Average Poet
a rhyming poem64 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Jesse. This is just delightful. It flows off the tongue with great rhyming structure. I like the ideal of taking your muse out of the freezer to thaw. Hilarious.
You've outdone yourself, Jesse. You really earned the sixth star
Great job. Thank you for sharing.
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Hi, Jesse. This is just delightful. It flows off the tongue with great rhyming structure. I like the ideal of taking your muse out of the freezer to thaw. Hilarious.
You've outdone yourself, Jesse. You really earned the sixth star
Great job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
A poetic look at the process of creativity for poet-ing! Your poem shows a humble author playing with rhythm and words to good effect. This was fun to read! And 'syncopated' is just an awesome word.
Thanks for sharing this bit of your heart!
Julie
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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A poetic look at the process of creativity for poet-ing! Your poem shows a humble author playing with rhythm and words to good effect. This was fun to read! And 'syncopated' is just an awesome word.
Thanks for sharing this bit of your heart!
Julie
Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Yes, I love the word 'syncopated' as well. It's fun to say. You nailed it, my friend!
I was playing with writing poetry and came up with this. That's all there is to it.
Thanks for the stars and the wonderful review.
Jesse
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, though I do think you underestimate yourself, the /your long/short line effect is wonderful, like your gorgeous artwork you my friend are in zinc, very well written and presented****kahpot
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Excellent, though I do think you underestimate yourself, the /your long/short line effect is wonderful, like your gorgeous artwork you my friend are in zinc, very well written and presented****kahpot
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thanks, my friend, I was just about to change it but maybe I won't. If you like that long-short-long effect...well, I like it too.
I'm glad you like the artwork.
Take care, Kym.
Jesse
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Good morning, Jesse, for writers like myself, who have trouble with grammar, punctuation, and formatting do need the help and direction, though sometimes when the form of my work looks good to me I am happy to leave it as you definitely should, we cannot please everyone, and everyone has a different eye
Comment from zaraduck6
Very nice rhyming poem. I also really liked the ending. I felt that maybe the second line of the poem, "Honest and raw," could be lengthened a syllable, just so it flows easier. Overall, well done.
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Very nice rhyming poem. I also really liked the ending. I felt that maybe the second line of the poem, "Honest and raw," could be lengthened a syllable, just so it flows easier. Overall, well done.
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2024
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Thanks for the input. I'll consider your suggestion. I'm glad you liked the ending.
Take care and have a good evening.
Jesse