All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "It Makes Me Happy!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Patti R.
Wow! What did he put in that coffee? :)
I feel so invigorated, so happy. An undervalued word if there ever was one. A surprise and so much fun to fall headlong into the tumble of poetic words finishing the poem. Just as the gull suddenly plummets.
You clever girl.
Patti
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Wow! What did he put in that coffee? :)
I feel so invigorated, so happy. An undervalued word if there ever was one. A surprise and so much fun to fall headlong into the tumble of poetic words finishing the poem. Just as the gull suddenly plummets.
You clever girl.
Patti
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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thx Patti - glad it made you ... you know ... h- - - - y! :):)
Comment from teafor2
visionary1234--WOW! You've taken the simple ordinary and
made it extraordinary; you've turned the mundane into ex-
ceptional; and lastly, you've given credit to the Source
for the miracle of it all. And because we here in the U S
of A, are so blessed, we take it too much for granted! The
page layout of strophes are conducive to an ease of read
and provide a quickening flow as the pace and stimulating
words gather speed of a babbling brook cascading down the
page via alliterations and sparse rhymes. An electrifying
creative write. teafor2
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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visionary1234--WOW! You've taken the simple ordinary and
made it extraordinary; you've turned the mundane into ex-
ceptional; and lastly, you've given credit to the Source
for the miracle of it all. And because we here in the U S
of A, are so blessed, we take it too much for granted! The
page layout of strophes are conducive to an ease of read
and provide a quickening flow as the pace and stimulating
words gather speed of a babbling brook cascading down the
page via alliterations and sparse rhymes. An electrifying
creative write. teafor2
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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thx so much my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Michael Wayne
I typically find that when a piece is adjective heavy, it pulls away from the intended message. Not so here, as the intent of the message as I read it was in fact to ask the reader to be aware of the many facets of life that tend to go overlooked during a busy day. I found this to be a pleasant concept and enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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I typically find that when a piece is adjective heavy, it pulls away from the intended message. Not so here, as the intent of the message as I read it was in fact to ask the reader to be aware of the many facets of life that tend to go overlooked during a busy day. I found this to be a pleasant concept and enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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You've got the message right Michael - thank you.
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from October21
So much wonder we have to see- you're right! If only we stopped rushing full speed with the blinds shut and peeked just for a moment... We would see the shining sun and the beautiful wonders that this world has to offer. Well said, loved your descriptions, especially: God's whole world is pulsing in sunlight:-)
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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So much wonder we have to see- you're right! If only we stopped rushing full speed with the blinds shut and peeked just for a moment... We would see the shining sun and the beautiful wonders that this world has to offer. Well said, loved your descriptions, especially: God's whole world is pulsing in sunlight:-)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thx Shenel - that's my favorite line too! :)S
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
yes my friend this is very well written there is so many things that can makes us happy in life we just have to be observant well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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yes my friend this is very well written there is so many things that can makes us happy in life we just have to be observant well done regards Jill
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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thx so much Jill! :)Sharyn
Comment from adewpearl
good internal rhyme in leap deep
and alliteration in run red
I love the illustrative examples of the things the speaker is grateful for like her thoughtful husband's kind gesture of bringing her coffee
excellent consonance of soft s sounds in pulsing with sunlight
lovely detail of setting with strong sensory appeal
this is a delightfully celebratory poem of appreciation :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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good internal rhyme in leap deep
and alliteration in run red
I love the illustrative examples of the things the speaker is grateful for like her thoughtful husband's kind gesture of bringing her coffee
excellent consonance of soft s sounds in pulsing with sunlight
lovely detail of setting with strong sensory appeal
this is a delightfully celebratory poem of appreciation :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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thank you so much Brooke! :)Sharyn
Comment from K.W.
This is excellent my friend. Love the content, the form, the incidental rhyme, your use of colors and alluring description. Well done:) k
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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This is excellent my friend. Love the content, the form, the incidental rhyme, your use of colors and alluring description. Well done:) k
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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and again! :)S
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Dazzling imagery, vertically challenged...popping
falling..dropping..I guess I'm in awe really by the whole kaleidoscope of emotions running riot, offset by a stream of consciousness full of colors blazing, sizzling indicative of sexual rapture ie. '..joyous periwinkle day?
Excellent work as usual and a pleasant interlude in my day. Thank you. Deserves a 6.
Regards:
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Dazzling imagery, vertically challenged...popping
falling..dropping..I guess I'm in awe really by the whole kaleidoscope of emotions running riot, offset by a stream of consciousness full of colors blazing, sizzling indicative of sexual rapture ie. '..joyous periwinkle day?
Excellent work as usual and a pleasant interlude in my day. Thank you. Deserves a 6.
Regards:
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Bless you Stephen, and thank you for reviewing! :)Sharyn
Comment from ZBaron
This was a great read, Sharyn. I love how it picks up speed in the change of form and the vivid details within the quick-paced ending. Adding wording that appeals to not only the ear, but the senses, with the "fizzing, popping, falling, dropping" was fantastic. Nicely done, as always. -Zak
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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This was a great read, Sharyn. I love how it picks up speed in the change of form and the vivid details within the quick-paced ending. Adding wording that appeals to not only the ear, but the senses, with the "fizzing, popping, falling, dropping" was fantastic. Nicely done, as always. -Zak
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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thx so much Zak! :)S
Comment from TonyD
Yes! The simple pleasures of observing the beauty that is all around us. If we stop and look around we would see the myriad shades of blue and how white show itself in so many things we can see if we would "stop running for just a moment ... and look around ..."
Tony
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Yes! The simple pleasures of observing the beauty that is all around us. If we stop and look around we would see the myriad shades of blue and how white show itself in so many things we can see if we would "stop running for just a moment ... and look around ..."
Tony
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Agreed. Thanks Tony! :)Sharyn