It's Complicated
Who decides who wins or loses in life60 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I like the conclusion you reach, that balance is the key, for yes, more than one factor matters. It IS easier to find inner peace on a full stomach, but it is also easier to find happiness while living in a mansion IF that person has friends and love. Poor physical health can plague the rich and the poor, but good health is surely not enough, if a healthy person is alone and loveless. You point out clearly and convincingly that one needs to find the right mixture of each element, and I like the way you do that by discussing people in the park. Brooke
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I like the conclusion you reach, that balance is the key, for yes, more than one factor matters. It IS easier to find inner peace on a full stomach, but it is also easier to find happiness while living in a mansion IF that person has friends and love. Poor physical health can plague the rich and the poor, but good health is surely not enough, if a healthy person is alone and loveless. You point out clearly and convincingly that one needs to find the right mixture of each element, and I like the way you do that by discussing people in the park. Brooke
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Thank you.
Comment from Charlene0513
A contest entry which carries a lot of weight and contraversary between genders.
Somewhere in us all we have a "Winning Spirit" the only difference is many do not recognize their gifts or others just don't care and expect everything should be handed to them on a silver platter.
Well it doesn't work that way.
As the saying goes, you must sow a seed before you can reap your harvest.
Then you truly are a winner in God's eyes for your achievements.
Forgive me for going on but that is just my opinion.
Family and friends certainly does play a hand in your emotional and intellectual side also, though.
Charlene
Charlene
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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A contest entry which carries a lot of weight and contraversary between genders.
Somewhere in us all we have a "Winning Spirit" the only difference is many do not recognize their gifts or others just don't care and expect everything should be handed to them on a silver platter.
Well it doesn't work that way.
As the saying goes, you must sow a seed before you can reap your harvest.
Then you truly are a winner in God's eyes for your achievements.
Forgive me for going on but that is just my opinion.
Family and friends certainly does play a hand in your emotional and intellectual side also, though.
Charlene
Charlene
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Thanks for your most interesting comments and for sharing them.
Comment from Halfree
OK, I am jaded...This essay is well written, cannot deny that fact. But what is said is pabulum served on a worn plate of homilies. I did not experience the noment when I said yes, this is true. I don't think everyone wants to be or even knows what a winner is. But since we cannot define a winner in any clear terms how can I say this. The truth, I find essays, like this one ,to be boring and meaningless no matter how well written. Mr. Writer, you have considerable skills but this essay didn't take me anyplace nor did it tax your skills.
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OK, I am jaded...This essay is well written, cannot deny that fact. But what is said is pabulum served on a worn plate of homilies. I did not experience the noment when I said yes, this is true. I don't think everyone wants to be or even knows what a winner is. But since we cannot define a winner in any clear terms how can I say this. The truth, I find essays, like this one ,to be boring and meaningless no matter how well written. Mr. Writer, you have considerable skills but this essay didn't take me anyplace nor did it tax your skills.
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Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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You sound unhappy and dissatisfied with your life. I'm sorry. When you believe it, you'll see it. It really is that simple, but apparently you are not yet ready for that peace of mind. that's okay. Thanks for reading. I wish you had felt it was okay to judge the post not on content or personal preference, but on presentation. I believe it does meet the tried and true rules of essay writing, i.e. present a question and an answer, with a logical method of getting there.
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Ah, the arm chair psychologist. I was commenting on the logic and presentation. I stand by my statement that you have considerable writing skills. If you want, the presentation was good and you presented a question and answered with what you believe to be a logical method. On writing skill 6, on logic 6. But it is to me like the church fathers debating how many angels can rest on the head of a pin. Your presentation was perfect. I just don't buy into the conclusions. Ready for peace of mind, really.. how very presumptive of you. If this were a story and I said it is bad story told well would you accept that.
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okay.
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keep writing.
Comment from Southern Writer
Reading the paragraph about the Nana (however, I call myself "Nanna" cause I like the way the name looks when I write the two 'N's".) I have never been happier than chasing my grandsons as they run away like they are the wind. Your words describe how wonderful this simple act is. Who needs great wealth? Once you have shelter, food, and health...everything else is just a bonus. Ordinary life is where the true treasures can be found. I've dressed up in ball gowns and dressed down in old clothes to pick berries with my grandsons. Both were great, but the daily ordinary stuff always wins.
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Reading the paragraph about the Nana (however, I call myself "Nanna" cause I like the way the name looks when I write the two 'N's".) I have never been happier than chasing my grandsons as they run away like they are the wind. Your words describe how wonderful this simple act is. Who needs great wealth? Once you have shelter, food, and health...everything else is just a bonus. Ordinary life is where the true treasures can be found. I've dressed up in ball gowns and dressed down in old clothes to pick berries with my grandsons. Both were great, but the daily ordinary stuff always wins.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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WOW! Six shiny stars. Thanks so very, very much. Love your comments and hope you enter the contest.
Comment from buckeyewriter
Really enjoyed this! I couldn't agree more about what you've said here. The rub is that even when we really are winning, sometimes all we can see is what we still long for...even if it is something fleeting or superficial. I especially like the fact that you point out with the child and grandmother that their joy uplifted everyone who was lucky enough to be just be there in the vicinity. How very true. Nicely done.
Amanda
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Really enjoyed this! I couldn't agree more about what you've said here. The rub is that even when we really are winning, sometimes all we can see is what we still long for...even if it is something fleeting or superficial. I especially like the fact that you point out with the child and grandmother that their joy uplifted everyone who was lucky enough to be just be there in the vicinity. How very true. Nicely done.
Amanda
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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thank you very much.
Comment from cheyennewy
This is such an interesting write and one I enjoyed reading. You are so right in your assessments of what makes a person a winner of a failure. Life is what me make it and we can be lonesome in a crowd. Your last few lines are well penned and evocative. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
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This is such an interesting write and one I enjoyed reading. You are so right in your assessments of what makes a person a winner of a failure. Life is what me make it and we can be lonesome in a crowd. Your last few lines are well penned and evocative. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Thank you for reading and for the good luck wishes.
Comment from bloodmoonjournals
I Can Concur Your Are Likely to be correct. However, shallow it may sound you mayoverlook that some hold on to things that would love to let go of but do not know how so I would say your writing has provoked emotions of a few points I may be missing.
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I Can Concur Your Are Likely to be correct. However, shallow it may sound you mayoverlook that some hold on to things that would love to let go of but do not know how so I would say your writing has provoked emotions of a few points I may be missing.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Thank you. SIX STARS mean so much to me. I believe you are right that some hold on to things they really want to let go of, but are not sure how. We only have this very moment in which to live: everything else is only a thought, be it memory or plan.
Thanks so very much for all those shiny stars.
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you are most likely an inspiration to others that is a very good place to be keep up the good work
Comment from rama devi
Outstanding essay---inspiring theme, articulate style---consistency in tone adn thought that supports your basic tenet. Excellent examples and overall a well organized write adn enjoyable, uplifting read.
A strong contender in the contest. You've touched on many fine points with which i totally agree!
I saw no spags.
One tiny suggestion-
The woman sat on a bench watching the toddler chase a butterfly. He turned to her and called, "Nana, you can't catch me."
In the first sentence you mention the woman and the toddler. Using HE in next sentences sounded off to my ears---I think you need to say "the toddler"---but in the sentence that follows after the above, using he works fine. You have to establish the main subject. In the first line the main subject was the woman.
Not sure if it mattes much---just a slight bump when I was reading.
Brilliant essay!
Bravo--kudos and good luck.
Warmly, rd
PS--Wonder who wrote this...I'm guessing Annumma---?
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Outstanding essay---inspiring theme, articulate style---consistency in tone adn thought that supports your basic tenet. Excellent examples and overall a well organized write adn enjoyable, uplifting read.
A strong contender in the contest. You've touched on many fine points with which i totally agree!
I saw no spags.
One tiny suggestion-
The woman sat on a bench watching the toddler chase a butterfly. He turned to her and called, "Nana, you can't catch me."
In the first sentence you mention the woman and the toddler. Using HE in next sentences sounded off to my ears---I think you need to say "the toddler"---but in the sentence that follows after the above, using he works fine. You have to establish the main subject. In the first line the main subject was the woman.
Not sure if it mattes much---just a slight bump when I was reading.
Brilliant essay!
Bravo--kudos and good luck.
Warmly, rd
PS--Wonder who wrote this...I'm guessing Annumma---?
Comment Written 13-May-2010
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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You are so right about the change that needs to be made. It'll happen. thank you.
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Thanks---big smiles. :)
Comment from CKLA
I agree wholeheartedly. This is a wonderfully crafted essay and should do well in the contest.
I like the way you used the grandmother and child to show that moment of joy and how it spread to those who witnessed it.
Well done.
Collette
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I agree wholeheartedly. This is a wonderfully crafted essay and should do well in the contest.
I like the way you used the grandmother and child to show that moment of joy and how it spread to those who witnessed it.
Well done.
Collette
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Thank you.
Comment from dportwood
Your essay tied into the concept that -
Winning in life is a matter of balance.
You gave explanations of the four goals in our lives.
You concluded with a statement of all four aspects of our lives which, when in harmony, make us winners.
I like this essay and your thoughts.
Well done and good luck.
Duane
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Your essay tied into the concept that -
Winning in life is a matter of balance.
You gave explanations of the four goals in our lives.
You concluded with a statement of all four aspects of our lives which, when in harmony, make us winners.
I like this essay and your thoughts.
Well done and good luck.
Duane
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Comment Written 13-May-2010
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Thank you.
