All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Butterfly in a Box"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from justatuna
If I could give you a 6 I would. I could probably give them before I read your work, but I'd be punishing myself. This was incredible. Don't know if it's true. Doesn't matter. It's true for all of us. Very well done my friend. Thank you.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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If I could give you a 6 I would. I could probably give them before I read your work, but I'd be punishing myself. This was incredible. Don't know if it's true. Doesn't matter. It's true for all of us. Very well done my friend. Thank you.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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thx so much tuna - yes, it has been true in the not-so-distant past - I had to write about it - it was driving me nuts! :) Sharyn
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Funny. I'm the same way. This really is therapy for me and it doesn't cost $350 an hour. Be good.
Comment from God's Writer
Bravo, bravo. It is not right to treat a woman like property. I am glad you are getting away or by now have gotten away. I am sorry dear one that you had to go through this ordeal. However, adversity and unkindness make fertile soil for compassion. You did a very grand job of expressing yourself. Great balance between feelings and emotions. You haven't lost your hope. Don't let anyone male or female take your hope away. Professionally written and I thank you for the privilege of reading this awesome poem.
Shalom,
Erick
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Bravo, bravo. It is not right to treat a woman like property. I am glad you are getting away or by now have gotten away. I am sorry dear one that you had to go through this ordeal. However, adversity and unkindness make fertile soil for compassion. You did a very grand job of expressing yourself. Great balance between feelings and emotions. You haven't lost your hope. Don't let anyone male or female take your hope away. Professionally written and I thank you for the privilege of reading this awesome poem.
Shalom,
Erick
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Erick! This piece has been rattling around in my head for a week or so. Every so often, I get to a point in my relationship, where I have to make a decision about my boundaries - i.e. what I am and am not prepared to tolerate within the bounds/bonds of a marriage. Most of the time, that line is not crossed. But when it is, I feel like a sleeping lioness (rather than a butterfly) - I'm so sensitized that it only takes a minimal amount over that boundary and I've got my claws out I'm afraid! Past conditioning, my dear friend. I'm married to someone who is not an easy partner - (though I'll bet he'd say the same about me! oh dear!) :) Thank you for your concern and good wishes - I'm a survivor.
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I know you are a survivor. I just hate to see woman having to go through this type of abuse. Especially my friends. I am glad you have set boundaries. By the way men treat woman, I am ashamed to be a man. Men are pigs and down right selfish. Thinking only of what they want and how to get it with the least amount of trouble. I don't and never have used pick up lines with women. I have far to much going for me to stoop to such animalistic behaviors. I do give women compliments, but those I mean from the bottom of my big heart. I am a rape survivor. So I sympathize with women greatly. However, I know all the meanings of the word no and I respect women. So if that comes up I instantly stop what I have been asked to stop doing. I would like to be your friend and being from the south I understand what you mean by the word sweetie. I will have to admit, it does make me feel good inside. You have a blessed day.
Shalom,
Erick
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And "sweetie" you are Erick - I can see your huge heart all the way from here! Bless you, big-time, for that - after going through all you went through, you're pretty amazing.
:) Sharyn
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Well Sharyn, going through what I have gone through has made fertile soil for compassion. Also if I can help but only one person with my writings. It makes it worth having gone through. I think that is why I love everyone. Most at different levels, but love is love. I like it when you call me sweetie. It makes me feel like I have one good friend. Have a beautiful week and a serene one.
Shalom,
Erick
P.S. I think you are the amazing one. To be able to write everything out like you have gives me courage to write out the horrible things that happened to me. I have since starting writing and I have moved mountains. Made ant hills out of giant mountain ranges. I have cleaned out a lot of my skeletons from my closet. I feel like a new man. However it is a journey not a destination. Anytime you need to talk my e-mail address is: weirk53@yahoo.com Feel free to write about anything at anytime. OK, dear one. I will listen objectively and give you answers if you so desire or I will just listen.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sharyn, your little box was like a cocoon for you. And you survived. You just never know if that I love you is the real deal. This is a great poem. So very well written. And it's a great picture. Linda hugs
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Hi Sharyn, your little box was like a cocoon for you. And you survived. You just never know if that I love you is the real deal. This is a great poem. So very well written. And it's a great picture. Linda hugs
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Absolutely, Linda - you have the picture perfectly!
:) Sharyn
Comment from Curly Girly
I really liked this! Not a nice story - but none the less, a truthful one indeed. I think most of us have known people like this at some time or another. I liked the layout and colour, the image was appropriate too. The ending was particularly good - it did not let me down.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I really liked this! Not a nice story - but none the less, a truthful one indeed. I think most of us have known people like this at some time or another. I liked the layout and colour, the image was appropriate too. The ending was particularly good - it did not let me down.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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thx so much CG - I think it's all part of defining your own boundaries. There's a certain point in a relationship where you say "no more" - like that "line in the sand", I guess. That line has been reached a few times now. So far, we've been able to declare detente and re-invent ourselves, but every so often I wonder if it's for the last time. Time will tell, yes?
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Excellent metaphor for an ever changing relationship. You're so right - dynamics change and if you don't adapt... well, as you say, it can be destructive. You paint a clear picture here of someone who is ready to take flight from a soured relationship.
Good work, as always.
Av
:o)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Excellent metaphor for an ever changing relationship. You're so right - dynamics change and if you don't adapt... well, as you say, it can be destructive. You paint a clear picture here of someone who is ready to take flight from a soured relationship.
Good work, as always.
Av
:o)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thx Av!
Comment from volcomfury
mutating butterflies, a very powerful and direct image that links well to your theme. Your flow and style is unique and clever as always.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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mutating butterflies, a very powerful and direct image that links well to your theme. Your flow and style is unique and clever as always.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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thx volcom!
Comment from Poetic Friend
I read many butterfly poems in my lifetime. I have written a few myself since I LOVE BUTTERFLIES. But this is the first time I read a poem using the butterfly as an analogy to a strained relationship. Excellent use of the metaphor. I love it.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I read many butterfly poems in my lifetime. I have written a few myself since I LOVE BUTTERFLIES. But this is the first time I read a poem using the butterfly as an analogy to a strained relationship. Excellent use of the metaphor. I love it.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thx so much PF! I like it when the unexpected happens - don't like to write in cliches!
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Neither do I, and that's the reason I appreciate your poem. I like originality.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem vividly conveys the emotions of one who fell, then rose--with a warning to one who might wish to try again to destroy her! Very good
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Your poem vividly conveys the emotions of one who fell, then rose--with a warning to one who might wish to try again to destroy her! Very good
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you very much Janice - you have my message loud & clear my dear :)
Comment from fairy77
Yes,I could tell you were hurt by someone.Sorry about that.This is very negative and surprised me!I liked the metaphor of the box.Nice job!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Yes,I could tell you were hurt by someone.Sorry about that.This is very negative and surprised me!I liked the metaphor of the box.Nice job!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Can't ALWAYS write light Beth - this was one that had been sitting in the back of my brain for a while ... I think most people come to a realization in their lives that there's a limit to what they will compromise on, before feeling taken advantage of. It's part of our building character - to define ourselves, our limits, what it takes to have self-esteem ... don't let it depress you though! Those moments need not be all-encompassing, and they're very therapeutic. :) Sharyn
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no worries Sharyn loved it.Went for an evening walk with mom.Have some pics for fanartreview.com beth fairy77
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oh good - didn't want to depress you!
Comment from misscookie
I enjoyed reading your poem
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
There is a strong message within this poem. And a great lesson to be learnt.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I enjoyed reading your poem
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
There is a strong message within this poem. And a great lesson to be learnt.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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thank you misscookie!
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My pleasure, until next time.