The Woman Of Discontent
A weird poem I wrote inspired by Yasue's Surreal artwork.82 total reviews
Comment from Craigitar
Interesting take on the picture. Your piece certainly had a surrealistic feel to it and fit very nicely with the pic. Good job and luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Interesting take on the picture. Your piece certainly had a surrealistic feel to it and fit very nicely with the pic. Good job and luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you Craig.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, this IS quite a surreal poem, but I liked it - especially 'the eternal energies of the imagination'... best of luck in the contest with this lovely free verse.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Ah, this IS quite a surreal poem, but I liked it - especially 'the eternal energies of the imagination'... best of luck in the contest with this lovely free verse.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you Dawn.
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My pleasure.
Comment from kiwijenny
Another take on this lady .....I am amazed at how varied these poems are....surreal is a good view........an aquatic sky............... World of our imagination is cool as well
God bless
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Another take on this lady .....I am amazed at how varied these poems are....surreal is a good view........an aquatic sky............... World of our imagination is cool as well
God bless
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you Jenny.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Justin. I haven't seen you around much. I like your poetry...It's a thinking piece...Makes The reader check to see if he missed something. LOL..Good job. Bob
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Hi, Justin. I haven't seen you around much. I like your poetry...It's a thinking piece...Makes The reader check to see if he missed something. LOL..Good job. Bob
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you Bob.
Comment from Darkhorse555
but the woman of discontentment dreaming in the shadows the picture she looks so down floating in the world that holds no ground lovely piece
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but the woman of discontentment dreaming in the shadows the picture she looks so down floating in the world that holds no ground lovely piece
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you horse.
Comment from Jackarrie
A good poem keeping to the promt, of the image which appears to have a disembodied head. Well written.
A world that holds no ground
In logical rationalizations.
For it is a world created by
The eternal energies of the imagination.
Good luck in the competition. Mary
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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A good poem keeping to the promt, of the image which appears to have a disembodied head. Well written.
A world that holds no ground
In logical rationalizations.
For it is a world created by
The eternal energies of the imagination.
Good luck in the competition. Mary
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you Mary
Comment from elchupakabra
I enjoy this piece, I like the use of couplets here to express the metaphors and allusions of this psychadelic piece, as you call it. I think it holds subtleties different readers will be able to read into in different ways. Good alliteration with strange sorrow eternal energies at the end too, that was a nice touch. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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I enjoy this piece, I like the use of couplets here to express the metaphors and allusions of this psychadelic piece, as you call it. I think it holds subtleties different readers will be able to read into in different ways. Good alliteration with strange sorrow eternal energies at the end too, that was a nice touch. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you pakabra.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer delivers a message that taps into the emotions of the reader. The words compliment the photo well as I see nothing that I would add or take out of this piece. Good job.
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The writer delivers a message that taps into the emotions of the reader. The words compliment the photo well as I see nothing that I would add or take out of this piece. Good job.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you Riter.
Comment from pipersfancy
It's an interesting take on the artwork, and full of colourful imagery. A bit like watching the Beatles Magical Mystery Tour! Anyway - I like it! Good luck with the contest -
PF
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It's an interesting take on the artwork, and full of colourful imagery. A bit like watching the Beatles Magical Mystery Tour! Anyway - I like it! Good luck with the contest -
PF
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you piper.
Comment from TOMORAL
This is so beautifully written and describes someone I know so well. The eternal energies of the imagination is indeed what creates some women's world. Superb!
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This is so beautifully written and describes someone I know so well. The eternal energies of the imagination is indeed what creates some women's world. Superb!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2013
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Thank you Tomoral.