Free Verse Collection 2
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Comment from royowen
This seems like meandering from nowhere to nowhere, I think this contemplation, a never ending saga that leads from searching for meaning in a morass of confusion, to end with little meaning. As in this, it's like reading Ecclesiastes, vanity of vanity, all is vanity, it does draw conclusions but nothing that would reconcile itself to itself. However it was a very pleasurable journey through this literary wonderland, well done, Mikey, fine writing, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This seems like meandering from nowhere to nowhere, I think this contemplation, a never ending saga that leads from searching for meaning in a morass of confusion, to end with little meaning. As in this, it's like reading Ecclesiastes, vanity of vanity, all is vanity, it does draw conclusions but nothing that would reconcile itself to itself. However it was a very pleasurable journey through this literary wonderland, well done, Mikey, fine writing, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thanks so much, Roy. You have it perfectly. It is someone wandering and contemplating things. He doesn't want to go home, but he has to eventually. Love your insights. blessings to you, mikey
Comment from gamay
Hello Sir,
I think this is the first time that i review your work.
And i love it very much.
I really enjoyed it.
Thank you for sharing in this.
Have a nice day to you.
gamay
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hello Sir,
I think this is the first time that i review your work.
And i love it very much.
I really enjoyed it.
Thank you for sharing in this.
Have a nice day to you.
gamay
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Hi. So nice to meet you. I'm pleased I made a good impression. Thank you so much for the glowing words. I like this poem myself so I am extra happy you enjoyed it. mikey
Comment from chelsiechristine
This is certainly spectacular. I really loved the lines about counting the stars. The imagery was really strong and it has a creative flow and presentation.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This is certainly spectacular. I really loved the lines about counting the stars. The imagery was really strong and it has a creative flow and presentation.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you so much. This one is rather dear to me. It is more my style than most of what I write, so your glowing words really have me smiling. :)) mikey
Comment from reconciled
I dont like the color of the font...to bright or something...I would try wheat, something less offensive...lol...or bold. and I'm not keen on the the way its broke up. I think it should have more unity ah it reads better that way. Start a new line in the prose after "I dont want to drudge home just yet" and get rid of the triangle thing. -smile-...Hey Mike. Great read....I had rose bushes and a yellow girl once. love michael
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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I dont like the color of the font...to bright or something...I would try wheat, something less offensive...lol...or bold. and I'm not keen on the the way its broke up. I think it should have more unity ah it reads better that way. Start a new line in the prose after "I dont want to drudge home just yet" and get rid of the triangle thing. -smile-...Hey Mike. Great read....I had rose bushes and a yellow girl once. love michael
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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I changed to something I think might be wheat. Ha! It is less RED at least. I sort of LOVE my triangles. :)
I kind of like this one myself. I've never promoted one to the top before. I feel a little dirty and I LIKE IT! Hahaha!!!
Glad you liked this. Thanks for all the stars. It just encourages me though. mikey
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lol....what's up man ..i thought...I thought you wanted to improve your writing...huh...? Now I've aynalized and have awarded my findings in constructive critque. these are my findings...and they are finale. -headnod-.......lol..ahh dont worry about it, nobody likes that shit even if they do say it taste good. love Michael
Comment from lightink
There is so much loneliness in this poem. Thoughts, images and emotions dance hand in hand. Romanticized alienation - reflections on the water and reflection in the mind. Inside and outside melts into an enchanting mix.
This is a poem of finding no home, not in the nature, not in the house.
The stars might be unaware of each other yet they belong together and through the undeniable gravitational pull the influence each other. Math only fails in the thoughts, hardly ever "in action".
Such a thought provoking poem.
I used to have those endless walks in Budapest by the Danube - often more than 10 miles - just to process those thorns...
Great piece, Michael!
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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There is so much loneliness in this poem. Thoughts, images and emotions dance hand in hand. Romanticized alienation - reflections on the water and reflection in the mind. Inside and outside melts into an enchanting mix.
This is a poem of finding no home, not in the nature, not in the house.
The stars might be unaware of each other yet they belong together and through the undeniable gravitational pull the influence each other. Math only fails in the thoughts, hardly ever "in action".
Such a thought provoking poem.
I used to have those endless walks in Budapest by the Danube - often more than 10 miles - just to process those thorns...
Great piece, Michael!
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Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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I love your insights on this. Just the kind of thinking I had hoped it would inspire. Your review is thought provoking in its own right. Thank you very much, mikey
Comment from BOO ghost
Interesting concept and play on the words. I like presentations that challenge the mind and spirit. This poem is deep rose red, full of scientific and intellectual words that expand the mind like the universe, always expanding. In nature, where there is beauty there is danger. Don't be fooled by the beauty of the red rose, because it can prick you and also kill the little thorn bird, singing its last death tune. I had fun with this one, digging deep into the soil to the roots of what this poem represents but think it means more than meets the eye, in some clever way. Grandular looking presentatiion but the words are not cheap or a trick. I see six white roses in abed of red roses. White is BOO's color. BOO
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Interesting concept and play on the words. I like presentations that challenge the mind and spirit. This poem is deep rose red, full of scientific and intellectual words that expand the mind like the universe, always expanding. In nature, where there is beauty there is danger. Don't be fooled by the beauty of the red rose, because it can prick you and also kill the little thorn bird, singing its last death tune. I had fun with this one, digging deep into the soil to the roots of what this poem represents but think it means more than meets the eye, in some clever way. Grandular looking presentatiion but the words are not cheap or a trick. I see six white roses in abed of red roses. White is BOO's color. BOO
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Wow. You made my night. I was hoping to get a reaction like this. This is my true style. I like this myself, so I was hoping a few folks might like it as well. Thanks for the great review and the ghostly array of stars. :)) mikey
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Yep, I think it has spirit. Different style with mixed words that are different. Only Mikey can produce this. it was great, no kidding, I got a lot out of it and still will, no matter how many times it takes. i will be doing some more reviewing tomorrow, got my BOO stories plus that new novel i want to get hopping. You may recognize a character, think you read the synopsis, already. Later Lion KIng.
Comment from Neonewman
Wow! I found myself lost(in the best of ways)inside the magic of this piece. Deep, thought provoking and down right beautiful.
Best of luck in the contest.
God bless !
Steve
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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Wow! I found myself lost(in the best of ways)inside the magic of this piece. Deep, thought provoking and down right beautiful.
Best of luck in the contest.
God bless !
Steve
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Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thanks so much, Steve. This is my real style so to speak. I've learned all the other stuff, but I'm a free verser at heart. Really pleased you liked this, I do too. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
This is stunning. I think this may be the best you have ever written. I could not begin to chose one image from this. If it does not win then people cannot read. Congratulations on this achievement.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This is stunning. I think this may be the best you have ever written. I could not begin to chose one image from this. If it does not win then people cannot read. Congratulations on this achievement.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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That is such high praise and just wonderful to hear. I do truly like this poem myself, so I'm hoping it is well received. Thank you so very much. mikey