A Book of ... Free Verse (Vol.1)
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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes well done my friend you have indeed expressed your thoughts and feeling well people who review writing and critics should be honest and understanding with what is written well done my friend regards Jill
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Yes well done my friend you have indeed expressed your thoughts and feeling well people who review writing and critics should be honest and understanding with what is written well done my friend regards Jill
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is interesting and clever and I think I see what you're getting at, but it might have been a bit more cohesive. Seems like you mixed in actual syphilis from sex ... which doesn't really belong here in the middle somehow.
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This is interesting and clever and I think I see what you're getting at, but it might have been a bit more cohesive. Seems like you mixed in actual syphilis from sex ... which doesn't really belong here in the middle somehow.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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well it does if you personify it with the writing disease.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh please, this has to stay on the features page for a long, long time!
What a fabulous poem! Good for you! It is time this was taken to task, and you have done it brilliantly my friend!
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Oh please, this has to stay on the features page for a long, long time!
What a fabulous poem! Good for you! It is time this was taken to task, and you have done it brilliantly my friend!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Much appreciated...
Comment from misscookie
I found this to be a very interesting read. and the words you choose are harsh but true.
You had my attention from the first line to thelkadst.
Thank you for sharing.
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I found this to be a very interesting read. and the words you choose are harsh but true.
You had my attention from the first line to thelkadst.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Thank you, much appreciated...
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My pleasure, take care.
Comment from GroundedAngel
One of the more unusual poems I've ever read. Definitely grabs your attention with the word ' syphilis'. I'd probably given you five stars, but I'm fighting the ' ick factor. ' LOL
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One of the more unusual poems I've ever read. Definitely grabs your attention with the word ' syphilis'. I'd probably given you five stars, but I'm fighting the ' ick factor. ' LOL
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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No worries.
Comment from visionary1234
Hi Bic - you asked me to take a peek at some of your work, so here I am - sorry I've been so busy doing other things today! Good to have you back with your "found" poetry! (Now THERE'S a mystery!) Re punctuation: I'd wipe it all out because this short piece doesn't really need it. I like each new verse starting with a capital letter, but any more than that is pretty much unnecessary I think - except the ... at the end - that is necessary, and the ! is good. But what an improvement! Wow! I can see you've been working on it! Blessings, Sharyn
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Hi Bic - you asked me to take a peek at some of your work, so here I am - sorry I've been so busy doing other things today! Good to have you back with your "found" poetry! (Now THERE'S a mystery!) Re punctuation: I'd wipe it all out because this short piece doesn't really need it. I like each new verse starting with a capital letter, but any more than that is pretty much unnecessary I think - except the ... at the end - that is necessary, and the ! is good. But what an improvement! Wow! I can see you've been working on it! Blessings, Sharyn
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Much thanks appreciate...
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
This was a weird one, an offbeat offering with a compelling cadence and rhythm all its own. An original, to be sure! Well done, my friend... Keep going...
cheers
js
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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This was a weird one, an offbeat offering with a compelling cadence and rhythm all its own. An original, to be sure! Well done, my friend... Keep going...
cheers
js
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Thanks js, much appreciate.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, bicpen, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about the way people need to be tactful and sensitive when reviewing others' writings
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this is very well written, bicpen, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about the way people need to be tactful and sensitive when reviewing others' writings
Comment Written 07-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2012
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Constructive and correct would be a good start swj...
Comment from Meta~Mark
Bic,
This is awesome, loaded with 1 big fat metaphor of a personal affliction and an undesirable persona that itched under your proverbial skin. Impure she-it-they are to assume incorrectly.
Correction is an infection- brilliant!
10000000000000000000 stars, poem of the month!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Bic,
This is awesome, loaded with 1 big fat metaphor of a personal affliction and an undesirable persona that itched under your proverbial skin. Impure she-it-they are to assume incorrectly.
Correction is an infection- brilliant!
10000000000000000000 stars, poem of the month!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Quality M... knew you would love it. Hope it does make poem of the month.
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If it doesn't I am protesting, LOL :)!
Comment from TammyGail
Tell them to kiss your ass B.. That is indeed a word and a clever one at that - such words that are not used as much can be hard to Google - lol not really they just didn't take the time - your poem was interesting as ever and the history of the word is interesting - thanks for sharing always a pleasure sweetie -
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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Tell them to kiss your ass B.. That is indeed a word and a clever one at that - such words that are not used as much can be hard to Google - lol not really they just didn't take the time - your poem was interesting as ever and the history of the word is interesting - thanks for sharing always a pleasure sweetie -
Comment Written 06-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2012
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I've just told someone to kiss my ass T... because for some reason they think they can determine what and how i'm feeling even though I've already told them how and what I'm feeling...some people...!
Loved every minute of it T. Glad you can enjoy it for what it is.
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always B.. enjoy your writing
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Just glad you can appreciate with all the others that have helped me through this last year.
