Selections For Book Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Ashes"possible selections for inclusion in book project
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Comment from EarthaStreet
I enjoyed your writing. My favorite was verse two. Your words seem to paint a picture. I think anyone should express their own style of writing, but I am not sure about writing varied types in one writing.
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I enjoyed your writing. My favorite was verse two. Your words seem to paint a picture. I think anyone should express their own style of writing, but I am not sure about writing varied types in one writing.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Hamiel
A very particular poem and so very interesting. A challenge to the reader to read all over again and reflect. Keep up the good work and goodluck for the contest.
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A very particular poem and so very interesting. A challenge to the reader to read all over again and reflect. Keep up the good work and goodluck for the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Heather Knight
I love this. The short lines make the pace fast and urgent, especially in the second part.
The presentation is very good.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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I love this. The short lines make the pace fast and urgent, especially in the second part.
The presentation is very good.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from TAB_that's me
At first I didn't like the 4 different parts being together as one poem but at second look it came together better for me.
I really love the 1st part and 4th part. but...I also like the childhood chant feel of #2.
You use great enjambment, imagery and presentation.
No rules contest - yes! I might have to enter this one:)
Good luck Mikey!
Teresa
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At first I didn't like the 4 different parts being together as one poem but at second look it came together better for me.
I really love the 1st part and 4th part. but...I also like the childhood chant feel of #2.
You use great enjambment, imagery and presentation.
No rules contest - yes! I might have to enter this one:)
Good luck Mikey!
Teresa
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
My goodness, Mikey, this is a fantastic poem. You've gone through all the stages in such an amazing way, the words, the presentation, the whole! You certainly put a lot of work into this and really deserve to win. I'll watch out for the voting. Superb, my friend!! :) Sandra xxx
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My goodness, Mikey, this is a fantastic poem. You've gone through all the stages in such an amazing way, the words, the presentation, the whole! You certainly put a lot of work into this and really deserve to win. I'll watch out for the voting. Superb, my friend!! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
This sounds like the most free from restrictions style of contest there could be and your poem in four parts celeboaters that very well.
Rich in exceptional imagery this fire metaphor is extended in several directions. I particularly liked the flashes of light in Part 2 that reminded me of those huge mirrored balls that revolve above the dancers sending out random flashes of liget onto the dancers.
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This sounds like the most free from restrictions style of contest there could be and your poem in four parts celeboaters that very well.
Rich in exceptional imagery this fire metaphor is extended in several directions. I particularly liked the flashes of light in Part 2 that reminded me of those huge mirrored balls that revolve above the dancers sending out random flashes of liget onto the dancers.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from SarahPenn1
This is absolutely beautiful. A lovely entry, that rhymes well. Also, spectacular presentation- especially in the fourth part.
Well done!
Shenel's
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This is absolutely beautiful. A lovely entry, that rhymes well. Also, spectacular presentation- especially in the fourth part.
Well done!
Shenel's
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Michael; this is a lovely suite of poems about ashes, love, and anger. The order in which you placed them takes us from the depths of anger into a state of love and almost happiness.
These are well presented and wonderfully penned.
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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Hi Michael; this is a lovely suite of poems about ashes, love, and anger. The order in which you placed them takes us from the depths of anger into a state of love and almost happiness.
These are well presented and wonderfully penned.
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Wow, this is incredible! Four separate spectacular poems joined by a common thread...magnificent and quite an achievement. I really hope you do well in the competition. Kindest regards and well done Meia xx
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Wow, this is incredible! Four separate spectacular poems joined by a common thread...magnificent and quite an achievement. I really hope you do well in the competition. Kindest regards and well done Meia xx
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
A lot of different aspects in this piece. But the central theme of thinking of a love that is past comes through all four. Why cry, many reasons but it always comes back to love.
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A lot of different aspects in this piece. But the central theme of thinking of a love that is past comes through all four. Why cry, many reasons but it always comes back to love.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
