A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "I Am Your Canvas"Assorted poems of love
76 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Beautifully composed, the background to the poem is rather stunning, the wording is elegant and descriptive, the thought of a person being a canvass that one designs and paints in the colours and textures of love is captivating with its creative possibilities! Well done, well scribed and presented, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Beautifully composed, the background to the poem is rather stunning, the wording is elegant and descriptive, the thought of a person being a canvass that one designs and paints in the colours and textures of love is captivating with its creative possibilities! Well done, well scribed and presented, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Hello Roy, thank you for this very encouraging review of my humble offering. I am simply delighted :)
Always,
Missy
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My pleasure
Comment from Benny Beeharry
The desires and lust are strong here. There could be a touch of art, but even this tends to to verge towards love.
I the way the writing is set out is very impressive.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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The desires and lust are strong here. There could be a touch of art, but even this tends to to verge towards love.
I the way the writing is set out is very impressive.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Benny, thank you. You are so generous! Your name is new to me. I will wander over and check out your work and repay this lovely compliment you give me :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from Pantygynt
A sparkling diamond here or perhaps a kaleidoscopic spinning top. Either image appropriate to the content of this quite torrid poem about carnal desire, you can of course call it love, and you do but what comes through to me is a very strong feeling of carnality that had me squirmimg with pleasure. Oh yes this one works the way I am sure you intented it. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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A sparkling diamond here or perhaps a kaleidoscopic spinning top. Either image appropriate to the content of this quite torrid poem about carnal desire, you can of course call it love, and you do but what comes through to me is a very strong feeling of carnality that had me squirmimg with pleasure. Oh yes this one works the way I am sure you intented it. Excellent work.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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I like the idea of you squirming with pleasure "P". LOL Thanks so much for the inspiring review...oh yes I am inspired to do another for your pleasure :)
Missy
Comment from anabellapongasi
Beautiful artwork to match your lovely poem. Very nice and colorful words of love and passion. I like how you shaped your poem into a diamond too. This was a real pleasure to read.
Blessings,
Anabella
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Beautiful artwork to match your lovely poem. Very nice and colorful words of love and passion. I like how you shaped your poem into a diamond too. This was a real pleasure to read.
Blessings,
Anabella
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Smiling now Anabella, after reading this lovely review :) Thank you so much hon!
Missy
Comment from janxavier
Amazingly written . I love the diamond sort of pattern u hav created wit your poem ..
makin the woman as the canvas u ve beautifully portrayed wat she wants to tel the man of her lyf but fails to speak it out loud .. kudos to u . keep writing.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Amazingly written . I love the diamond sort of pattern u hav created wit your poem ..
makin the woman as the canvas u ve beautifully portrayed wat she wants to tel the man of her lyf but fails to speak it out loud .. kudos to u . keep writing.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Janxavier, thank you for this splendid review. I am honored that you enjoyed my work.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Ric Myworld
Vibrant colors seem to pulsate if we keep staring at them. Showing a certain energy that stimulates and puts us to thinking, but that earthy smell must be a total turn off, sort of like dirt. Okay, so, I'm just being silly, again. Great job.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Vibrant colors seem to pulsate if we keep staring at them. Showing a certain energy that stimulates and puts us to thinking, but that earthy smell must be a total turn off, sort of like dirt. Okay, so, I'm just being silly, again. Great job.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Imma spank you young man... Lol.
Thank you for reading and reviewing this Lil work of mine Ric.
Missy
Comment from michaelcahill
No, that is what you gave the artwork. This is your best to date. Beautiful flow. I love the shape (something I'd do).
It's like what a huge passionate sigh might look like.
One little word seems missing.
the magic of your touch residing there, Paint my large brown eyes with earthiness
of your scent, Sprinkle
I'd like to see "the" before earthiness. I know you don't want to ruin the perfect shape so, maybe:
your magical touch residing there, Paint my large brown eyes with the earthiness
That would make it one character shorter. It still fits the shape, actually a little better. :)
Just a thought.
This is truly exceptional. Poem of the Month perhaps. mikey
my cat woke me up to review this at five in the morning...
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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No, that is what you gave the artwork. This is your best to date. Beautiful flow. I love the shape (something I'd do).
It's like what a huge passionate sigh might look like.
One little word seems missing.
the magic of your touch residing there, Paint my large brown eyes with earthiness
of your scent, Sprinkle
I'd like to see "the" before earthiness. I know you don't want to ruin the perfect shape so, maybe:
your magical touch residing there, Paint my large brown eyes with the earthiness
That would make it one character shorter. It still fits the shape, actually a little better. :)
Just a thought.
This is truly exceptional. Poem of the Month perhaps. mikey
my cat woke me up to review this at five in the morning...
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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I will address that now, Mikey. I don't think FanStory sees me yet...lol, for that honor. I have missed you, Mikey!!!
Always,
Missy
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I was revising this perhaps as you responded. I left "the" out of my suggestion. Hahaha.
Take another look in case you saw my unrevised version.
They see you. POM has to do with percentage of sixes I think more than anything. This will be well received. :)
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Done :)...thank you sugga!!
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I think I made it slightly short. Try adding.
"soft" magical touch. :)
and in the second to last line, add a space before the ... It's soooo perfect, that's why I'm being so picky to the max. Hahaha.
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Better???
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Ack. I'm messing you up.
for the red lusciousness of my lips, brush the canvas of my skin a hue matching your
magical touch residing therein, paint my large brown eyes with the earthiness
for the red lusciousness of my lips, brush the canvas of my skin a hue matching
your soft magical touch residing therein, paint my large brown eyes with the earthiness
The line is in a smaller size now. I'm driving you crazy. The end is perfect. See how the extra space makes the shape perfect? So "YOUR" goes back on the line it was on and add "SOFT" before magical. Oh, and make sure everything's the same size. Then ... I'll go away.
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It looks on my end...that it is the same size now and that "soft" is in. If I go up a size in font...soft, has to come out the last two words goes on another line. grrr. I am happy you are taking this time with me. :)
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What I'm looking at is just fine. No "soft" which is fine. I was only throwing soft in for the shape. :)
The dude that gave you a four was moaning about "there"? We took care of one. The other one could be "within" and not hurt anything. A little improvement. Or not. I'm smarter and I say it's perfect. :) mikey
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I have an a-z poem that starts with one syllable and ends with 26. To make it fit the type is so small it's unreadable. Yours still reads fine, perfect shape, perfect words, perfect girl. :)
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for you shining there
could change "there" to "through".
Someone gave you a four and "there" was a complaint. Then ask him to take another look. If he doesn't upgrade I'll have to fire up the jet...
Comment from jmdg1954
Your love poems are filled with emotion, warmth, love, passion and sensuality. I enjoy every word posted from it.
I like how it's presented as well.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Your love poems are filled with emotion, warmth, love, passion and sensuality. I enjoy every word posted from it.
I like how it's presented as well.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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I am so honored by this review John. Your work is stellar so when you compliment mine...I know I am doing something right :)
Missy
Comment from petalangela
This is a passionate write revealing longing and love that is waiting to be plucked from the tree fresh and crisp and ready just waiting.....
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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This is a passionate write revealing longing and love that is waiting to be plucked from the tree fresh and crisp and ready just waiting.....
Comment Written 02-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Smiling as I read this. I am so happy that you...my poet friend...love my work. I have missed you. I know you are battling illness and I say a prayer for you every night.
Missy
Comment from poetadeu
This is very romantic with a painter in mind, I am
sure for you want to be the one covering the canvas
with radiance. A lovely piece of writing and the
presentation if illustrious.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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This is very romantic with a painter in mind, I am
sure for you want to be the one covering the canvas
with radiance. A lovely piece of writing and the
presentation if illustrious.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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I write from longing and desire. A place I am all to familiar with :). Thank you, Poetadeu for this lovely review.
Always,
Missy
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Thank you and I am glad it fit well
with your write...LOL
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Thank you and I am glad it fit well
with your write...LOL