Broken Promise
The realization of the Greatest Gift of All.62 total reviews
Comment from nbonner
This was excellent and well written. I almost cried reading this because I know there is kids out there with parents that are no good and leave someone else to raise them. I glad Timmy had his grandmother to show all the love he needs and more. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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This was excellent and well written. I almost cried reading this because I know there is kids out there with parents that are no good and leave someone else to raise them. I glad Timmy had his grandmother to show all the love he needs and more. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, NBonner, for taking time to read my story. Unfortunately, there are way too many forgotten children in this world, and not enough love to save them all. I tried bring one of them to people's attention and show how the love of a single person can make a difference. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Mabaker
I was raised in an Orphanage. Every visiting day, last Sunday in the month, I waited for my name to be called out and my parents had come for a visit. In four and a half years, my name was called twice. Yes, Timmy I know what it's like to wait.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I was raised in an Orphanage. Every visiting day, last Sunday in the month, I waited for my name to be called out and my parents had come for a visit. In four and a half years, my name was called twice. Yes, Timmy I know what it's like to wait.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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There are way too many of us who have had to live through these experiences. The saddest part, we never truly get over the lingering hurt. Yet thankfully, the daily haunting dims enough to allow us somewhat-productive existences. And best of all, we are instilled with ferocious compassion for the forgotten children, and everyone else. Thank you so much, Mabaker, for taking time to read my story, and for sharing your experience. If nothing else, I hope this story might make a few realize they are not alone. I can't thank you enough for the special six-star review and your kind words. Wishing you the best, my friend! :-)
Comment from JW
Thanks for sharing this story and good luck in the contest.
This story is very emotional and is written so well, one could easily mentally picture the young boy waiting at the curb for his father. ..............How sad. ....... JW
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thanks for sharing this story and good luck in the contest.
This story is very emotional and is written so well, one could easily mentally picture the young boy waiting at the curb for his father. ..............How sad. ....... JW
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, JW, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Thesis
You've told a story that is as sad as it is disheartening. Besides the fact that Helen and George have their own issues, she has the compassion to find out what Timmy's issue is and why he is playing for days on end in the same spot.
THe story goes beyond what the real issues are, and focuses on the hurt and pain as seen through a little boy's eyes and those of his grandmother. Parents like his have no right to treat a child in this manner.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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You've told a story that is as sad as it is disheartening. Besides the fact that Helen and George have their own issues, she has the compassion to find out what Timmy's issue is and why he is playing for days on end in the same spot.
THe story goes beyond what the real issues are, and focuses on the hurt and pain as seen through a little boy's eyes and those of his grandmother. Parents like his have no right to treat a child in this manner.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I couldn't agree with you more that this story is sad and disheartening to an extent. But that surly wasn't my intention. I wanted to show that with love or the caring of someone special we can overcome the hurt and loneliness. The old grouchy couple aren't meant to be unhappy, just cantankerous. Thank you so much, Thesis, for taking time to read my story. Your words, comments, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from apky
These lines brought tears to my eyes:
Sharing hugs and kisses all the way to the house, I hear Timmy's faint words, "It's okay Nanny, it's not your fault."
Timmy's grandmother squeezes him tight, twisting back and forth. Then, he says, "You know what, Nanny?"
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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These lines brought tears to my eyes:
Sharing hugs and kisses all the way to the house, I hear Timmy's faint words, "It's okay Nanny, it's not your fault."
Timmy's grandmother squeezes him tight, twisting back and forth. Then, he says, "You know what, Nanny?"
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, APKY, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I wish for no one to be unhappy, and especially, children, and for everyone to have someone to love them. :-)
Comment from MJ McIntire
This is a really good story. I found it sad because I knew of a little boy (a neighbor) like this, although his parents lived with him I would see him out early morning 6am riding his bike or just doing whatever always unsupervised. He was 5. I asked him one time what he was doing out without his parents and he said it was ok he was a big boy and that mommy sleeps a lot from all her "medicine" she takes and I give her a headache and daddy sleeps too.
This story really struck a chord with me. I do not know whatever happened to the little boy.
MJ
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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This is a really good story. I found it sad because I knew of a little boy (a neighbor) like this, although his parents lived with him I would see him out early morning 6am riding his bike or just doing whatever always unsupervised. He was 5. I asked him one time what he was doing out without his parents and he said it was ok he was a big boy and that mommy sleeps a lot from all her "medicine" she takes and I give her a headache and daddy sleeps too.
This story really struck a chord with me. I do not know whatever happened to the little boy.
MJ
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Sadly, there are millions of these heartbreaking stories, and people like you and I who witnessed or played a part in such nightmares that will haunt us forever. They happen every day. Thank you so much, MJ McIntire, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated, as is your compassionate review. :-)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a grand little story and one with a moral. After all love is the greatest gift of all and that little boy, a symbol of all little boys in this situation will grow up to be okay. I liked the beginning and the ending which I thought were well executed.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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This is a grand little story and one with a moral. After all love is the greatest gift of all and that little boy, a symbol of all little boys in this situation will grow up to be okay. I liked the beginning and the ending which I thought were well executed.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, Giddy Nielsen-Sweep, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A heartrending, moving and emotional piece. You have capture the characters voices just write. Just one nit: You say WONDERS over rather than WANDERS. But that is a tiny detail overall this is a lovely read and very sweet very well done kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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A heartrending, moving and emotional piece. You have capture the characters voices just write. Just one nit: You say WONDERS over rather than WANDERS. But that is a tiny detail overall this is a lovely read and very sweet very well done kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, Meia, my dear, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words, generous review, and suggestion are greatly appreciated. I can't imagine that I would have written wonders, rather than wanders; but if I did, I sure do appreciate you pointing out my silly error. :-)
Comment from bluedragon776
Awe, this is beyond cute. Some dads can be real bastards. I should know. I thought the dialogue between Helen and the little boy was pretty good. Not so much between Helen and the husband though. Big realization of the little body at the end of the story. Good job overall. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Awe, this is beyond cute. Some dads can be real bastards. I should know. I thought the dialogue between Helen and the little boy was pretty good. Not so much between Helen and the husband though. Big realization of the little body at the end of the story. Good job overall. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for taking time to read my story. Your kinds words and generous review are greatly appreciated. I'm sorry you didn't care for the conversation between Helen and her husband or find it amusing. I always try to add a little humor to about everything I write.
Comment from Drew Delaney
What a wonderfully written story. Your dialogue is so real and the story is heartbreaking to boot. I hope you do well in the contest! Good luck!
Drew
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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What a wonderfully written story. Your dialogue is so real and the story is heartbreaking to boot. I hope you do well in the contest! Good luck!
Drew
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much, Drew Delaney, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words, well wishes, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)