Tortillas
A Ghazal55 total reviews
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is a well written Ghazal poem, I have not heard of this form before, but I enjoyed the poem and admire your ability to write to strict criteria. I noticed no errors, just a lot of tortilla's which you explain in your author notes. Thanks for sharing your poem, and it is one I'd recommend to other readers for review, Ana.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Hello, this is a well written Ghazal poem, I have not heard of this form before, but I enjoyed the poem and admire your ability to write to strict criteria. I noticed no errors, just a lot of tortilla's which you explain in your author notes. Thanks for sharing your poem, and it is one I'd recommend to other readers for review, Ana.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Ana, for your review. I love this form of poetry popular in Arabia and India for centuries. To read contemporary Ghazals, I suggest "Ravishing Disunities: Real Ghazals in English," editted by Agha Shahid Ali. You are welcome to enter this contest on FanStory. Thanks again.
Comment from johnwilson
ha ha! very well penned, and while on vacation as well. This is a difficult method with which to write a poem, for me. I thought perhaps you could use different adjectives to describe "tortillas" as per the sample poem.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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ha ha! very well penned, and while on vacation as well. This is a difficult method with which to write a poem, for me. I thought perhaps you could use different adjectives to describe "tortillas" as per the sample poem.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you, John, for your review and suggestion. I hate adjectives in my own poetry and tend to use strong active verbs to eliminate adjectives. Mark Twain once said, "When you see an adjective, kill it. No, I don't mean utterly, but kill most of them--then the rest will be valuable."
I love this form of poetry popular in Arabia and India for centuries. To read contemporary Ghazals, I suggest "Ravishing Disunities: Real Ghazals in English," editted by Agha Shahid Ali. You're welcome to enter this contest on FanStory. Thanks again.
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I appreciate your reply to my review. And, I do remember Mark Twain's apt comment. I will take a look at the work you recommended. Thank you!
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You'll enjoy the book. I borrowed a copy from the library.
Comment from meeshu
this is a new form to me , I see its potential as a serious spiritual piece. or it is equally accessible to a comic poem. you have done a nice job with the latter. very funny.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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this is a new form to me , I see its potential as a serious spiritual piece. or it is equally accessible to a comic poem. you have done a nice job with the latter. very funny.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Yes, Meeshu, the form is flexible. Traditional Ghazals were about unrequitted love, but contemporary writers use humor. I even wrote a Ghazal about chocolate. What's not to love about that? Go ahead. Wrie a serious spiritual piece. I also suggest you read the first English language anthology of Ghazals, Ravishing Diunities, by Agha Shahid Ali.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Ghazal as far as I can remember the format seems executed correctly and a good choice of subject the tortillas that is the main attraction to do what is needed.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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A very well-written Ghazal as far as I can remember the format seems executed correctly and a good choice of subject the tortillas that is the main attraction to do what is needed.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Oh, thank you, Sandra, for your review. I picked the craziest subject possible while vacationing in Mexico where we forgot to buy the tortillas, and I forced myself to write about. I may even make my own tortillas before this vacation is over.
Comment from His Grayness
I found this work to be certainly rare and creative, well enough to hold the reader strongly from start to finish. The photograph is a good 'Gripper" and creates a lot of curiosity although the poetic style is very rare and uncommon that frankly is not my cup of tea, but well done indeed. my sincere thanks to this author for introducing another dimension to my world of poetry. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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I found this work to be certainly rare and creative, well enough to hold the reader strongly from start to finish. The photograph is a good 'Gripper" and creates a lot of curiosity although the poetic style is very rare and uncommon that frankly is not my cup of tea, but well done indeed. my sincere thanks to this author for introducing another dimension to my world of poetry. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Yes, Vance, while people in the Middle East and India have written Ghazals for thousands of years, it is so rare on FanStory that when Rebekka held a Ghazal contest two days ago here, no one signed up. She closed the contest but reopenned it when I told her I had a poem. To read more contemporary Ghazals, Ravishing Diunities: Real Ghazals in English, by Agha Shahid Ali.
You're welcome to join the contest here. Thank you for your review.