Call Father A Father!
A 13 Line Poem A great grandfather he-goat wants a name59 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Wow...this one is a difficult challenge! Those random words must combine to create a joke in a story, in a poetic way?! You did it, though! Awesome! This is a fun entry for the contest. I hope you do well. Good luck. "Namaste"... ;)
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Wow...this one is a difficult challenge! Those random words must combine to create a joke in a story, in a poetic way?! You did it, though! Awesome! This is a fun entry for the contest. I hope you do well. Good luck. "Namaste"... ;)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from Shanbreen
This is rather a quaint poem. That pesky Daniel is certainly a problem -- their goes the family line.=) You have done a good job in writing within the constraints of the contest.
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This is rather a quaint poem. That pesky Daniel is certainly a problem -- their goes the family line.=) You have done a good job in writing within the constraints of the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from kiwijenny
Are you kidding..? There are kids galore and Nanny goats too. And perhaps a few Maaaaaas and MaaMaas plenty of generational names ...but perhaps not on the male side...maaybe maale side ...is lacking
God bless
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Are you kidding..? There are kids galore and Nanny goats too. And perhaps a few Maaaaaas and MaaMaas plenty of generational names ...but perhaps not on the male side...maaybe maale side ...is lacking
God bless
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from rspoet
You've used all the names in the prompt
I'm not sure I get the joke that is the theme of the contest
I doubt the goats haven't any idea who is related to whom
Nice picture of goats
Good luck in the contest
RS
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You've used all the names in the prompt
I'm not sure I get the joke that is the theme of the contest
I doubt the goats haven't any idea who is related to whom
Nice picture of goats
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from meeshu
I really do enjoy the wordsmanship as you string words together in a very interesting way. might be a cultural thing but I don't see a joke here. no matter, good poem..
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I really do enjoy the wordsmanship as you string words together in a very interesting way. might be a cultural thing but I don't see a joke here. no matter, good poem..
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from His Grayness
Certainly this is a really rare and creative work demonstrating great imagination, rich and deep! I really enjoyed the work in every dimension and cannot offer any suggestions to improve it in any way whatsoever. My thanks to this author for a fun read. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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Certainly this is a really rare and creative work demonstrating great imagination, rich and deep! I really enjoyed the work in every dimension and cannot offer any suggestions to improve it in any way whatsoever. My thanks to this author for a fun read. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a very imaginative and humorous joke you have shared. I wish Daniel wasn't so worried, but being the professor has its responsibilities. Well done and good luck.
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This is a very imaginative and humorous joke you have shared. I wish Daniel wasn't so worried, but being the professor has its responsibilities. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from royowen
I think a great grandfather could well be a very strong positional hold in a family, and if he wants to creat a father then so be it. Daniel, the professor seem tho think so. And in parliament, they declare that the assembly of the goats ceases. Well done, good luck in the contest. Blessings, Roy
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I think a great grandfather could well be a very strong positional hold in a family, and if he wants to creat a father then so be it. Daniel, the professor seem tho think so. And in parliament, they declare that the assembly of the goats ceases. Well done, good luck in the contest. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from Lady Jane
Ok, this is choice and that pic, yeah, it's a hoot also. It fits well with your 'humorous' write. I love that the professor is a goat and this parliament can make laws, pass laws, and implement them. How cute. It seems realistic until you realize the main character is a goat. You've adhered to contest rules, the writing is clean and clear, the work is all pulled together nicely. I found no errors. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle
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Ok, this is choice and that pic, yeah, it's a hoot also. It fits well with your 'humorous' write. I love that the professor is a goat and this parliament can make laws, pass laws, and implement them. How cute. It seems realistic until you realize the main character is a goat. You've adhered to contest rules, the writing is clean and clear, the work is all pulled together nicely. I found no errors. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
