Comment from Kaila Mari

Excellent

Well written 50 word horror and thriller flash. The innovative take on Jack and Jill is unique! The reader is engaged and certainly has a breath intake as Jill is "pushed" into the well; ...or is she not? Great job; God bless!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thank you very much, Kaila. I've always found nursery rhymes to be a bit creepy for the most part. I don't know why.

I truly appreciate your encouraging words and review.

Respectfully :}

Dean

Comment from A Matter Of Words

Excellent

You do make me laugh, my ghoulish friend. What a fun little piece that is a great entry for this contest. I wish you all the best with this contender. You and Avril are right up there in my opinion...Stephanie

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thank you very much, Stephanie. I could sure use a break in one of these contests, break the "bad luck streak" so to speak.

I really appreciate your encouraging review.

Respectfully,

Dean

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

First you got me with the picture. then the damned sort, short , short story. I just thought maybe he was brain damaged. Now I am starting to wonder about all the other nursery rhymes. Thanks:( No, really, this was great and a perfect Dean Kuch take on it. LOL.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, GW. I'm really glad you liked it. I wasn't going to enter the contest, but the more I read the entries, I realized there wasn't any which represented the horror genre. So, I thought, what the heck...why not?

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

I love it. I'm working on a Dr. Seuss story in the same way. I've thought for a while now that the old fairy tales could be a gold mine for new horror. And who better to bring them to life than you, the master of horror? Excellent work.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Uh-h-h-h-m-m-m, how about Mike Battaglia? LOL...

Thanks for the fabulous review. I value your opinion very highly.

reply by Michaelk on 02-Jul-2014

Thank you very much, that means a lot. You and Mike are on the same level. I aspire to write like both of you.
Someone else that is good at horror is billscott.

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Yes, I read a lot of Bill's work. He's very good.

You're welcome, Michael.

Comment from GE Parson

Exceptional

YUK YUK YUK Now that's more than funny! Sadly in my not so spiritual days, I knew a J & J story that a Christian shouldn't know.

I think most of these nursery rhymes originated as a political ruse.

Anyway you got my vote.
Your Friend,
Jerry

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, Jerry. I'm really glad you liked my crazy take on that old nursery rhyme. I appreciate your review and those six stars!

Comment from NurseBarb

Excellent

Dean this is an excellent and very creative take on Jack and Jill. I really enjoyed it and the picture is scary, but also made me laugh. You could do this with all the nursery rhymes. I loved it!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thank you, NurseBarb. We did do a co-authored book on FS once, called Very Twisted Faery Tales. I think you would have enjoyed it a great deal. Some of those poems still languish on shelves in my portfolio.

Thanks again for your encouraging review.

Respectfully,

Dean

reply by NurseBarb on 02-Jul-2014

I will be sure to check them out.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

It reminds me of that other rhyme-ding, dong, dell kitty's in the well...LOl.
Seriously? Would Jill really do that?
I wonder how many wells hold well kept secrets.
Clever, thoughtful and proof that you canreveal quite a secret in 50 words or less.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

I know of a couple, but I ain't allowed to talk about it, LOL.

Thanks for the fun review,, seeken58. It's always a pleasure to hear from you!

Comment from daeneam

Excellent

Hmmm What like? I loved it! The signature style of Dean Kuch. Quite short for such a thrilling and horrific adventure, but it is well done! Congratulations in advance. Cheers c", Mae

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Oh, no, Mae. You have apparently not been keeping tabs on my poor showing in contests as of late. Take the Story of the Month, for example. With less than five minutes to go before the contest ended at 2:00 am, Mike and I were all locked up with 20 votes a piece. I logged off, and went to bed. When I awoke and logged on the next morning, I found that I had lost by a single vote. Now, who loses a contest with under five minutes left to spare? Me, that's who!

So, no advanced congratulations. The FanStory Committee hates me more than my fellow writers do, LOL.

reply by daeneam on 02-Jul-2014

For me, you're a sure winner! hahaha

Sometimes, I get a guilt feeling of not logging on to Fanstory regularly. I missed to review, read, vote and get some precious members dollars. But, I'm so loyal, I review my favorite writer's work even for only 2 member cents.

c", Mae

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Ha, thanks, Mae. I review those who have been faithfully reading my work for two cents as well. I consider them friends. But, if I've recently "fanned" you, or even if I have been a fan for quite some time, and you rarely, if ever, read my work? I don't care if you slap i.35 worth of funny money to your post, 'cause I'm not wasting my time on you.

Comment from nor84

Good

Dean, for the 50 word contest, you must use EXACTLY 50 words. Better add one. Nice take on the rhyme. I could never figure out why they climbed a hill. Why didn't they just turn on the tap like everybody else?

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks for letting me know that, Norma. I will do that right away. I appreciate the review.

Comment from ProjectBluebook

Excellent

Looks like a "Scary Movie" picture. yep, this is about the fourth 50 word contest I reviewed. Bet it peaks out to 90 smackers. Too much competition for me. Be watchin.' the fun. Is Jack and Jill over the hill, yet? Good luck to you! you may need it, lots of customers. I liked the story. do loco

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Oh, I'm quite sure I will need all of the luck I can get, Wackydo. Have you seen my piss-poor showing in contests of late? It ain't pretty, I assure you. Take the story of the month, for example. Mike Battaglia and I were tied, with under five minutes to go before the contest ended. We both had 20 votes a piece. So, I logged off and went to bed. Imagine my surprise when I awoke the next morning only to find that I had lost by a single vote. Could someone (or, something) been sitting by, watching and waiting until the very last second to cast their vote for Mike? Sure they were, how else does something like that happen. Well, unless you're Dean Kuch, then it can happen at anytime, LOL.

Thanks for the review.

reply by ProjectBluebook on 02-Jul-2014

Don't worry, shouldn't be long until the contest, right?

reply by ProjectBluebook on 02-Jul-2014

You got my vote on story of the month. cheers... compie

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, wacky. I do appreciate your support and value your friendship a great deal.

Remember Kaila? Good kid!

reply by ProjectBluebook on 02-Jul-2014

I'm always trustworthy.

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

I see that, me too! :}

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

I'm loyal to a fault, even at the risk of shooting myself in the foot. I voted for Mike's story, Patient 325. I feel it's a highly entertaining and fascinating series. I guess most others agreed with me, LOL.

reply by ProjectBluebook on 02-Jul-2014

Boo ...

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

...Who?

reply by ProjectBluebook on 02-Jul-2014

My crystal ball sees good fortunes in the future.