All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Puzzling Pieces"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Righteous Riter
This is a very interesting free verse. The writer is very descriptive in the beginning, in the middle and in the end. The writer does a good job of getting the message acro$$.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
This is a very interesting free verse. The writer is very descriptive in the beginning, in the middle and in the end. The writer does a good job of getting the message acro$$.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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thx RR :)S
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good poem I like the way you wrote a story in this poem and the picture tells a story as well I like the flow thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
This is a good poem I like the way you wrote a story in this poem and the picture tells a story as well I like the flow thank you for sharing
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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bless you Janet! :)S
Comment from mikenbel
This is such an excellent poem. I could find not one SPAG issue AND it describes the passage and life experience of us women so well.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
This is such an excellent poem. I could find not one SPAG issue AND it describes the passage and life experience of us women so well.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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thank you so much mb! A special blessing and huge "mahalo" for your lovely six on this one! :)Sharyn
Comment from ravenblack
Excellent evolution of you. It's funny how everything seems to cycle back, the mystery of the pieces assembling to a picture that we already recognize in past and future. Love your closing stanza.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
Excellent evolution of you. It's funny how everything seems to cycle back, the mystery of the pieces assembling to a picture that we already recognize in past and future. Love your closing stanza.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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spirals, spirals, all spirals, yes?? :))S
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
This is a great write. I never thought of writing an autobiography in free verse. But, in your hands, it seems to work extremely well. Of course, it is not all over yet. So, I'll look forward for more. I enjoyed the read. Your friend, Bob
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
This is a great write. I never thought of writing an autobiography in free verse. But, in your hands, it seems to work extremely well. Of course, it is not all over yet. So, I'll look forward for more. I enjoyed the read. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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No, it certainly is not over Bob - we can all write MANY autobiographies I think! :)S
Comment from angelmagnet
Sharyn, this is so intimate and real. I can almost see the angel over your head, dictating words and putting thoughts in your head to create this beauty
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
Sharyn, this is so intimate and real. I can almost see the angel over your head, dictating words and putting thoughts in your head to create this beauty
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Bless you Cindy - and a special thank you for those angelic stars my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Taffspride
I wish I could give you a six for this. It has to be one of the best of yours. You tell your life story here. I love the lines:
Occasionally meeting my old self on the way still puzzled. Haven't I done all this before?
And the last stanza is so meaningful.
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
I wish I could give you a six for this. It has to be one of the best of yours. You tell your life story here. I love the lines:
Occasionally meeting my old self on the way still puzzled. Haven't I done all this before?
And the last stanza is so meaningful.
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Ann! I'm really glad you thought of it as one of my best - lovely words, so much appreciated! :)Sharyn
Comment from Spitfire
Girl, you come with the most amazing images. Billy Collins would be proud of you. The picture is so perfect for the content. The innocence of childhood where the smallest detail is a miracle. Love the growing -up years with disillusionment after marriage --is that all there is?
What a miracle ending -spiraling upward, but meeting your old self on the way. Such when we think life doesn't get any better, our body betrays us. That's when we realize there's more to life than material things. I still can't give you a six, but I do hope this is selected for the poem of the month.
Hugs,
Shari
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
Girl, you come with the most amazing images. Billy Collins would be proud of you. The picture is so perfect for the content. The innocence of childhood where the smallest detail is a miracle. Love the growing -up years with disillusionment after marriage --is that all there is?
What a miracle ending -spiraling upward, but meeting your old self on the way. Such when we think life doesn't get any better, our body betrays us. That's when we realize there's more to life than material things. I still can't give you a six, but I do hope this is selected for the poem of the month.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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I doubt very much the magic Committee will even notice Shari - their choices always surprise me, and not usually in a good way! :)))S Glad you enjoyed this one!
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I hear you. They seem to be about nature for the most part. And end rhyme is always there.
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yep - bore the socks of you most of the time!
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but at least Mrs D. deserves it this month - she's got a GREAT sense of rhythm! ;)
Comment from MizKat
Sharyn - Your poem about beginning, middle, and end is nicely written. You sure know how to tell a great poetic story, grabbing and keeping the readers attention. Another great job! Kat
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
Sharyn - Your poem about beginning, middle, and end is nicely written. You sure know how to tell a great poetic story, grabbing and keeping the readers attention. Another great job! Kat
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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and thank you AGAIN my dear! :)S
Comment from wordsareus
This is a fantastic, exceptionally well-written poem about your beginning, middle, and end. I only wish I had a six left to give you.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
This is a fantastic, exceptionally well-written poem about your beginning, middle, and end. I only wish I had a six left to give you.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Bless you my dear! I'm so glad you liked this piece! Thank you for a lovely review and the "virtual" sixer!
:)Sharyn