My Little Muranos
the night life79 total reviews
Comment from DrCarter2001
this is a very clever poem, Victor. I like the specific references and the first person voice, making it more intimate and personal. As I read, I started to picture a Cuban restaurant in Philly called Havana, though of course the Muranos are not used much there. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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this is a very clever poem, Victor. I like the specific references and the first person voice, making it more intimate and personal. As I read, I started to picture a Cuban restaurant in Philly called Havana, though of course the Muranos are not used much there. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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I think I already want to visit this place. Just to stop. Just to see. Thanks.
Comment from Carolyn 12
The picture you used is gogeous..I like the poem even though it has such a sad feeling to it for me..As I read the words and followed along I pictured a girl alone in a bar and her crossing her legs to pull attention to her that she is alone.. It was easy to see the casablanca fans moving the heavy air around..Thank you for sharing..
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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The picture you used is gogeous..I like the poem even though it has such a sad feeling to it for me..As I read the words and followed along I pictured a girl alone in a bar and her crossing her legs to pull attention to her that she is alone.. It was easy to see the casablanca fans moving the heavy air around..Thank you for sharing..
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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That's funny, I thought the feline was hunting the prey. LOL Thank you.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'My Little M-----' is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's Friday night hideaway sounds like an intriguing place to visit. It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
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'My Little M-----' is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's Friday night hideaway sounds like an intriguing place to visit. It was a pleasure to review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Oh honey, I'm sure they'd make a dent in the chair line for you.
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I hope so you smoothie. Is there a chance of you buying me a Harvey Wallbanger?
Comment from Cheryl Daphine
Good free verse. I had never heard of a Muranos. Don't get around much. Your poem is full of vivid pictures of the night life.Great descriptions evoke a picture of the scene.The referral to the fan,further details the atmosphere. Well written.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Good free verse. I had never heard of a Muranos. Don't get around much. Your poem is full of vivid pictures of the night life.Great descriptions evoke a picture of the scene.The referral to the fan,further details the atmosphere. Well written.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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You like to write short stories as poems. Hmmm...I don't think I can do anything else. So I agree. LOL Thank you.
Comment from rawahymis
Well expressed 'muranos', Victor.
Your poem is sensual and informative.
In a few lines you've not only enlightened us about muranos, but transfixed them in history, and also elevated them to art and sensuality.
Beautiful imagery and setting, immediately transporting the reader to a romantic atmosphere and a 'cool blue' mood.
The crossing of the legs is echoed by the
legs
just scissorin'
and unscissorin' me;
adding a sense of mental strife with the overly exciting image.
Best wishes,
rawahy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Well expressed 'muranos', Victor.
Your poem is sensual and informative.
In a few lines you've not only enlightened us about muranos, but transfixed them in history, and also elevated them to art and sensuality.
Beautiful imagery and setting, immediately transporting the reader to a romantic atmosphere and a 'cool blue' mood.
The crossing of the legs is echoed by the
legs
just scissorin'
and unscissorin' me;
adding a sense of mental strife with the overly exciting image.
Best wishes,
rawahy
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Exactly. And I guess I won't have to have my testosterone levels checked yet. Thank you.
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
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A very well written poem with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Hi Charlie. Thanks.
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You're welcome, Victor. Chalie.
Comment from the blue pixel
All this poem needed was Lauren Bacall and Humphrey Bogart, Victor. Through the smoky atmosphere (strictly in my imagination), I see ladies with long cigarette holders and enticing cleavages (again in my imagination). When ladies cross and uncross their legs my friend, it is an invitation laced with teasing. Another amazing well painted picture for me to colour in even more than you already have. xx Pix (Carol)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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All this poem needed was Lauren Bacall and Humphrey Bogart, Victor. Through the smoky atmosphere (strictly in my imagination), I see ladies with long cigarette holders and enticing cleavages (again in my imagination). When ladies cross and uncross their legs my friend, it is an invitation laced with teasing. Another amazing well painted picture for me to colour in even more than you already have. xx Pix (Carol)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Laced is such an interesting word used in conjunction with legs and eroticism. Thank you for reading this. Now where's my pixie dust?
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The pixie dust is on its way in a little blue pixel envelope. xx
Comment from misscookie
ThAT PICTURE HAS SO MANY BEAUTIFUL COLORS I WOULD LOVE TO HAVE THAT IN MY FRONT DOOR WINDOW PANE.
I THOUGHT IT WAS A PERFECT MATCH FOR YOUR POEM.
I VISION MYSELF IN THAT COZY PLACE LISTENING TO THE MUSIC TALKING TO THE PEOPLE AND, ENJOYING A NICE COOL DRINK.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING.
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ThAT PICTURE HAS SO MANY BEAUTIFUL COLORS I WOULD LOVE TO HAVE THAT IN MY FRONT DOOR WINDOW PANE.
I THOUGHT IT WAS A PERFECT MATCH FOR YOUR POEM.
I VISION MYSELF IN THAT COZY PLACE LISTENING TO THE MUSIC TALKING TO THE PEOPLE AND, ENJOYING A NICE COOL DRINK.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Thank you Miss Cookie.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Chris Tee
Absolutely gorgeous!! I like this poem and it feels so free. and frolicking here old chap.
This is a rather splendid piece of poetic art here my dear fellow.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Absolutely gorgeous!! I like this poem and it feels so free. and frolicking here old chap.
This is a rather splendid piece of poetic art here my dear fellow.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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I'm movin' to South Africa.
Comment from fairy77
That was great it was nice to see you where you belong on first page!Well written and rhymed.You are a true romantic poet!I liked the detail and it was fun well done!Beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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That was great it was nice to see you where you belong on first page!Well written and rhymed.You are a true romantic poet!I liked the detail and it was fun well done!Beth fairy77.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2011
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Thanks for the support Beth. I'm glad you liked it.