Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

This is a different kind of contest -
you appear to have made a good job of it..
the words flow well, as does the rhyming...
and I like the overall presentation.

good luck with the contest.

Margaret

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017

Thank you, Margaret, and I'm glad that you enjoyed this.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Good

This is really creative and a masterful execution of a Double Etheree. The concept is magical and it was a delightful read. I have to rate this down though as it does not follow the contest requirements of a single Etheree containing Alliteration. You deliver a double and I see no evidence of Alliteration even though there are numerous instances of Assonance and Consonance throughout. I really hope you can edit this before voting starts as it is worthy of consideration. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

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 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017

I'll have to go look at the contest requirements again. It is called "Double or Nothing," and I really thought that it was supposed to be a double etheree. Thanks for the heads-up. I'll be back to ya.

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 31-Jan-2017

No problem ... I read the requirements through twice before reviewing this and the "double" means Etheree using Alliteration.

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017

Ohhh, I just revised my poem to be a double etheree using alliteration. I'm just going to withdraw from the contest. It's getting too complicated and I usually don't enter contests anyway.

Comment from Susanjohn

Excellent

I do like it!! it's cool and quite clever...and this form is just plan fun!!! poor poor magician!!! he's in trouble now!!!! yikes!!!

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017

Thanks so much for your kind review.

Comment from gene roush

Excellent

This has nice rhythm and vivid inagery all done while using a very constrictive art form. The challenges you poets put yourselves through amaze me. Thanks for sharing your vision. Gene

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017

Thank you so much!

Best,
luna

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

I loved this write! So interesting and cool, I am kind of guessing who wrote this lol...it is superb and well deserving of a win, a brilliant poem that ticks all the right boxes for me kindest regards Meia :)

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 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017

Thanks, dear Meia. I am happy that you enjoyed this. Have a great Tuesday, girl!