Selections For Book Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "African Wind"possible selections for inclusion in book project
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Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey. Absolutely beautiful, the music and presentation just stunning. I love your theme, for some reason I visualised a rate African orchid, it's perfume became tones propelled by ebony and ivory across the plains and through the forests and mountain tops. Aaaaah, like a breathe of purest air. Great work. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Huge hugs - Lovi xxxxx
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi Mikey. Absolutely beautiful, the music and presentation just stunning. I love your theme, for some reason I visualised a rate African orchid, it's perfume became tones propelled by ebony and ivory across the plains and through the forests and mountain tops. Aaaaah, like a breathe of purest air. Great work. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Huge hugs - Lovi xxxxx
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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What a beautiful image. I was hoping people would let their own images form and not be overly influenced by mine. It's got plenty of room for many dancers. :))
I can't believe I finally wrote something that I like. I really like this. I'm sure the committee won't, but I don't care. You like it and you are smarter than they. Even larger hugs with absurdly long arms back at ya, mikey
Comment from BOO ghost
Awe, some sweet romance for Jack - In -The - Box, in your pants. Watch your stance. PUSH PLAY -- yes, yes, very tranquil, winds me down after a hard May day. Relaxation as I read this poem. THe words are caught by a May zephyr. Free verse is not a curse. Pentameter is the worse. Words burst, filled with a writer's thirst. Delightful not frightful. BOO does not give aone and be spiteful. You are rightful, not a trifle. Take aim, load my rifle with five rounds. I'm no clown I get around town to see the piano man and his band play in Africa, place I been many times. Life abundant and fun of sunshine. Pleasing, soothing music that taps in tempo with the wonderful words, not absurd. Good masterpiece, at least. BOO
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Awe, some sweet romance for Jack - In -The - Box, in your pants. Watch your stance. PUSH PLAY -- yes, yes, very tranquil, winds me down after a hard May day. Relaxation as I read this poem. THe words are caught by a May zephyr. Free verse is not a curse. Pentameter is the worse. Words burst, filled with a writer's thirst. Delightful not frightful. BOO does not give aone and be spiteful. You are rightful, not a trifle. Take aim, load my rifle with five rounds. I'm no clown I get around town to see the piano man and his band play in Africa, place I been many times. Life abundant and fun of sunshine. Pleasing, soothing music that taps in tempo with the wonderful words, not absurd. Good masterpiece, at least. BOO
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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OMG!!! This review appeared out of nowhere. WOW. I swear the words just started typing into the screen and no one was anywhere near it, it scared ... BOO!!!! You kidder you. Where the hell's you sheet? Glad you liked this. Pretty damn cool if you ask me. I don't usually like my own stuff. mikey
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yep, cool Mikey. Don't forget to buy your cam and head sets bro
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yep, cool Mikey. Don't forget to buy your cam and head sets bro
Comment from AnnaLinda
Hi Michael,
You have really presented your free verse poem/entry in a beautiful way.
I am also a fan of Enya. I like your poem...I don't know what African wind
really means. "Always for you" is a key...I believe. Interesting. Trying to
hear you;)
Linda
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi Michael,
You have really presented your free verse poem/entry in a beautiful way.
I am also a fan of Enya. I like your poem...I don't know what African wind
really means. "Always for you" is a key...I believe. Interesting. Trying to
hear you;)
Linda
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi, Linda
I'm improving at the overlay thing. :))
I'm not totally sure myself what African wind means, just a vision of something rare and exotic. I think maybe it's easier to form your own picture or story. Not sure if mine comes through clear enough or not. I may be the one who likes this the best. That's a switch. LOL mikey
Comment from tony bronk
First of all: Do you believe that people (females) are fantasizing about you? Second: This is the first poem that i read with a description of the African wind, which Africa, I love, is a real interest of mine. You did a wonderful, intricate job of picturing the African wind. I appreciate it. Tony Bronk
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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First of all: Do you believe that people (females) are fantasizing about you? Second: This is the first poem that i read with a description of the African wind, which Africa, I love, is a real interest of mine. You did a wonderful, intricate job of picturing the African wind. I appreciate it. Tony Bronk
Comment Written 18-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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HAAAAAHAHAHA! You made me spit coffee at my screen. LOL
Hell, Tony, I'm hoping maybe I woman is fantasizing about me and I have grave doubts about that. But, if you hear anything, let me know!
Glad you liked this. It really came out the way I wanted. Thanks a million. mikey
Comment from foxangie123
This is an amazingly awesome piece of writing indeed. Wow. It is a marvelous entry to the contest as being held or if there were no competition. Nice.
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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This is an amazingly awesome piece of writing indeed. Wow. It is a marvelous entry to the contest as being held or if there were no competition. Nice.
Comment Written 18-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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I had to take hormones to hit the high notes. mikey
Comment from I am Cat
Hello Mikey,
This an interesting format. I found that it looked the same, no matter on this or the Classic version, except that on Classic, of course, it's larger and the margins are different... plus all that busy stuff around it... I do prefer the newer site, but I know some of you don't agree. ;) And that's ok. I like the lack of red/blue/and other colors around the borders... anyway,
this is a well laid out poem, and while I like the theme, I found the repeats of words such as: close/closed them/them night/night listen/listen/listen always/always
to be quite a lot in such a short poem. I know that you most likely meant it to repeat... perhaps as a refrain, and perhaps it's just me, but it kept me going back reading (of course that might be your snag there! lol) ;) and each time those words stood out more and more.... just a thought, if that's not your intention, you might consider some word changes?
However, you always have a way of weaving yourself inside your work, so I'm always moved. Your choice of Enya is lovely... I've always loved their music. But then, it's not really about the music... (or is it?) ;)
It's a package deal, I know. ;)
I love the way the words are strategically placed across the keyboard... very lovely.
I wish you great luck in the contest Mikey
;)
Cat
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hello Mikey,
This an interesting format. I found that it looked the same, no matter on this or the Classic version, except that on Classic, of course, it's larger and the margins are different... plus all that busy stuff around it... I do prefer the newer site, but I know some of you don't agree. ;) And that's ok. I like the lack of red/blue/and other colors around the borders... anyway,
this is a well laid out poem, and while I like the theme, I found the repeats of words such as: close/closed them/them night/night listen/listen/listen always/always
to be quite a lot in such a short poem. I know that you most likely meant it to repeat... perhaps as a refrain, and perhaps it's just me, but it kept me going back reading (of course that might be your snag there! lol) ;) and each time those words stood out more and more.... just a thought, if that's not your intention, you might consider some word changes?
However, you always have a way of weaving yourself inside your work, so I'm always moved. Your choice of Enya is lovely... I've always loved their music. But then, it's not really about the music... (or is it?) ;)
It's a package deal, I know. ;)
I love the way the words are strategically placed across the keyboard... very lovely.
I wish you great luck in the contest Mikey
;)
Cat
Comment Written 18-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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This ONE and only ONE is together. I wrote the words while listening to the music, so it goes together. The words are okay alone I suppose. I like this better than ALL my other poems. HAHAHA! I want to marry my poem. I'm going to win the "i like it contest". The committee will throw darts at it. Can't change anything. You might possibly be correct, but I'm too in love to see beyond the love. LOL mikey
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh Mikey, how very lovely this is (you teddy bear, you), and how romantic. Yes, I can close my eyes and see what you see but I'd rather see a tall tribesman carrying the village's child (his grandson) on his shoulder down to the river where together they will bathe - there's a wedding later and everyone will gather, for the Chief's daughter is marrying (this child's father).
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Oh Mikey, how very lovely this is (you teddy bear, you), and how romantic. Yes, I can close my eyes and see what you see but I'd rather see a tall tribesman carrying the village's child (his grandson) on his shoulder down to the river where together they will bathe - there's a wedding later and everyone will gather, for the Chief's daughter is marrying (this child's father).
Comment Written 18-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Oh. I love that image. Isn't that music awesome. My favorite. Pretty strange for a rock and roll boy.
So thrilled you liked this. I actually like it myself. Pretty rare for me. Thanks so much. mikey. :))
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Yes, the music is awesome, and one I think I've actually used at one time or another - LOL.
You're most welcome.
Comment from simmonska
The use of the off set lines is appreciated
The last line "for it is rare" could be omitted as it appears to be indicated in the body of the poem in the instruction to close your eyes and listen--a command that is given 3 times
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reply by the author on 18-May-2016
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The use of the off set lines is appreciated
The last line "for it is rare" could be omitted as it appears to be indicated in the body of the poem in the instruction to close your eyes and listen--a command that is given 3 times
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-May-2016
reply by the author on 18-May-2016
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"For it is rare" is integral to the piece. The command is given twice and is powerful in its repetition. Interesting thoughts though. You stand alone, but I thank you for commenting. mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
BEAUTY IS IN THE EYES OF THE BEHOLDER AND THE MUSIC JUST BRINGS THE MEMORIES THAT MUCH CLOSER TO YOUR REALITY OF IT ALL AS YOU REMEMBER WHAT SHE LOOKS LIKE IN YOUR MINDS EYE
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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BEAUTY IS IN THE EYES OF THE BEHOLDER AND THE MUSIC JUST BRINGS THE MEMORIES THAT MUCH CLOSER TO YOUR REALITY OF IT ALL AS YOU REMEMBER WHAT SHE LOOKS LIKE IN YOUR MINDS EYE
Comment Written 18-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Yes. For sure. Close your eyes and their they are. :)) mikey
Thanks so much.
Comment from marion
Hi there
A beautiful composition. The presentation startling. The words are perfect, but I have no six to give. Good luck in the competition - I'd say it would be a top contender. Marion.
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi there
A beautiful composition. The presentation startling. The words are perfect, but I have no six to give. Good luck in the competition - I'd say it would be a top contender. Marion.
Comment Written 18-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Wow, Marion
I will take the wonderful praise over a six any day! Thanks so much. Big smiles here. mikey