How Long Lingering?
You never know how long it will last60 total reviews
Comment from Ella25
And make her wonder..why? He didn't stay longer. Words well put together and not easy to express in such short 5-7-5 poem. You did an excellent work balancing it fine with the image and background colour. Well done. Blessings, Ella
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And make her wonder..why? He didn't stay longer. Words well put together and not easy to express in such short 5-7-5 poem. You did an excellent work balancing it fine with the image and background colour. Well done. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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What nice things you wrote! Thank you!
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You are welcome, my friend. Ella
Comment from Lu Saluna
A very sad tale, romance sometimes works out that way unfortunately.
Well written, sad and poignant. Sometimes it is just not meant to be.
Good luck in the contest.
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A very sad tale, romance sometimes works out that way unfortunately.
Well written, sad and poignant. Sometimes it is just not meant to be.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
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Thanks Lu I appreciate your words.
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi
This is a sad tale about the disappearance of the man along with the scent. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Mary
Second review
Not sure how this works as I reviewed this quite a while ago. Mary
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Hi
This is a sad tale about the disappearance of the man along with the scent. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Mary
Second review
Not sure how this works as I reviewed this quite a while ago. Mary
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you so very much dear one. Hope all is well. Bless you.
Comment from WalkerMan
Some guys are very effective deceivers until they get what they want. That's clearly painful on the receiving side, but they don't care. Yet, in the long run, such guys pay a price, for, as their physical attractiveness fades with age, they lose their charm, and ultimately end up lonely for the rest of their lives. Well done cautionary 5-7-5.
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Some guys are very effective deceivers until they get what they want. That's clearly painful on the receiving side, but they don't care. Yet, in the long run, such guys pay a price, for, as their physical attractiveness fades with age, they lose their charm, and ultimately end up lonely for the rest of their lives. Well done cautionary 5-7-5.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Your name reminds me of James Taylor's 'Walking Man". Thanks for sharing!
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That was unknown to me, so I looked it up, but see no connection other than in the similarity in the name. The idea for my user name comes from the fact I no longer have my car that lasted forty-five years, so now I walk more than I used to. I can still cover a mile every 16 to 17 minutes, mile after mile, when I need to (not bad for being in my low seventies). Anyway, you are welcome for the review. -- Mike
Comment from Dean Kuch
This lovely little poem could be interpreted a couple of different ways, Anonymous Poet.
Being that it is supposed to be a romantic poem, it could be taken quite literally and mean exactly what it states.
But that would really make very little sense.
I'm of the mind to believe the man's beloved in this poem has died, and most all of new graves are adorned with flowers. Having said that, he lingered until the flowers became wilted and lost their fragrance, then left his beloved's grave.
Then again, it's probably just my rather morbid, warped way at looking at life which causes me to think this way.
Best of luck in the contest. I certainly hope it is a lot better than my own.
~Dean
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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This lovely little poem could be interpreted a couple of different ways, Anonymous Poet.
Being that it is supposed to be a romantic poem, it could be taken quite literally and mean exactly what it states.
But that would really make very little sense.
I'm of the mind to believe the man's beloved in this poem has died, and most all of new graves are adorned with flowers. Having said that, he lingered until the flowers became wilted and lost their fragrance, then left his beloved's grave.
Then again, it's probably just my rather morbid, warped way at looking at life which causes me to think this way.
Best of luck in the contest. I certainly hope it is a lot better than my own.
~Dean
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Oh how good to hear from you...And I thought of you when I saw the Dispatch's TV page cover: Close to our Dean!!!! Did you see it.?...don't know how to get it to you. Thanks again, friend.
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You're so welcome, Lois.
It was nice to see that you're posting again.
Which newspaper is it in? I may be able to find it.
~Dean
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It was in The Columbus Dispatch...the cover of the tv section:"Click"😊
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I will look it up.
Thanks! ;)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written romantic 5-7-5 poem. It is sad that his presence fade with the scent of the flower. A great choice of artwork to compliment your poem.
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A very well-written romantic 5-7-5 poem. It is sad that his presence fade with the scent of the flower. A great choice of artwork to compliment your poem.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much....such kind words!
Comment from Thal1959
Very well done, although I am not partial to brief poetic forms. But I do like the "transition" between the five days of the lingering scent, and the same time frame the giver of the stayed before leaving.
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Very well done, although I am not partial to brief poetic forms. But I do like the "transition" between the five days of the lingering scent, and the same time frame the giver of the stayed before leaving.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you so much for writing,,,Blessings
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You're welcome.
Comment from LanceHill
This is a nice entry for the contest. Brief romance brought to life. Good luck in the contest. Have a great week. God bless.
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This is a nice entry for the contest. Brief romance brought to life. Good luck in the contest. Have a great week. God bless.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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God bless you back, and thank you!
Comment from bertranclan
A poem that makes you anticipate what's next--for that you deserve praise. I just wanted you to take note of one tiny thing: the apostrophe on the "s" of " it's" shouldn't be there. It should just be "its." No big deal...just a typo I'm sure. I like your 5-7-5.
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A poem that makes you anticipate what's next--for that you deserve praise. I just wanted you to take note of one tiny thing: the apostrophe on the "s" of " it's" shouldn't be there. It should just be "its." No big deal...just a typo I'm sure. I like your 5-7-5.
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2017
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Thank you so very very very much. I made the change! Blessings!
Comment from mvbrooks
What an interesting thought--that someone would be able to choose the gift of a flower who's perfume lasts only as long as his stay and enhances their time together --but the scent flees when the suitor flees. Imagine the Teleflora commercial if such a product was intentional. Clever use of words.
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What an interesting thought--that someone would be able to choose the gift of a flower who's perfume lasts only as long as his stay and enhances their time together --but the scent flees when the suitor flees. Imagine the Teleflora commercial if such a product was intentional. Clever use of words.
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Comment Written 05-Jan-2017