2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "haiku(soaked earth smells like rain)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from LIJ Red
I would expect to see a smiling child in a senryu, not a haiku, and the three syllable third line makes it other than a 5/7/5, but the prompt could care less and it is a
poem of excellent images, so an excellent rating is logical.
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I would expect to see a smiling child in a senryu, not a haiku, and the three syllable third line makes it other than a 5/7/5, but the prompt could care less and it is a
poem of excellent images, so an excellent rating is logical.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from AnnaLinda
Hi Poet,
Using the haiku form for your rainbow entry is very effective. Of course, your
colorful presentation is very lively and visually pleasing. I particularly like your
middle line where the rainbow peeks between the clouds...really great imagery
there...the only thing I might mention is the use of "and" in that line. Often in
haiku use of such words is avoided. Maybe "as" would work or drop 'and' then
use a descriptive word for clouds.
Your satori is really sweet and you have created a wonderful entry!
Linda
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Hi Poet,
Using the haiku form for your rainbow entry is very effective. Of course, your
colorful presentation is very lively and visually pleasing. I particularly like your
middle line where the rainbow peeks between the clouds...really great imagery
there...the only thing I might mention is the use of "and" in that line. Often in
haiku use of such words is avoided. Maybe "as" would work or drop 'and' then
use a descriptive word for clouds.
Your satori is really sweet and you have created a wonderful entry!
Linda
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Great haiku with a good presentation. Love the colours you used to represent the colors of the rainbow. The picture of the double rainbow compliments your poem beautiful
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Great haiku with a good presentation. Love the colours you used to represent the colors of the rainbow. The picture of the double rainbow compliments your poem beautiful
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from livelylinda
Author: very colorful just like a rainbow. The colors of the letters are a nice touch. And, yes, children are fascinated by rainbows. It is just as beautiful to watch their reactions to the rainbow. Nice work. livelylinda
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Author: very colorful just like a rainbow. The colors of the letters are a nice touch. And, yes, children are fascinated by rainbows. It is just as beautiful to watch their reactions to the rainbow. Nice work. livelylinda
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A lovely image and very colorful presentation.
-The first line is very true; sometimes you can even smell the rain right before it comes.
-Good format for your haiku.
-The connection is good between lines one and two.
-Good image in line two.
-Good satori line.
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-A lovely image and very colorful presentation.
-The first line is very true; sometimes you can even smell the rain right before it comes.
-Good format for your haiku.
-The connection is good between lines one and two.
-Good image in line two.
-Good satori line.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from P1
this is really lovely would love to know
how you did the rainbow writing. beautiful
imagery in your words and a pleasure to
read and review. good luck in the contest
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this is really lovely would love to know
how you did the rainbow writing. beautiful
imagery in your words and a pleasure to
read and review. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Bellringer
Nicely composed haiku with a good surprise line. The use of "peeks" is a thoughtful connection to your third line. Best wishes in the contest.
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Nicely composed haiku with a good surprise line. The use of "peeks" is a thoughtful connection to your third line. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from ericawrites
A very well written haiku, so descriptive in so few words. The picture complements it perfectly
Well done and best of luck in the contest.
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A very well written haiku, so descriptive in so few words. The picture complements it perfectly
Well done and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Chuck23
This is an excellent entry for the "A Rainbow" contest! I love the image you included, and what you did with type color to compliment you poem! Very enjoyable!
Good Luck!
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This is an excellent entry for the "A Rainbow" contest! I love the image you included, and what you did with type color to compliment you poem! Very enjoyable!
Good Luck!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from ravenblack
I like how your 5-7-5 captures the promise of the cycles of rain. Soaked earth smells with promise and there it is, the rainbow that makes a child smile. And that mirrors his/her smile. Good luck in the contest!
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I like how your 5-7-5 captures the promise of the cycles of rain. Soaked earth smells with promise and there it is, the rainbow that makes a child smile. And that mirrors his/her smile. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)