All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Our Game"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from kashmayank
This was such a strong and dark work,I enjoyed reading it the emotions were true and flowing through words a nice read all the best
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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This was such a strong and dark work,I enjoyed reading it the emotions were true and flowing through words a nice read all the best
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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thank you very much kash - it's good to write dark as well as light I think - blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn,
it's like my wife says, you've got to sleep sometimes!!! Not to say she says that at me, more to me.
You actually scared me a bit with this dark cloud looming onto your words.
No way I'm ever playing games with you, I'd be fresh meat for someone who could throw down like this.
I think you hit this prompt with a sledge hammer, how did you go in the contest?
I would say queen took all!! Great emotional landslide Sharyn! Loved it.
Kindest thoughts, no really!! Kindest thoughts
James xx
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
it's like my wife says, you've got to sleep sometimes!!! Not to say she says that at me, more to me.
You actually scared me a bit with this dark cloud looming onto your words.
No way I'm ever playing games with you, I'd be fresh meat for someone who could throw down like this.
I think you hit this prompt with a sledge hammer, how did you go in the contest?
I would say queen took all!! Great emotional landslide Sharyn! Loved it.
Kindest thoughts, no really!! Kindest thoughts
James xx
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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hey James - didn't win, but had fun exploring the dark side dear! Now I DO have to reassure you that I didn't turn sociopath overnight on you, ok??? (though I have been to these places and remember them - lots of grist for the writing mill!) I enjoy a variety of poetry, just in case you haven't noticed! :)))
:)Sharyn
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i love the spice of life you provide!!! xx
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of OUR GAME. Wow! The piece is great. The artwork is amazing and is absolutely perfect for you poem. I wish I had your talent, because you composed the ultimate revenge speech. Fabulous!! Carole
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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To the author of OUR GAME. Wow! The piece is great. The artwork is amazing and is absolutely perfect for you poem. I wish I had your talent, because you composed the ultimate revenge speech. Fabulous!! Carole
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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wow! Carole, thank you SO MUCH for your lovely SIX on this one!! Bless you - I haven't seen you posting for a while??
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I don't know who you are right now, but I've been gone for awhile. (5 months) I've got a story online now. Looking forward to finding out who I'm talking to.......xo
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
I like this a lot.... It reminds me of a warning my dad used to give me: the most dangerous people are the ones with nothing to loose. lol. It flows nicely and reads well, and your choice of art and layout compliment the piece superbly.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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I like this a lot.... It reminds me of a warning my dad used to give me: the most dangerous people are the ones with nothing to loose. lol. It flows nicely and reads well, and your choice of art and layout compliment the piece superbly.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Thx so much GS for your great review!
Comment from Opal H.
Your poem is so poignantly written it enables us to feel the negative emotions almost in a downward spiral, like the feelings are slowly enveloping you.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Your poem is so poignantly written it enables us to feel the negative emotions almost in a downward spiral, like the feelings are slowly enveloping you.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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You've got the idea EXACTLY Opal ... I start by saying I have no emotion, right? but from the rest of it you get the heat. Very perceptive reading - thank you so much!
Comment from Janet Foor
Very interesting take on the feeling poetry prompt.
Clever and intelligent.
Great picture and presentation.
Good use of alliteration throughout.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Very interesting take on the feeling poetry prompt.
Clever and intelligent.
Great picture and presentation.
Good use of alliteration throughout.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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thx so much JMF!
Comment from Gungalo
best think ahead
my king
outside the limits
of your black and white squares
take care tonight
my king
when you creep into my bed
queen takes all
kings fall
when they least
expect it
Oooh do they ever girl. Let them play at their games but the final play will be yours.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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best think ahead
my king
outside the limits
of your black and white squares
take care tonight
my king
when you creep into my bed
queen takes all
kings fall
when they least
expect it
Oooh do they ever girl. Let them play at their games but the final play will be yours.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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yep - got it Gungalo! GRRRR! Need I add that it's fiction and I'm not a sociopath???
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LOL and hehehehe!
Comment from artemis53
Very well done and I highly enjoyed your author note. Many will criticize the presentation of true emotions with accompanying reactions here.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Very well done and I highly enjoyed your author note. Many will criticize the presentation of true emotions with accompanying reactions here.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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They will indeed, Diane ... I already had one man tell me it looked like I was "trying way too hard" or words to that effect and he didn't like my picture - then gave me 3 stars. C'est la vie. I'm just following the prompt, and if wants more rainbows and flowers then he should stick to them, right? :))))))))))
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oooo, great write!!! Such horror inside, toxic and dangerous; but sorrowful too, for it's the Queen, talking to her King...fabulous poem! I won't even wish the author luck, because I don't think it's needed to win. A six, if I had it.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Oooo, great write!!! Such horror inside, toxic and dangerous; but sorrowful too, for it's the Queen, talking to her King...fabulous poem! I won't even wish the author luck, because I don't think it's needed to win. A six, if I had it.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Bless you, Dawn - we'll see! Fun to write evil occasionally - though I should probably add a note to reassure people that it's fiction and no, I haven't gone all sociopathic on them! Thx for your wishful '6'!
Comment from FLutterodt
when you creep into my bed
queen takes all
kings fall
when they least
expect it
Very witty writing. Very creative and enjoyable to read. The picture is also just fantastic. Great piece of writing. Well done
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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when you creep into my bed
queen takes all
kings fall
when they least
expect it
Very witty writing. Very creative and enjoyable to read. The picture is also just fantastic. Great piece of writing. Well done
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Thx so much FL!