Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Nobody's Child"a place to gather my poetic forms
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Comment from RodG
This does seem to be a child from an earlier era when Route 66 was the lifeline of the Southwest. I like your use of vernacular to characterize this waif and the observer and to set the scene. Quite a bit of narrative in one nonet. I enjoyed this. Rod
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This does seem to be a child from an earlier era when Route 66 was the lifeline of the Southwest. I like your use of vernacular to characterize this waif and the observer and to set the scene. Quite a bit of narrative in one nonet. I enjoyed this. Rod
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
Comment from Irish Rain
My kinda poem, diners, truck stops, and ramblin' cowboys. LOVE that Route 66 sign!!!! This is an awesome nonet, good luck, blessings....
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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My kinda poem, diners, truck stops, and ramblin' cowboys. LOVE that Route 66 sign!!!! This is an awesome nonet, good luck, blessings....
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Glad you liked it, Irish Rain! Thanks for your kind words.
Comment from royowen
A nicely written work Jeni, yes I've known girls like this, seeking affection, but being used in a way they're not really seeking but unable to help themselves, being sadly deprived. Every girl deserves to be a "daddy's girl", I have two daughters and a granddaughter, they are the apples of my eye, with a self image to match, well done, with this Nonet, excellent entry in this contest, blessings, Roy
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A nicely written work Jeni, yes I've known girls like this, seeking affection, but being used in a way they're not really seeking but unable to help themselves, being sadly deprived. Every girl deserves to be a "daddy's girl", I have two daughters and a granddaughter, they are the apples of my eye, with a self image to match, well done, with this Nonet, excellent entry in this contest, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Very well done. Count is spot on and a strong nonnet for the contest.
I love the country western style and words that you used to make it different.
'dime store lovin' '
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Very well done. Count is spot on and a strong nonnet for the contest.
I love the country western style and words that you used to make it different.
'dime store lovin' '
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
Comment from Thal1959
Very well composed, Luna. The words and occasional rhymes, in addition to the rhythm, makes the piece flow almost like a song. Even the first verse, smaller than the second, almost makes the words appear in the shape of a heart or a wedding ring diamond. Adds a nice subliminal touch. Very well done, all around.
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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Very well composed, Luna. The words and occasional rhymes, in addition to the rhythm, makes the piece flow almost like a song. Even the first verse, smaller than the second, almost makes the words appear in the shape of a heart or a wedding ring diamond. Adds a nice subliminal touch. Very well done, all around.
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Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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I'm really happy that you enjoyed this, Thai. Thanks for your kind words of review, they're much appreciated and mean a lot.
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You're welcome.
Comment from johnwilson
This is so well done...simple and true. I so loved the way you placed it on the page in heart form with no punctuation. It flowed beautifully.
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reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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This is so well done...simple and true. I so loved the way you placed it on the page in heart form with no punctuation. It flowed beautifully.
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Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2016
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Thank you so much, this poem is very personal to me and I'm very happy that you enjoyed it.. I appreciate your review.
luna
