No Such Luck
Revision of an earlier poem145 total reviews
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Justin, you can't be more right. You wonderfully bring to forth the trouble that many people go through today in the world from Africa to Asia to Europe, America and all what have you. Unfortunately this deceit is limited to age, race, educational attainment or color. Good drop you have in this. It is either God for good or devil for evil.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Justin, you can't be more right. You wonderfully bring to forth the trouble that many people go through today in the world from Africa to Asia to Europe, America and all what have you. Unfortunately this deceit is limited to age, race, educational attainment or color. Good drop you have in this. It is either God for good or devil for evil.
ola thomas
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Ola.
Thank you Ola.
Comment from gifted$1
You hit the nail on the head..My adventure with God has far surpassed my dabbles in what you mention in this poem. He has created things in my life that a rabbit's foot never could produce. I think we all have it in our hearts to live a life of miracles..and what you describe here really does make the reader see that there are miracles around us everyday that go unnoticed. God's power can never be replaced. Nice one. :)
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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You hit the nail on the head..My adventure with God has far surpassed my dabbles in what you mention in this poem. He has created things in my life that a rabbit's foot never could produce. I think we all have it in our hearts to live a life of miracles..and what you describe here really does make the reader see that there are miracles around us everyday that go unnoticed. God's power can never be replaced. Nice one. :)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Gifted.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Justin. I remember you when you were going by the name Boz Roz. I have been here since 2004 and remember a lot. Your poem is sound enough...some Good rhymes and true in theme, but your meter is way out of whack in those long lines. Sorry. (Even Free verse needs that balance.) Bob
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Hi, Justin. I remember you when you were going by the name Boz Roz. I have been here since 2004 and remember a lot. Your poem is sound enough...some Good rhymes and true in theme, but your meter is way out of whack in those long lines. Sorry. (Even Free verse needs that balance.) Bob
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your honesty mastery.
Comment from deedee65
this is really a wonderful but realisticlly viewed poem. a real good job in discription and well written. I really like it. Kudos
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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this is really a wonderful but realisticlly viewed poem. a real good job in discription and well written. I really like it. Kudos
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Kudos.
Comment from Icky Boodles
I agree with so much of your beautiful words and disagree with even more but I think the strength of your words are so poignant.
I gave you the rating I did because of the conviction of your words and at least give the impression of a belief in a deity.
I disagree with everything that spoke of a god. But you paint a very beautiful still of your faith.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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I agree with so much of your beautiful words and disagree with even more but I think the strength of your words are so poignant.
I gave you the rating I did because of the conviction of your words and at least give the impression of a belief in a deity.
I disagree with everything that spoke of a god. But you paint a very beautiful still of your faith.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you very much Icky.
Comment from Flamingbush
Great message in this poem. I love it!
ladders and black cats too stagnant to be a bore - got a chuckle out of that.
I really like the part where you say "start living your life; don't let them make you view everything with skeptical strife.
I relate well to that skeptical strife bit. Only after I got a real revelation of God's love did I see how superstitious I was growing up (even being taught superstitions were wrong, somehow I picked up on them). When you're insecure, you tend to grab hold of any idol or rule or superstition you can find to hang onto.
I only found what looked like one word missing in this, near the beginning: into a world (of) old fables and folktales...
Thanks so much for this.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Great message in this poem. I love it!
ladders and black cats too stagnant to be a bore - got a chuckle out of that.
I really like the part where you say "start living your life; don't let them make you view everything with skeptical strife.
I relate well to that skeptical strife bit. Only after I got a real revelation of God's love did I see how superstitious I was growing up (even being taught superstitions were wrong, somehow I picked up on them). When you're insecure, you tend to grab hold of any idol or rule or superstition you can find to hang onto.
I only found what looked like one word missing in this, near the beginning: into a world (of) old fables and folktales...
Thanks so much for this.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Bush.
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You're welcome and thank you for sharing.
Comment from terry drake
You have a nice poem here with a good cadence and melody. Your rhyme scheme was well chosen and the message was iseal. I hope I don't step on a crack.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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You have a nice poem here with a good cadence and melody. Your rhyme scheme was well chosen and the message was iseal. I hope I don't step on a crack.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Terry.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, you are right. Superstitions almost always lead us astray and make us uncomfortable. This is a great poem, thought provoking and a soothing as well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Hi, you are right. Superstitions almost always lead us astray and make us uncomfortable. This is a great poem, thought provoking and a soothing as well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Thank you Belinda.
Comment from Khione Lock
This is really good. I love that you admonish readers to stob believing in luck and superstition and to instead believe in Jesus Christ. Excellent.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2012
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This is really good. I love that you admonish readers to stob believing in luck and superstition and to instead believe in Jesus Christ. Excellent.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you Khione.
Comment from S.Yocom
You are right that belief in luck is merely superstitious belief. I like your rhyme of fabrication/imagination. Nicely done.
Sally
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2012
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You are right that belief in luck is merely superstitious belief. I like your rhyme of fabrication/imagination. Nicely done.
Sally
Comment Written 31-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2012
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Thank you sally