POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Love's Last Breath"When I dabble at things.....
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Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is stunning, Carol - the flow and rhyme are perfect and you completely capture what I've seen in several elderly couples in my church where one became terribly ill in old age - the other, so devoted, would gladly give his or her last breath for the other to live. Immediately, the faces of some of those wonderful people leaped into my mind. Brooke
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Your poem is stunning, Carol - the flow and rhyme are perfect and you completely capture what I've seen in several elderly couples in my church where one became terribly ill in old age - the other, so devoted, would gladly give his or her last breath for the other to live. Immediately, the faces of some of those wonderful people leaped into my mind. Brooke
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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Brooke My parents, both 89, have been married 62 years. I can't imagine what will happen when something happens to one of them. How do you live without your other half? Thanks for the awesome review. Carol
Comment from Belinda
After having shared a lifetime, I think it is normal for each to think, "Who goes first?" In these small amount of words you depict one of the spouses willing himself to leave first and let the other live. An act of love. Good luck with the competition, Carol.
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After having shared a lifetime, I think it is normal for each to think, "Who goes first?" In these small amount of words you depict one of the spouses willing himself to leave first and let the other live. An act of love. Good luck with the competition, Carol.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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Belinda Thanks for stopping by to read my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again Carol
Comment from chaswriter
Hey Carol - I didn't realize you are quite the poet. Wonderful photo and your poems captures the image well. I enjoyed it. Charlie
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Hey Carol - I didn't realize you are quite the poet. Wonderful photo and your poems captures the image well. I enjoyed it. Charlie
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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Charlie
Thanks so much for your kind words. I only dabble in the poetry. There are so many that far exceed my humble talent. But I enjoy expressing myself now and then. Thanks again.
Carol
Comment from Amfunny
Wow. WOnderful poem. Sure looks like a winner to me. Very strong in its emotion and story considering the few words you have to use. Great job.
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Wow. WOnderful poem. Sure looks like a winner to me. Very strong in its emotion and story considering the few words you have to use. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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amfunny Thank you so much. I thought about my 89 year old parents and their 62 year marriage and wondered how they will react when something happens to one of them. It's scary! Thanks again Carol
Comment from c_lucas
To lose a loved one with whom you have spent a lifetime is difficult. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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To lose a loved one with whom you have spent a lifetime is difficult. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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Charlie I thought of my parents and 62 years of never being apart...scared me wondering how they will react when something happens. Thanks for the review. Carol
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If you want a sociologist observations, pm me. Your're welcome, Carolyn. Charlie
Comment from Colette
Excellent! what more can I say those hands are the imperfection of the skin
yet the perfection of the message says it all, and you found the perfect duet
words and picture. Congratulations Colette
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Excellent! what more can I say those hands are the imperfection of the skin
yet the perfection of the message says it all, and you found the perfect duet
words and picture. Congratulations Colette
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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Colette Thanks so much for the kind review. I can only imagine my parents who have been married 62 years when something happens to one of them. Scary! Thanks again Carol
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Begin,
your 15 word love poem is the kind that puts a big lump in my throat (yes and brought tears to my eyes)
wish you the best
Tears
Gert
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Hello Begin,
your 15 word love poem is the kind that puts a big lump in my throat (yes and brought tears to my eyes)
wish you the best
Tears
Gert
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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Gert I thought about my parents who have been married 62 years and never been apart, It scared me. I don't know how one will react when the other is gone. Thanks for the review. Carol
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Carol,
nd I feel the same way about each other and we have been married
56 years.
Gert
Comment from soveryhappy
Hi Begin Again,
This is a wonderful poem.Great artwork.
In true love the soul embraces the body and death can not stop true love
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When I die and whatever is left of me, will love you far beyond eternity...(Dedicated to the one that I love)
Thank you very much for sharing.
Mucho Amor,
Wendy
Enjoy the journey...Peace
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Hi Begin Again,
This is a wonderful poem.Great artwork.
In true love the soul embraces the body and death can not stop true love
AND
When I die and whatever is left of me, will love you far beyond eternity...(Dedicated to the one that I love)
Thank you very much for sharing.
Mucho Amor,
Wendy
Enjoy the journey...Peace
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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Wendy Thanks for the review. My parents have been 62 years and never apart, They are both 89 and I fear for the day something happens to one of them Thanks again. Carol
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Hi Carol,
My blessings to your mom and dad. Amazing-62 years together.That is true love and I know what you mean and how you feel.
Mucho amor,
Wendy
Comment from mmichelle97219
Letting go is oneof the purest acts of love. I thought this was terribly sweet. I wish you the best of luck in the competition.
happy writing
michelle
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Letting go is oneof the purest acts of love. I thought this was terribly sweet. I wish you the best of luck in the competition.
happy writing
michelle
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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Michelle I think any couple that has been together for decades will feel like they are dying too. My parents have been married 62 years...I wonder if they ever remember the other one not being there...Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from lilblackcat
They say less is more and you've done well with just 15 words. Lovingly expressed and conveyed beautifully. Congratulations.
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They say less is more and you've done well with just 15 words. Lovingly expressed and conveyed beautifully. Congratulations.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2009
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lilblackcat
Thank you for the kind review. Its a challenge to put a story in fifteen words, especially a meaningful one. Thanks Carol