The Ottava Rima
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Comment from bnd-writenow
Thanks for the lesson in your notes - always great to learn about different styles.
I love this poem. I grew up on a farm and next to woods in northwestern New Jersey (and Pa., too).
I remember the red dogwood as well as Johnny-Jump-Ups. They're one of my favorite flowers. Their little faces cast a spell on me as a tot and I love them still. Whenever I move somewhere new, I always plant them!
Oh, yeah! I'm looking forward to a May (or June up here) like this, and not all that cold, dreary rain like last year...
Thanks again for the lesson and the vivid visual memories.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thanks for the lesson in your notes - always great to learn about different styles.
I love this poem. I grew up on a farm and next to woods in northwestern New Jersey (and Pa., too).
I remember the red dogwood as well as Johnny-Jump-Ups. They're one of my favorite flowers. Their little faces cast a spell on me as a tot and I love them still. Whenever I move somewhere new, I always plant them!
Oh, yeah! I'm looking forward to a May (or June up here) like this, and not all that cold, dreary rain like last year...
Thanks again for the lesson and the vivid visual memories.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, bnd-writenow - I'm so glad you know this tree and flower - lots of reviewers don't. I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
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Who could forget such beauty?
...and remember those flowers singing in Alice in Wonderland? Violas and Pansies...
Comment from words
I knew I would love it from the first line, "dog woods dressing in frocks of party pink"!
Such a blithe spirit at work here.
I can just see the hummingbirds with the tiniest of martini glasses and that intsy teensy olive on the teeny-tiny tooth pick.
Oh, this was just too much fun. I am putting in a 911 call to the fun police. They should be knocking on you door any minute.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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I knew I would love it from the first line, "dog woods dressing in frocks of party pink"!
Such a blithe spirit at work here.
I can just see the hummingbirds with the tiniest of martini glasses and that intsy teensy olive on the teeny-tiny tooth pick.
Oh, this was just too much fun. I am putting in a 911 call to the fun police. They should be knocking on you door any minute.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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You're one funny lady - I'm laughing my head off over your review. Thanks, Diane. Brooke :-)
Comment from Deejharrington
This is such a happy and upbeat poem. I loved the idea of the birds and flowers getting all ready for May. It creates a real picture of spring in the reader's mind. A joy to read.
deb
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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This is such a happy and upbeat poem. I loved the idea of the birds and flowers getting all ready for May. It creates a real picture of spring in the reader's mind. A joy to read.
deb
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Deb. So glad you enjoyed my tribute to my favorite month :-) Brooke
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you're welcome
deb
Comment from sgalletti
Hi Brooke! Simply fabulous writing. And, of course, I cannot give you a six because Eddy has decided I've given you enough! So, I send you a six hug. The imagery is wonderful and so May. The ottava rima is elegantly and perfectly written--and not an easy form by any means. You always raise the bar for all of us! Thank you, Sue
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Hi Brooke! Simply fabulous writing. And, of course, I cannot give you a six because Eddy has decided I've given you enough! So, I send you a six hug. The imagery is wonderful and so May. The ottava rima is elegantly and perfectly written--and not an easy form by any means. You always raise the bar for all of us! Thank you, Sue
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Sue, for your wonderful wish for a six and your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from winsome
As always a very lovely poem about the month of May. Dogwoods are already blooming here and their petals are white. I guess I just don't know enough about dogwoods.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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As always a very lovely poem about the month of May. Dogwoods are already blooming here and their petals are white. I guess I just don't know enough about dogwoods.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Winsome, in Pennsylvania we have both white and pink dogwoods - the pink ones are a wonderful, deep shade and when both white and pink trees grow side by side, the sight is beyond compare. The dogwood groves of Valley Forge National Park are one of the best places to see this, though in my childhood yard we had one tree of each color too. You should google it :-) Thanks so much :-) Brooke
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I am in New Jersey guess we are neighbors. I think that some of the blossoming pink trees here are probably dogwood also. I just always thougth they were cherry blossoms. Thanks for the info. Jackie
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Jackie - the cherry blossoms are smaller and in clusters - the pink dogwood blossoms are bigger and have the same shape as the white ones. You'll have to take a look :-)
Comment from Lou67
Fits the style you were attempting, flowa well, theme is easy to understand, if a little familier. On the whole a well written poem.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Fits the style you were attempting, flowa well, theme is easy to understand, if a little familier. On the whole a well written poem.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Lou, for reviewing :-) Brooke
Comment from AnnaLinda
Brooke,
Your ottava rima is brimming full of
great alliteration, even your title!
I also enjoyed your presonifications
in this poem as well as your pleasant
rhymes.
I am wondering, what is 'Johnny-Jump-Up'??
This is a beautiful piece celebrating May!
Linda
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
Your ottava rima is brimming full of
great alliteration, even your title!
I also enjoyed your presonifications
in this poem as well as your pleasant
rhymes.
I am wondering, what is 'Johnny-Jump-Up'??
This is a beautiful piece celebrating May!
Linda
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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You're the second person to ask about Johnny Jump Up - I had better add it to my notes - it is a wild pansy/violet that blooms in spring and early summer. You should google - it is quite pretty. Thanks, Linda. Brooke :-)
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You are welcome! I thought that might be the
case.
Linda
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - All right! Bonus reviewing time. The 'ottava rima' sounds like the name of an Italian opera. Are your dogwood's flowers pink? Down here they're white. And I assume Johnny-Jump-Up is a flower. This poem celebrates the coming of May flowers. Well done and I enjoyed it.
Charlie
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Brooke - All right! Bonus reviewing time. The 'ottava rima' sounds like the name of an Italian opera. Are your dogwood's flowers pink? Down here they're white. And I assume Johnny-Jump-Up is a flower. This poem celebrates the coming of May flowers. Well done and I enjoyed it.
Charlie
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Charlie, we have more white dogwoods than pink, but the pink is not rare either - it is really beautiful when white and pink dogwoods are planted close to each other, and the Johnny Jump Up is a wild violet/pansy. Thanks so much for reviewing :-) Brooke
Comment from hotstuff
This poem is gorgeous,. I love the way you have started by personalising the flowers;
'As dogwoods dress in frocks of party pink
and honeysuckles don their finest scent'
Your poem really does make the month of May sound so exciting for us nature lovers.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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This poem is gorgeous,. I love the way you have started by personalising the flowers;
'As dogwoods dress in frocks of party pink
and honeysuckles don their finest scent'
Your poem really does make the month of May sound so exciting for us nature lovers.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2010
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Thank you, hotstuff - I just love May :-) Brooke
Comment from Razz
Wonderful poem.
So beautifully written and expressed.
So very smooth...velvet smooth.
Very fluid.
Loved the colores and photo.
Great writing:
As dogwoods dress in frocks of party pink
and honeysuckles don their finest scent,
When hummingbirds who've dropped by for a drink
watch fawns' first fumbling steps with merriment,
Razz
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2010
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Wonderful poem.
So beautifully written and expressed.
So very smooth...velvet smooth.
Very fluid.
Loved the colores and photo.
Great writing:
As dogwoods dress in frocks of party pink
and honeysuckles don their finest scent,
When hummingbirds who've dropped by for a drink
watch fawns' first fumbling steps with merriment,
Razz
Comment Written 07-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2010
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Thank you, Razz. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this poem and its presentation :-) Brooke