CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 147 "Nuclear Family and the Divorce"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Josipher32
This was an impressively written free verse format poem.
You left the reader with a lot to ponder and take into consideration.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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This was an impressively written free verse format poem.
You left the reader with a lot to ponder and take into consideration.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read this piece. And I thank you for your very generous review. I wrote this many years after the divorce as time can only pass before one can look back at what had happened, the impact, the need for hope and to adapt to the radical changes. A bit like how history cannot fully be written about until time passes. And even that continues to evolve. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This piece is a creative work it has strong descriptions in the very good words used a very good opening to the piece that provokes the reader to read on well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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This piece is a creative work it has strong descriptions in the very good words used a very good opening to the piece that provokes the reader to read on well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Fuller, thank you very much for reading this piece. And I also thank you for your most generous review and all your comments! Sincerely, Sue
Comment from unidian
A novel analogy you have chosen here Sixteezkid and you've pulled it off very well! The note of precaution about the fragile future is a sign that, once you've been blasted, it's difficult to trust again. Tom
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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A novel analogy you have chosen here Sixteezkid and you've pulled it off very well! The note of precaution about the fragile future is a sign that, once you've been blasted, it's difficult to trust again. Tom
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Wow, Tom....glad you highlighted and commented on that 'fragile future' part. Yeah, "once bitten, twice shy" is an understatement! Ha!! Thanks so much for your generous review and your awesome comments! Sincerely, Sue
Comment from rmdelta
Sixteezkid,
a great story of a horrible scenario. When I first read this I didn't have a clue what you were talking about. Read almost like you were refering to 9/11. It wasn't until I read your notes that I understood what was really being said.
Well written and quite poetic. Excellent work of art, Sixteezkid.
Reggie
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Sixteezkid,
a great story of a horrible scenario. When I first read this I didn't have a clue what you were talking about. Read almost like you were refering to 9/11. It wasn't until I read your notes that I understood what was really being said.
Well written and quite poetic. Excellent work of art, Sixteezkid.
Reggie
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Yeah, must have "author's notes" on this one. Since 'ground zero' was attached to 9/11, seems most have forgotten that it's origins are with the nuclear bomb. Thank you so much for reading my poem and for your most generous review and comments! Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Pili Pubul
A very unique and original poem about the devastation of divorce ! I love the style and very telling images.
And Beyond - Its name is Future
Not looking back,
We call it Fragile
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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A very unique and original poem about the devastation of divorce ! I love the style and very telling images.
And Beyond - Its name is Future
Not looking back,
We call it Fragile
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Pili, thank you so much for your comments and most generous review. And thank you for highlighting the stanza that you liked! With warmest regards Sue
Comment from wierdgrace
I love this too much. the last sentence in the author notes made me laugh a lot. I know how you feel. I found no errors and no revisions, i loved the structure, and the images.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I love this too much. the last sentence in the author notes made me laugh a lot. I know how you feel. I found no errors and no revisions, i loved the structure, and the images.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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weirdgrace, thank you very much for reading my work. And I thank you for your most generous review and comments! Warmest regards, Sue
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u r so welcome
Comment from joan marie
This subject was handled excellently in my humble opinion. We are destroying far too fast whatit took milleniums to be built. I hope we are not too late. I hate to think of our future only being saved by living above our planet instead of on it. joan marie
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This subject was handled excellently in my humble opinion. We are destroying far too fast whatit took milleniums to be built. I hope we are not too late. I hate to think of our future only being saved by living above our planet instead of on it. joan marie
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
Comment from IreneSJ
Much admire the clever way you enliken family split trauma with nuclear explosion - a really valid comparison to draw. Alliteration used to great effect (harsh/shocking): branches brittle broken in scorched scapes.
Congratulations on a great poem.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Much admire the clever way you enliken family split trauma with nuclear explosion - a really valid comparison to draw. Alliteration used to great effect (harsh/shocking): branches brittle broken in scorched scapes.
Congratulations on a great poem.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Irene, thank you so much for your generous review and very specific comments. And thanks for highlighting those words that you liked! Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from nancyjam
The perfect metaphor for the tragedy
of divorce. I like the line, "Dreams lying flat,
their branches brittle." A powerful poem
about the destruction divorce can cause
but, happily a glimmer of hope lies in
the future. Good job.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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The perfect metaphor for the tragedy
of divorce. I like the line, "Dreams lying flat,
their branches brittle." A powerful poem
about the destruction divorce can cause
but, happily a glimmer of hope lies in
the future. Good job.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Yes, there is always hope! Thank you so much for highlighting the lines you enjoyed. And thank you for your most generous review and all your comments. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from kassey
I think the comparisson is maybe a little too strong for those who lost people on 911, however, divorce has a devastating and lasting effect on all the family anfd you have made good work of the poem. You used the Time plus 5/10 etc to show how you are progressing this is very good. Excellent work Kay
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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I think the comparisson is maybe a little too strong for those who lost people on 911, however, divorce has a devastating and lasting effect on all the family anfd you have made good work of the poem. You used the Time plus 5/10 etc to show how you are progressing this is very good. Excellent work Kay
Comment Written 21-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2008
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Kassey, thank you very much for your most generous review and specific comments. Much appreciated! (Just to clarify...."ground zero" is an original term for a nuclear bomb blast - This has nothing to do with 9/11). Glad you liked the progression of time. Most appreciated and with respect, Sue