Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Oh, Dean, it didn't take you long to get back into the swing of horror!!! That would have made me do more than wet myself had it happened to me! Where do you get all these scary ideas from? I think I will go and have a glass of something now! Really was a scary one this time! xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Ha-ha, thanks, Sandra. I appreciate you reading and reviewing this little story for me.

Where my inspiration comes from all depends. Sometimes, the ideas just seem to come out of thin air. This particular story, however, is inspired by an actual experience. Oh, it wasn't some evil entity or disinterred voice whispering to me, huh-uh. Billy, another friend of mine (there were five of us who always hung out together; Me, Don, Randy, Jerry, and Billy, the prankster of our group) joined the game of Hide 'N' Go Seek my best friend Don and I were playing, but I didn't know at the time he'd joined. They both set me up to scare me, and it must've worked, too. I am still writing about it over forty years later, LOL.

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 24-Jul-2015

With friends like that, I can understand how you write these stories, LOL, you had better not let them know you are writing about it, they might want some royalties! xx

reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Two of them are already published authors, one is extremely successful, so they love the attention, LOL. But, we'll keep it our little secret. ;)

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 24-Jul-2015

I won't say a word! LOL. xxx

Comment from Gert sherwood

Exceptional

Alright Dean,
just hearing the eerie sound of Jimmy voice would want make me to stay inside.
I presume it was Frankie was the one who outsmarted so called his friend.
Gert

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

We'll never know, Gert. Was it really Jimmy just goofing off? Or was there something more sinister lurking there in the dark? I'll leave that interpretation completely up to you. At least no one dies in this one. Not yet, anyway, lol.
Thanks for the exceptional six star rating and great review Gert. I'm really glad you liked the story.
~Dean :}

reply by Gert sherwood on 24-Jul-2015

Dean
Looks like you like to get us readers wondering what you will conjure up next.

Gert

reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

I try to as best I can, Gert. LOL. :}

reply by Gert sherwood on 24-Jul-2015

There you go Dean

Gert

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Thanks for the pleasure of reading another of your fine, eye-opening short-story examples to what might be lurking just around any corner. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thank you for giving it a shot, Ric. I really appreciate that, and I'm glad you liked the story.
~Dean :)

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Well it's a good thing Frankie didn't listen to Jimmy's coaxing voice. No telling what evil was waiting for him out
there in the dark. It's so funny the things kids do to
give themselves a good scare. Well done Dean. :<) Nancy

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thanks for reading my tiny tale, Nancy. I appreciate the review, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
~Dean :)

Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT

Excellent

Ha great one Dean...If it was me there would be skid marks in my underwear lol
You never disappoint with your rounds of horror delights And this was no exception
TK

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thanks for reading, TK. I appreciate it, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
~Dean :)

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

I'll say this for you Dean, your stories actually increase my pulse race. You are very good at creating tension and fear, even before anything has happened. I did not want this to end - I want to know what or who is outside. LOL. Well done - yet again. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thanks for reading, Dorothy. I appreciate it, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
~Dean :)

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Soooo - It really was Jimmy out there in the creepy darkness? Man, he wouldn't be coming back to my house for a play-date any time soon. This was a great write, Dean. I love some of your metaphors. They make me smile when I find one. It's sort of like finding a piece of chocolate in a Toll-house cookie - expected, but still delightful.
An excellent addition for this creepy little book.
Rose

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thanks for reading, Rose, and for acknowledging my use of metaphors. I appreciate that, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
~Dean :)

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent chapter for the tiny tales of terror. I like what you did with they yyyyyys, making them smaller and smaller. You have an awesome talent for the visual effects, even when you don't have color and lots of pictures available. The story was creepy, as they always are, and the characters have a distinct personally. I also like the accent the kids have, it helps to visualize them. As you can tell, I am big on visual effects. :) Excellent job handsome. :)

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thanks for reading the story, Gypsy. I really appreciate your thought on the dialect of the kids and the visuals. That helps out a lot.
I'm pretty fond of visual presentations myself, but I realize not everyone appreciates them. I went with simple basics in this post. Just words, no graphics.
Thanks again, my friend. I'm glad you liked the story.
~Dean :}

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 24-Jul-2015

you are welcome :)

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi dean, another brilliant story in this ever increasing book of gory tales, the horror is just subtle enough not to scare off the new reader lol.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Yep, you got it, Eric. We don't want to scare the life out of 'em. They may never come back, heh-heh.
Thanks for taking a gander at this, and giving me your opinions in your review. I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean :)

reply by Eric1 on 26-Jul-2015

I really do enjoy all your work Dean.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

As always - most enjoyable, Dean.
Only you can write such spooky
stories.

I never go out in the complete dark, as we've
security lights all over the place -

indoor search, He rushed outside. - he - lower case

Margaret

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Oops! Thanks for spotting that, Margaret. I'll correct it right away.
Thanks for the review, my friend. I'm glad you liked the story.
~Dean :)