Contest Entry and Winners
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Comment from Belinda
Hi, Carol, another of your exciting stories to enjoy this morning. I like the way the plot runs, and the underlying theme of true friendship between Tammy and Megan. The surprise is ... what can I say? Surprising! Strong entry to the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Hi, Carol, another of your exciting stories to enjoy this morning. I like the way the plot runs, and the underlying theme of true friendship between Tammy and Megan. The surprise is ... what can I say? Surprising! Strong entry to the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Belinda,
Thank you so much for enjoying the story and for the kind comments as always. Smiles, Carol
Comment from lola29
Carol, your entry is excellent, and I loed the ending--very clever to gather the perfect evidence--an admittance from the killer himself.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Carol, your entry is excellent, and I loed the ending--very clever to gather the perfect evidence--an admittance from the killer himself.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Lola,
Thanks for the generous review. Glad you enjoyed it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sasha
You did an excellent job with this. Well paced, marvelous descriptions that definitely provided strong imagery. I enjoyed it immensely. This is a terrific entry for the contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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You did an excellent job with this. Well paced, marvelous descriptions that definitely provided strong imagery. I enjoyed it immensely. This is a terrific entry for the contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Sasha,
Considering your current situation with the glasses, I am amazed that you attempted to read this story and extremely flattered. Thank you for your efforts and kind words. Smiles, Carol
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I put my computer on 200 zoom. It makes reading a little difficult since it only shows about 7 or 8 words per line. Better than braille....
Comment from misscookie
Wow what a story, the way it started I never thought it would end this way. Thats what makes you a great writer you are filled with surprises. this is a good write.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Wow what a story, the way it started I never thought it would end this way. Thats what makes you a great writer you are filled with surprises. this is a good write.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Cookie,
Thanks for the spirit uplift..Feeling down at the moment and you pop in and make me smile...Thanks! Carol
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I'm glad there are countless times you lift me up too. stay strong, keep writing it truly helps.
Comment from MissMerri
An exciting and totally captivating story, in answer to a difficult prompt. I liked that Megan got her justice, that she had a loyal friend who really knew her and believed in her, and who was courageous enough to do what needed to be done. Well thought out, well written... suspenseful and a good entry in this contest.
Only two minor errors that I saw:
twisting it until I winched (winced) with pain.
Shocked, he let lose (loose) of my left wrist,
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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An exciting and totally captivating story, in answer to a difficult prompt. I liked that Megan got her justice, that she had a loyal friend who really knew her and believed in her, and who was courageous enough to do what needed to be done. Well thought out, well written... suspenseful and a good entry in this contest.
Only two minor errors that I saw:
twisting it until I winched (winced) with pain.
Shocked, he let lose (loose) of my left wrist,
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Miss Merri,
Thank you so much for the encouraging and supportive review. I really appreciate the comments and suggestions. Already fixed! Smiles, Carol
Comment from missy98writer
Carol,
Another impressive short story for another writing prompt. You took me on a wild ride in your well written story. Great narrative moved the story along at a great pace. Natural dialogue and very descriptive writing. You've conjured up a very believable plot in my opinion. Not only Megan was alive but the Feds were putting her in Witness Protection. It was nail baiting until the end with the authorities showed up at the eleventh hour to save Tammy. It took guts for Tammy to take on the creep who almost killed her friend. Great touch with the butterfly broach. Goodness there are two other entries in this writing prompt and their stories are great too.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Carol,
Another impressive short story for another writing prompt. You took me on a wild ride in your well written story. Great narrative moved the story along at a great pace. Natural dialogue and very descriptive writing. You've conjured up a very believable plot in my opinion. Not only Megan was alive but the Feds were putting her in Witness Protection. It was nail baiting until the end with the authorities showed up at the eleventh hour to save Tammy. It took guts for Tammy to take on the creep who almost killed her friend. Great touch with the butterfly broach. Goodness there are two other entries in this writing prompt and their stories are great too.
Melissa.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Melissa,
Thanks for the encouraging review and generous stars. I appreciate the support. Smiles, Carol
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Anything you, Lola, Barbara Wilkey, Smurphgirl, Jada and several others write I always look forward to reading.
Meissa.
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I appreciate the fantastic company that you put me with...all terrific writers...
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Caro,
do you realize what a great story you wrote for this contest
I don't know where you get your ideas ?
You definitely held my interest.
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Hello Caro,
do you realize what a great story you wrote for this contest
I don't know where you get your ideas ?
You definitely held my interest.
Gert
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Gert,
so glad that you enjoyed it. I'm never quite sure until the thought rolls out of my head where it came from either...The wonder of the imagination I guess. Smiles, Carol
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You are welcome Carol
Gert
Comment from fictionwriter
Great piece. You totally drew me in and held my tight in your grasp until the very last word. Great job, shows what friend inately know.
representing his many conquest(s).
He pulled (me?) outside, holding my terrified body
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Great piece. You totally drew me in and held my tight in your grasp until the very last word. Great job, shows what friend inately know.
representing his many conquest(s).
He pulled (me?) outside, holding my terrified body
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Joy,
Glad you enjoyed the story line...Friends through thick and thin...regardless of the others. Thank you! smiles, Carol
Comment from wierdgrace
I loved this, what a perfect story, and it read so smoothly, the diologue, the smoothness, and excitement of both story, well done, and I loved the picture too, being a harley rider, okay
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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I loved this, what a perfect story, and it read so smoothly, the diologue, the smoothness, and excitement of both story, well done, and I loved the picture too, being a harley rider, okay
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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wierdgrace,
Glad you enjoyed the story and the Harley riders...Thanks again. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Firstly congrats for the heroism winner!
This is an awesome contest entry for many reasons, first of which is the shocking start and a gripping story. I really loved the expression and a prompt end.
best wishes and best of luck
K
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Firstly congrats for the heroism winner!
This is an awesome contest entry for many reasons, first of which is the shocking start and a gripping story. I really loved the expression and a prompt end.
best wishes and best of luck
K
Comment Written 04-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2010
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Kashif,
Wonderful comments, my friend. Glad that you enjoyed the story. Smiles to you, Carol
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You are welcome carol.
I am the runner up in heroism contest and after reading your piece, I thought, what a great throw of the dice. In prose you are best:)
best wishes
K
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I am flattered! Thank you