Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Well, that used to be one of my favorite songs, but now it has taken on a whole other ghastly and gory meaning. At least the sorry sucker didn't get away with it. I am happy that he got a bullet! It was full of enough tension and imagery to make my skin crawl -- so well done, Dean. 8-)

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thanks, boxergirl. If it made your skin crawl, then I did my job. Unfortunately it doesn't look to good for me in the competition with less than fifteen minutes to go. Still, the story was better received than I thought it might be, so that's a plus.

Have a great day! :)

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Dean Kuch,

Suitably gory and graphic for a Poe tale. Sadly there are folk like this 'puppeteer' roaming around. Good tale all told, graphic enough to give both the chill of revulsion and the insight into the maniac portrayed.

I'd say he picked the wrong victim this time though.

Patrick

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

There certainly are, Patrick, whether people wish to think so or not.

I very much appreciate your review, my friend. Thank you. ~Dean

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

As always, another great poem/stories. Combined with the blooding-soaking babe in the tub it gives a glimpse of something not quite right. Who am I kidding, this isn't at all right. It's warped. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thanks so much, Ric, and yeah, it is a bit warped. Unfortunately, with under fifteen minutes left to go in the contest, it doesn't appear that too many felt it was all the "great". Once again, the bridesmaid but not the bride it would seem...

Have a great weekend, buddy! ~Dean

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good attention-grabbing opening filled with gruesome, vivid descriptive detail and strong dramatic action verbs
you express the narrator's truly sick thoughts in a compelling way as he brutalizes his victim
and takes sick sexual pleasure from it
gore-spattered mirror - add the hyphen
Very gruesome and eerie
Brooke

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thanks so much, Brooke. --DK

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

YUCK - gruesome, gory, sick (and GOOD!) This guy was taken out too kindly after what he did, but then, I guess the cop couldn't chance not killing him quickly. Well done, Dean, but then that's not new. :)

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thanks so much, Dawn. :)

~DK

reply by Dawn Munro on 14-Mar-2015

My pleasure. :)

Comment from Acquired Taste

Exceptional

Dean, one of your more horrific offerings - because it is flash fiction. No time for the reader to take a breath from the intensity and instant buildup of horror.

Excellent work on this one - each sentence builds on the next and doesn't let go - just what is needed to make the reader hold their breath until it's over. Really well-penned. J

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thank you so much, Jean. I feel horror flash fiction is some of the most difficult to write, that's why I took on the challenge. Although it won't win the contest, it was much better received than I felt it might be, and that's a plus.

Thanks o much again!

Hugs. ~SPOOKY

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Yikes ! ! !
This one really hits home, Dean. Interesting narrative from a sick, sick man.
I'm assuming (hoping) that his female puppet is dead during all of this, and that his little puppet, nasty little thing will somehow will be severed from his life. I assume the person, perhaps a sibling, in the photograph is able to do some slashing of their own - something that runs in the family?
Rose.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thank you very much for your assessment and feedback, Rose. It's sincerely appreciated.

Comment from daeneam

Excellent

I like this form, my friend! It is easy to read. I get a dose of Dean Kuch for a short period of time. It will be appealing to busy people who have limited time accessing the website. I look forward reading more of this kind.

As I read, scenes from Wrong Turn 6 flashed on my mind. I think, this is as brutal as that. Good luck in the contest. c", Mae

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thank you very much for your assessment and feedback, c", Mae. It's sincerely appreciated.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Exceptional

Dear Dean - Flash scare is what this should be called. Yikes you make my blood run cold with your imagery and scare the heck out of me most times. Skillfully woven with enough of your "screams" to make me run for cover.
Excellent submission - good luck.
Thanks for sharing,
Mo

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thank you very much for your assessment and feedback, Mo. While it didn't win the contest, I'm glad you felt it was a worthy enough entry. For some reason, those who are my fans rarely vote in the contests here. Que sera, sera. Anyhow, I'm very grateful for the very generous six star rating as well.

All the best!

~Dean

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, dean, I enjoyed reading this tale of murder and mayhem, which you always delight in. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. (and you can share your member dollars with me) lol.. I'd like to see your take on Where Do The Children Play, probably dancing on gravestones in the cemetery, switching headstones and causing mayhem.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2015

Thank you very much for your assessment and feedback, Pam. It's sincerely appreciated.