POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
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Comment from Freeflyer
An unusual subject for a haiku. It is a good one however. The emotions in these three lines paints a strong picture of love and stability. The very base to our being. Good one. Good luck in the competition.
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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An unusual subject for a haiku. It is a good one however. The emotions in these three lines paints a strong picture of love and stability. The very base to our being. Good one. Good luck in the competition.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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Freeflyer...
My love for my family is my reason for being. Thanks for the kind words. Carol
Comment from bluetwo
I never know how to critique haiku. I can certainly agree with your thought, but I felt it was a bit too simple. I expect haiku to be a bit oblique, but I'm not an expert by any means. I guess one needs to read Japanese haiku in the native language to be able to comment sensibly on it.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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I never know how to critique haiku. I can certainly agree with your thought, but I felt it was a bit too simple. I expect haiku to be a bit oblique, but I'm not an expert by any means. I guess one needs to read Japanese haiku in the native language to be able to comment sensibly on it.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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Bluetwo...
I'm told haiku is usually about nature but this one explicitly requested a poem about love and myself. Thus these are my words. Thanks so much. Carol
Comment from Hall Scott
I don't know much about haiku. 5-7-5. I get that; but there is more I know. I'll have to look it up. Anyway, even if this poem doesn't meet the stringent rules of the haiku - and it may - it is so sweet, gentle and focused on familial bliss, I have to give it five stars. Despite the (to me) clunky "My/My/My".
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I don't know much about haiku. 5-7-5. I get that; but there is more I know. I'll have to look it up. Anyway, even if this poem doesn't meet the stringent rules of the haiku - and it may - it is so sweet, gentle and focused on familial bliss, I have to give it five stars. Despite the (to me) clunky "My/My/My".
Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009
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The rules were requesting a poem about me and love..thus the my/my/my I don't know too much about the rules either so I just expressed my feelings. Thanks Carol
Comment from fictionwriter
What a beautiful little poem. It's so true that with your family around you love abounds. I love the way this poem made me feel. Well done.
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What a beautiful little poem. It's so true that with your family around you love abounds. I love the way this poem made me feel. Well done.
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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fictionwriter...
Thanks so much for your kind words and understanding how important the existence of family and the bonds of love are. Thanks again Carol
Comment from WRITER1
Having you family around is a true gift from God. This is a very nice poem, it is so nice to have a lot of family. I wish you good luck in the contest.
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Having you family around is a true gift from God. This is a very nice poem, it is so nice to have a lot of family. I wish you good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2009
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Writer1
Thanks for your kind words. The love of family is the greatest gift of all. Thanks Carol