave it the power required. Very enjoyable to read. Thanks!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Okiboy, thank you very much for your review and comments! Glad you commented on the "commanding voice". I had not thought of those words, however, it was my every intent to convey that feeling....the feeling of power and triumph. Thanks for highlighting that because it is useful critique for me to keep in mind as I go along in writing. Very much appreciated.....Sue
Comment from jamar2
A lovely piece to have read, the flow was good, and gives a clear message, can find no spags,or nits.
if I may suggest something, a picture to acompany this work would be idle. thank you.
jamar.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2008
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A lovely piece to have read, the flow was good, and gives a clear message, can find no spags,or nits.
if I may suggest something, a picture to acompany this work would be idle. thank you.
jamar.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2008
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Jamar, I have looked high and low to find an image to accompany this. Now that you have brought it up, I believe I will go hunt for one now. I most certainly appreciate your most generous review and very constructive comments. Most sincerely, Sue
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My dear I dont know if you have tried this one as yet, but may I suggest a site called All Posters.com there is a search bar at the top of the screen on that site, just type in what you want and see what happens.
Jamar.
Comment from Trena One Who Cares
Hi Kid this poem presents with good rhythm in the first 3 lines you loose rhythm in the last line of the first stanza. Maybe you could take the word (then)out and it would be smoother. Just a suggestion. Good poem. Trena
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Hi Kid this poem presents with good rhythm in the first 3 lines you loose rhythm in the last line of the first stanza. Maybe you could take the word (then)out and it would be smoother. Just a suggestion. Good poem. Trena
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Trena, I am reading it again quite closely and taking your suggestion on board! Thank you so much for your generous review and critique!......much appreicated, Sue
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You are very welcome. Trena
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Very well done... and a good message to all. Yes, indeed, yes YOU can!!! A fine writing you have here. BRAVO!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Very well done... and a good message to all. Yes, indeed, yes YOU can!!! A fine writing you have here. BRAVO!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Donna, thank you so much for your generous review. I am humbled by your comments.....As a new writer, your encouragement means everything. Regards.....Sue
Comment from jshep
This poem is very simply stated, but with a powerful message of treading a path for the first time and doing it with humbleness and the openness to learn without a mentor, and the truth being others will follow your path since you were brave enough to make the first footprints. Really enjoyed the depth of the message and it worked so well with the free verse and flow. Well done. Joyce
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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This poem is very simply stated, but with a powerful message of treading a path for the first time and doing it with humbleness and the openness to learn without a mentor, and the truth being others will follow your path since you were brave enough to make the first footprints. Really enjoyed the depth of the message and it worked so well with the free verse and flow. Well done. Joyce
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Joyce, thank you very much for your generous review and lovely comments. So glad you appreciated the part about others following the example. Much appreciated!.....Sue
Comment from mamre07
Yes, we are trailblazers in our own right. We need to 'step out of the boat' sometimes because we might be unaware of the invisible webs between our toes. LOL!! This is a well written piece.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Yes, we are trailblazers in our own right. We need to 'step out of the boat' sometimes because we might be unaware of the invisible webs between our toes. LOL!! This is a well written piece.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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*Laughing*.....excellent metaphor with those invisible webs!! Oh yeah....there they are! HA!!! Thank you so much for your generous review and great comments. Much appreciated.....Sue
Comment from S.Yocom
Welcome to the site, 6teezkid. This poem is short and sweet. You expressed in just a few words the trepidation one feels when breaking new ground and the pleasure one feels at having successfully traversed that ground. Nicely done.
Sally
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Welcome to the site, 6teezkid. This poem is short and sweet. You expressed in just a few words the trepidation one feels when breaking new ground and the pleasure one feels at having successfully traversed that ground. Nicely done.
Sally
Comment Written 17-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2008
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Sally, thank you very much for your generous review and comments. Very inspiring, indeed! So appreciated......Sue