Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

I bet you're in demand for story telling, Brooke. LOL! I love it. I've never heard of this biblical character before - what a great name. I can fully understand the poetic inspiration.

There's such fun in this story. The humorous use of the names, the way you portrayed their stubbornness.

There's also a message - a lesson to be learned.

Very clever. I really enjoyed it.

Av

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Av, thank you so much :-) I love the little ones, especially the teeny tiny youngest age group. Brooke

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

That's quite a handle--I'd call him Zee as well! Thanks for sharing your Bible School's lessons. I enjoyed your storytelling, along with your rhymed quatrains and alliteration of "s's". Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thanks so much, Joan :-) Are you still traveling or are you home? Brooke

reply by Joan E. on 06-Aug-2014

We are home nursing colds we caught in Costa Rica--even though the coughs endure, the trip was worth it! -J

Comment from angelface2

Excellent

A very cute story in a poem, Brooke. Good luck in the contest. I didn't know one was coming up or I would have saved one of my stories in a poem. LOL. Very well done. MIss Sally

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thank you so much, Miss Sally :-) Brooke

Comment from Kausar_Javeria

Excellent

Hello there~!
Ah! That is some awesome message you've conveyed in this poem. This is a story to remember.
BTW, I love the name Zerubabell and Tobias as well.
They're kinda different.
Good Luck!

JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)

(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Kausar, thank you so much :-) It is a cool name, isn't it? :-) Brooke

reply by Kausar_Javeria on 06-Aug-2014

Yup! ^_^

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Happy story telling.......I had a friend ...her name was Hepzibah ...she went by Zibah.......it's a Bible name too.....I like this poem and think your names for Sawyer are the cutest....well done
God bless

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Jenny, thank you so much :-) I love that name! :-) Brooke

reply by kiwijenny on 06-Aug-2014

Swash buckling Hepzibah lol

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

A wonderful tale written in perfect rhyme. My husband and I were storytellers a few weeks ago at our vacation Bible School. What fun --- but we didn't have Zerubbabel to learn to say.

Another great children's poem with a excellent moral.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

thanks so much, Janet :-) I appreciate your generous sixth star. Isn't VBS a great experience? I look forward to it every August :-) Brooke

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

Ah, if I could write tales
for children like you do, I
would give up working and just
sit and write these wonderful
tales to these lands of make believe
which one never gets tired of.
Well done and good luck

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Thank you so much, fastdigits :-) Brooke

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

This was a fun Poem Brooke with a good message on compromise.
Nothing gets done at all when everyone is stubborn. The picture of course is very cute as usual. Nice work. Nancy

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Nancy, thank you for your thoughtful reading of this story poem :-) Brooke

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Exceptional

'Z.....B......' is an exceptionally well-written and entertaining piece. This story carries an important message. "Don't put it off until it's too late". This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Duchess, thank you so very much for your thoughtful and generous response to this story poem :-) Brooke

Comment from RodG

Excellent

I would bet the people in your vacation bible school would love to meet Zee and Tee. A delightful story of two would-be sailors who can't agree or compromise. Definitely a lesson to be learned from this one, Brooke. Nicely done. Rod

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2014

Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke