All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "We, the Peaceful Watchers"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Visionary ....
Of course, you know that I am smiling at what you have written in your Notes at the end. "We - the Peaceful
Watchers" describes how I felt looking at the massive waves breaking on the Cape Coast knowing that one of my sons aspires to being out there with his board. I was a peaceful but mystified watcher, wondering where these young people get the nerve to take on the mighty ocean as they do.
Thank you for sharing these thought with us. As this is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Hullo Visionary ....
Of course, you know that I am smiling at what you have written in your Notes at the end. "We - the Peaceful
Watchers" describes how I felt looking at the massive waves breaking on the Cape Coast knowing that one of my sons aspires to being out there with his board. I was a peaceful but mystified watcher, wondering where these young people get the nerve to take on the mighty ocean as they do.
Thank you for sharing these thought with us. As this is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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thx Nanette Mary!
Comment from snemes
It won't let me give you a six or I most certainly would have. This was an absolute joy to read. I'm keeping this one, too. I love the whole thing from start to finish. Feel the joy of time when life was wild as ocean wave, and every breath had possibilities. That's exactly what I felt when I read your poem. Thanks for taking me back on this ecstatic ride.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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It won't let me give you a six or I most certainly would have. This was an absolute joy to read. I'm keeping this one, too. I love the whole thing from start to finish. Feel the joy of time when life was wild as ocean wave, and every breath had possibilities. That's exactly what I felt when I read your poem. Thanks for taking me back on this ecstatic ride.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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thx so much snemes, and your wish for a '6'! :) Sharyn
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Merciful? First attempt? It's bloody gorgeous, Sharyn. I could see, feel, hear and smell that surf. Wow. I ADORE that second to last stanza:
We, the peaceful watchers, feel the joy
of time when life was wild as ocean wave,
and every breath had possibilities.
Makes me want to run along a beach somewhere.
Very enjoyable read.
Av
Oh, and by the way... "Shakespeare, eat your heart out."
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Merciful? First attempt? It's bloody gorgeous, Sharyn. I could see, feel, hear and smell that surf. Wow. I ADORE that second to last stanza:
We, the peaceful watchers, feel the joy
of time when life was wild as ocean wave,
and every breath had possibilities.
Makes me want to run along a beach somewhere.
Very enjoyable read.
Av
Oh, and by the way... "Shakespeare, eat your heart out."
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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oh bless you Av! both for the magic '6' and for the veritable insult to Willy Waggledagger! I loved writing this one! :) SharynTh
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi visionary1234,
Your choice of art works beautifully with your words and your lines offer quite the vision flowing with ease.
Loved these lines...
Anticipation-inspiration's breathe
They laugh and slide down milk'n' cream laced foam
We, the peaceful watchers, feel the joy
of time when life was wild as ocean wave,
and every breath had possibilities.
My love, come with me, gently take my hand
Let's vow to live this way, from now to end.
Beautifully written and I wish you the best with this contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Hi visionary1234,
Your choice of art works beautifully with your words and your lines offer quite the vision flowing with ease.
Loved these lines...
Anticipation-inspiration's breathe
They laugh and slide down milk'n' cream laced foam
We, the peaceful watchers, feel the joy
of time when life was wild as ocean wave,
and every breath had possibilities.
My love, come with me, gently take my hand
Let's vow to live this way, from now to end.
Beautifully written and I wish you the best with this contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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thx so much mtnspirit, both for your lovely review, and for your magic '6'!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
I 'm not a poet as poets go. I write a poem and then decide if it rhymes and if it doesn't rhyme it's a free verse.LOL. I did enjoy reading. Thanks for sharing. Mary
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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I 'm not a poet as poets go. I write a poem and then decide if it rhymes and if it doesn't rhyme it's a free verse.LOL. I did enjoy reading. Thanks for sharing. Mary
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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this one's blank verse my dear - free verse has no rhythm, but blank verse is written in iambic pentamer - thx so much for reading & reviewing! :) Sharyn
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very good poem I don't know what a free verse sounds like but I know this is a good well written poem if that helps good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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This is a very good poem I don't know what a free verse sounds like but I know this is a good well written poem if that helps good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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this is blank verse my dear - iambic pentameter, non-rhyming - free verse has no rhyme or rhythm - but I'm glad you enjoyed it! :) Sharyn
Comment from bossladyone
I like it. You are a romantic. The poem is written very well and flows nicely. Your description of the ocean as people surf is awesome. I could imagine the action. The picture and color scheme add to the impact of the poem. Giving it more depth. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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I like it. You are a romantic. The poem is written very well and flows nicely. Your description of the ocean as people surf is awesome. I could imagine the action. The picture and color scheme add to the impact of the poem. Giving it more depth. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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thx bosslady!
Comment from Tina McKala
Sharyn, I loved this! Images of windsurfers firstly, showing their love, the unbound way of life, that the image of a "peaceful watcher" admiring their elan and wishing to live that way as well - not on surf, but with the guts. Great poem!!
Tina
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Sharyn, I loved this! Images of windsurfers firstly, showing their love, the unbound way of life, that the image of a "peaceful watcher" admiring their elan and wishing to live that way as well - not on surf, but with the guts. Great poem!!
Tina
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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thank you so much Tina!!
Comment from TammyGail
Lol.. loved your notes alongside your verse girlie - your poem was great not even sure if I would tell its your first attempt at this style you did such a great job weaving - best of luck in the contest - thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Lol.. loved your notes alongside your verse girlie - your poem was great not even sure if I would tell its your first attempt at this style you did such a great job weaving - best of luck in the contest - thanks for sharing
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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thx Tammy!
Comment from sunnilicious
Wonderful poem. I found it to be romantic and inspirational. Enjoyable to read. Excellent work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Wonderful poem. I found it to be romantic and inspirational. Enjoyable to read. Excellent work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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thx sunni! :) Sharyn