The Night
This poem describes the mysterious beauty and magical music of the night.139 total reviews
Comment from rhonny
This is very good and has a lilting quality to its lines. It flows nicely and doesn't have forced rhymes. The pic is just right for the poem too.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013
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This is very good and has a lilting quality to its lines. It flows nicely and doesn't have forced rhymes. The pic is just right for the poem too.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013
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Hi, Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem.Glad that you like it.
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:O)
Comment from Uniqusatya
Impressive piece of work here.
The fright of the night is gone as the poem give a beautiful definition ,
Good read.
Have a nice day.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013
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Impressive piece of work here.
The fright of the night is gone as the poem give a beautiful definition ,
Good read.
Have a nice day.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review..Glad that you liked my poem.
Comment from ronnie k
"When the senile moon" a lovely line that give the moon life that it give freely nightly the full moon is tired and worn and in need of rest, see her again in days to come bright and new.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013
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"When the senile moon" a lovely line that give the moon life that it give freely nightly the full moon is tired and worn and in need of rest, see her again in days to come bright and new.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem..And thaks for the beautiful interpretation of the line..I am glad that you have found it lovely..
Comment from determineddreamer
Perfect picture to accompany your poem. It really looks like the moon is melting. I liked your poem. The night lullaby line sounds so tranquil. Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013
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Perfect picture to accompany your poem. It really looks like the moon is melting. I liked your poem. The night lullaby line sounds so tranquil. Great job.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review..I am glad that you liked my poem.
Comment from gazzagodbod
love the moon so mysterious and beautiful well written and beautifully presented thank you so much my friend loved it xxgazzagodbodxx
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
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love the moon so mysterious and beautiful well written and beautifully presented thank you so much my friend loved it xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 24-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review..I am so glad that you like it.
Comment from mizzkris20
A lovely 5-7-5 poem. I'm not too good with those. Personally, I don't think most of them make any sense but yours is very good. Seems as if you are just showing off your talent with this one, lol
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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A lovely 5-7-5 poem. I'm not too good with those. Personally, I don't think most of them make any sense but yours is very good. Seems as if you are just showing off your talent with this one, lol
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Yeah! not getting chance to show the other works because I'm still not upgraded!!! smiles..
Anyways thanks so much for reading and reviewing my poem.I am glad.
Comment from 4tun81
This piece meets the criteria of the 5-7-5. The syllable count is correct as the photo compliments the piece well. This piece is short, sweet, to the point as I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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This piece meets the criteria of the 5-7-5. The syllable count is correct as the photo compliments the piece well. This piece is short, sweet, to the point as I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind comment..I am glad that you like it.
Comment from Kiki12
I like the imagery of the verse where the moon is melting and the night is singing a lullaby, but I'm not sure 'senile' fits the verse fro two reasons- there isn't anything else connected to the description to support the moon being personified this way, and it changes the tone from serenity where night sings a lullaby to almost filled with angst which is what senile conjures up for the reader. The rhyme is lovely and the flow of the first two lines works well, but it also hitches a bit in the final line where night sings 'a' lullaby. I'm happy to revisit this review if you make any changes- just reply back that you've done so and I'll re-review it.
Kiki
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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I like the imagery of the verse where the moon is melting and the night is singing a lullaby, but I'm not sure 'senile' fits the verse fro two reasons- there isn't anything else connected to the description to support the moon being personified this way, and it changes the tone from serenity where night sings a lullaby to almost filled with angst which is what senile conjures up for the reader. The rhyme is lovely and the flow of the first two lines works well, but it also hitches a bit in the final line where night sings 'a' lullaby. I'm happy to revisit this review if you make any changes- just reply back that you've done so and I'll re-review it.
Kiki
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much for your kind suggestion..I will try...I appreciate it..
Comment from froglipsam
I learned about 5-7-5 just today. I have found so much that fills my mind and hopefully makes me a better person in the shot time I've been on this site. The picture you painted in my mind was a full night in just 3 lines. Very good job.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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I learned about 5-7-5 just today. I have found so much that fills my mind and hopefully makes me a better person in the shot time I've been on this site. The picture you painted in my mind was a full night in just 3 lines. Very good job.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Carrie Carson
I like this, interesting use of senile since both definitions (in my OLD dictionary) work.
Good form, right on the count.
You're right, this is a beautiful image for this poem. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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I like this, interesting use of senile since both definitions (in my OLD dictionary) work.
Good form, right on the count.
You're right, this is a beautiful image for this poem. :) Carrie
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your kind review..
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Certainly, you're welcome.
