All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Butterfly in a Box"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Cleo Belle
This is fabulous, and I chuckled when I read your last lines of warning - to be careful when next opening the box! I think we have met the same sort of person, and I wish I had thought of poking holes in the box!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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This is fabulous, and I chuckled when I read your last lines of warning - to be careful when next opening the box! I think we have met the same sort of person, and I wish I had thought of poking holes in the box!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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grrrrrrrrrrrrrrr! thanks Cleo! :)Sharyn
Comment from ameen786
Bravo! My friend, what a courageous write...I hope many women read this and learn from your brilliant reflections, no one should take the other for granted; you did a great job with perfect words/phrases; wonderful presentation!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Bravo! My friend, what a courageous write...I hope many women read this and learn from your brilliant reflections, no one should take the other for granted; you did a great job with perfect words/phrases; wonderful presentation!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind words Ameen!
Comment from Healthyheartpoet
What a great description of a relationship that the truth evolved. It takes a bit of time to reach the 'smartening up' stage. After a while refusing to be taken advantage of reaches a tipping point and its over.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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What a great description of a relationship that the truth evolved. It takes a bit of time to reach the 'smartening up' stage. After a while refusing to be taken advantage of reaches a tipping point and its over.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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It does indeed Hhp - getting to the tipping point is painful. You have wisdom by the sound of it!
Comment from Titanx9
Wow! The tone, mood and imagery are out of this world! You nailed it. I've seen these scenes played so many times when I worked with Social Services. Many women were caught up in the government's system as well as their spouses. They stayed in their boxes, and some simply died of asphyxiation of the soul and spirit. I like your idea of how to get out and what sweet revenge. This is one of my best reviews of the day!
Awesome job!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Wow! The tone, mood and imagery are out of this world! You nailed it. I've seen these scenes played so many times when I worked with Social Services. Many women were caught up in the government's system as well as their spouses. They stayed in their boxes, and some simply died of asphyxiation of the soul and spirit. I like your idea of how to get out and what sweet revenge. This is one of my best reviews of the day!
Awesome job!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Thank you from the bottom of my heart Titan - your words are inspiring to me! Bless you also for your magic '6' my dear!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from GroundedAngel
Wow. Sharyn, I swear I read your work and it's like I told you my life story and you put pieces of it into little masterpieces called poems. Your expression is so eloquent and profound. Simply beautiful.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Wow. Sharyn, I swear I read your work and it's like I told you my life story and you put pieces of it into little masterpieces called poems. Your expression is so eloquent and profound. Simply beautiful.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Perhaps it's a common part of "growing up" for many woman my dear - finding courage to be independent and to be oneself. It's a hard journey. I'm so glad the piece speaks to you.
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Nathan Blackthorn
That kinda goes along with the whole
reawakening of modern vampire fixation,
doesn't it? How could you have know that
you invited Dracula in?
Tell ya what... PM me and I'll tell you
where to buy... hold on! No need for
that! You've probably heard of them, as
they're now a chain operation... Stake Outlet!
Their stakes are 100 percent guaranteed to
kill on first strike or triple yer money
back! :)
Good luck to you! Nathan B
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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That kinda goes along with the whole
reawakening of modern vampire fixation,
doesn't it? How could you have know that
you invited Dracula in?
Tell ya what... PM me and I'll tell you
where to buy... hold on! No need for
that! You've probably heard of them, as
they're now a chain operation... Stake Outlet!
Their stakes are 100 percent guaranteed to
kill on first strike or triple yer money
back! :)
Good luck to you! Nathan B
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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GRRRRRRRRRRRRRR! Beware the Butterfly Nathan! :)
Comment from mjordahl
That was liberating. I could feel the courage and respect you demanded with this. The words played off each other with a bold sense of pride. Nice
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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That was liberating. I could feel the courage and respect you demanded with this. The words played off each other with a bold sense of pride. Nice
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for reading and understanding the intention of my piece! Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from writerwish
The message of growth and the freedom it brings is marvelous. I admire the way you can express all this in so few words. I have a hard time with free verse, but you make it look easy. Very well done, great metaphor for those to remember who really need this. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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The message of growth and the freedom it brings is marvelous. I admire the way you can express all this in so few words. I have a hard time with free verse, but you make it look easy. Very well done, great metaphor for those to remember who really need this. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for reading and "getting" my piece ww - I so appreciate it when I see a wonderful review like yours. And a special thank you, too, for a magic '6'. You've made my night! Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from Museeker
Marvelous! This is an outstanding poem, from succinct and provocative title to strategically formatted and linguistically powerful conclusion. Terse, eloquent, and fittingly foreboding...a great read--and proof that revenge is a dish best served...poetically.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Marvelous! This is an outstanding poem, from succinct and provocative title to strategically formatted and linguistically powerful conclusion. Terse, eloquent, and fittingly foreboding...a great read--and proof that revenge is a dish best served...poetically.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you SO much for "getting" my piece! And I REALLY appreciate one of those special '6's my dear! and yes, you got the revenge dish being served ... poetically - so glad! Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from fictionwriter
This sounds like the making of a horror movie of your own. The butterfly that turns into a monster to eat the monster who trapped it. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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This sounds like the making of a horror movie of your own. The butterfly that turns into a monster to eat the monster who trapped it. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr! thx fw! :) Sharyn