All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Colors of Life"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Author ....
I enjoyed reading this free-thought writing of yours, presented from the perspective of a young child. Yes, I can well imagine such words coming from a thoughtful little child who, even as he or she writes, is pondering over the words and the person about whom she is writing.
There is nothing to suggest changing. As this is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Hullo Author ....
I enjoyed reading this free-thought writing of yours, presented from the perspective of a young child. Yes, I can well imagine such words coming from a thoughtful little child who, even as he or she writes, is pondering over the words and the person about whom she is writing.
There is nothing to suggest changing. As this is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Thx Nanette Mary
Comment from GWHARGIS
I think we had the same Sunday school teacher. I drew a drum set next to Jesus once and mine was the only picture that didn't get put up on the wall. You definitely showed how learning about God and Jesus is confusing for most young children. It was an enjoyable read. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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I think we had the same Sunday school teacher. I drew a drum set next to Jesus once and mine was the only picture that didn't get put up on the wall. You definitely showed how learning about God and Jesus is confusing for most young children. It was an enjoyable read. Nice job.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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well sounds like you're scarred for life then dear - oh bother!
:( boo hooo!
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your poem is crazy good and very well written.
The art work you used is priceless.
You used excellent humor/
You used great metaphor and alliteration usage.
I enjoyed the lines:
She doesn't like my picture
and she takes it away
and hands me another
boring old black and white
drawing
and one
Big
Boring
Blue pencil
Just for him - oops!
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your wacky poem to other readers.
Missy.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Poet,
Your poem is crazy good and very well written.
The art work you used is priceless.
You used excellent humor/
You used great metaphor and alliteration usage.
I enjoyed the lines:
She doesn't like my picture
and she takes it away
and hands me another
boring old black and white
drawing
and one
Big
Boring
Blue pencil
Just for him - oops!
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your wacky poem to other readers.
Missy.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx missy
Comment from Spike the second
Yes but I bet Santa is worried his little brother doesn't mind (ha ha). Especially after delivering all those coloring books at Christmas.
Some are some are not good at coloring in
I do like this, the picture is classic. Excellent!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Yes but I bet Santa is worried his little brother doesn't mind (ha ha). Especially after delivering all those coloring books at Christmas.
Some are some are not good at coloring in
I do like this, the picture is classic. Excellent!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Spike!
Comment from Starlit Ink
This is an original entry, as I wouldn't have expected a 7-year-olds perspective. That is exactly how a small child would think, so you did great with the theme that you used. Good luck with this very creative entry!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This is an original entry, as I wouldn't have expected a 7-year-olds perspective. That is exactly how a small child would think, so you did great with the theme that you used. Good luck with this very creative entry!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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and a double thank you Starlit! :)
Comment from mermaids
I like the poetic/prose form and the viewpoint here from a seven year old. I like the theme of how children can become confused by what we try to teach them. The poem has a spiritual feel to it and many can relate to your words.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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I like the poetic/prose form and the viewpoint here from a seven year old. I like the theme of how children can become confused by what we try to teach them. The poem has a spiritual feel to it and many can relate to your words.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx mermaids!
Comment from Mai Mai
This is absolutely charming. It has a very child like feel that is heart warming and innocent. The child lovingly in wonder doing their best and the adult (seeped in ignorance and judgment). I once was this child. Thanks for the memory. Good luck.
Mai Mai
My 3 year old granddaughter says "coloring in the lines is boring, everyone colors in the lines"
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This is absolutely charming. It has a very child like feel that is heart warming and innocent. The child lovingly in wonder doing their best and the adult (seeped in ignorance and judgment). I once was this child. Thanks for the memory. Good luck.
Mai Mai
My 3 year old granddaughter says "coloring in the lines is boring, everyone colors in the lines"
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Mai Mai - I LOVE childrens' perspectives - they're so innocently honest & ingenuous, yes? blessings!
Comment from wordsareus
This poem is a very interesting interpretation of how a young girl thinks Jesus is Santa's little brother. The poem is well written and clearly tells the story from the young girl's perspective using age appropriate vocabulary.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This poem is a very interesting interpretation of how a young girl thinks Jesus is Santa's little brother. The poem is well written and clearly tells the story from the young girl's perspective using age appropriate vocabulary.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx words!
Comment from Val Crisson
No He doesn't. What a compelling poem, it shows a great deal of creativity and imagination. And why does His gown have to be blue, or can He be a She? Wonderful
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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No He doesn't. What a compelling poem, it shows a great deal of creativity and imagination. And why does His gown have to be blue, or can He be a She? Wonderful
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx Val!
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very good poem I like the little kids point of view my answer would have been to the old lady's do you know he wore blue,were you there' lol good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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This is a very good poem I like the little kids point of view my answer would have been to the old lady's do you know he wore blue,were you there' lol good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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thx dmt!