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Comment from melyuki
sis, and as the heavens opened, her beloved son, beamed down with happpy heart , glowing, with true love for his Mum. She needed help and he was listening., As she looked to the skies, energy filled her heart and soul, as never before. Now, side by side, they will travel across the plains to brighter pastures, smiling, touching, as they walk together into renewed happiness.
I luv your story Sis, it is truly beautiful, and Michael is singing, songs of praise.as enlightened souls engage once more, dancing across heaven's floor
Hugs and kisses, lots of luv from Melxxxxxxx
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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sis, and as the heavens opened, her beloved son, beamed down with happpy heart , glowing, with true love for his Mum. She needed help and he was listening., As she looked to the skies, energy filled her heart and soul, as never before. Now, side by side, they will travel across the plains to brighter pastures, smiling, touching, as they walk together into renewed happiness.
I luv your story Sis, it is truly beautiful, and Michael is singing, songs of praise.as enlightened souls engage once more, dancing across heaven's floor
Hugs and kisses, lots of luv from Melxxxxxxx
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Sis,
How in tune to me you are...Just absolutely loved your response. You added stars to the sunshine...what more could I ask! Love ya......
Comment from highplains
Really nice story. Sometimes when things seem bad, the smallest sliver of hope can make all the difference. Your last line summed this up nicely.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Really nice story. Sometimes when things seem bad, the smallest sliver of hope can make all the difference. Your last line summed this up nicely.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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highplains,
Yes, there have been many a time I thought I was at the end of the line when that ray of sunshine gave me hope. Thank you for the kind comments. Smiles to you....
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is an excellent piece of flash fiction. It is well written, well edited, and very inspiring. Excellent stuff well done.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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This is an excellent piece of flash fiction. It is well written, well edited, and very inspiring. Excellent stuff well done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Goldwell,
Thank you for your kind comments. I greatly appreciate the encouragement. Smiles to you...
Comment from AnnaLinda
This is a very beautiful and inspiring
word dash story writer! You have met all
the requirements of the contest and also
conveyed a story of faith, despite extreme
challenges.
You did a great job on it!
Linda
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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This is a very beautiful and inspiring
word dash story writer! You have met all
the requirements of the contest and also
conveyed a story of faith, despite extreme
challenges.
You did a great job on it!
Linda
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Linda,
Thank you for your encouraging comments. They are greatly appreciated. Smiles to you...
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You are welcome!
Comment from Annmuma
Thought about entering this contest myself, but I think I just read the winning entry! Excellent work and I have no suggestion for improvement. Good luck. ann
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Thought about entering this contest myself, but I think I just read the winning entry! Excellent work and I have no suggestion for improvement. Good luck. ann
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Ann
Wow...aren't you just the one to lift my spirits up today..Thank you so much for the kind comments...I really needed it! Smiles to you...
Comment from jasmh
That was lovely. A beautiful ending. Congratulations on such a sweet story in so few words!
I would change nothing. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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That was lovely. A beautiful ending. Congratulations on such a sweet story in so few words!
I would change nothing. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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jasmh,
Thank you so much for the wonderful comments and encouragement. Smiles to you..
Comment from Connie C
You've done a very nice job telling your story in so few words, and I must admit that it gave me chills to read it. I had a very similar experience when I stood at my little brother's grave many years ago, shortly after his death. The clouds parted, and the sky seemed to be filled with brightness. I do see one error in your story; I think "sister's" might be wrong. If plural, there shouldn't be an apostrophe. Otherwise, very nice work. Connie C
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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You've done a very nice job telling your story in so few words, and I must admit that it gave me chills to read it. I had a very similar experience when I stood at my little brother's grave many years ago, shortly after his death. The clouds parted, and the sky seemed to be filled with brightness. I do see one error in your story; I think "sister's" might be wrong. If plural, there shouldn't be an apostrophe. Otherwise, very nice work. Connie C
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Connie,
It seems to happen to me quite often..I guess miracles do happen..I feel blessed when they do. Smiles to you...
Comment from jmdg1954
Author,
now this is an excellent entry for this prompt. It had charector, conflict and resolution. Besides, it took an emotional setting, a mother pleading by her son's grave (something that should never happen) with the Lord giving her hope and strength.
Very nicely done... John
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Author,
now this is an excellent entry for this prompt. It had charector, conflict and resolution. Besides, it took an emotional setting, a mother pleading by her son's grave (something that should never happen) with the Lord giving her hope and strength.
Very nicely done... John
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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John,
I feel so blessed when it does happen..I feel that someone is really listening to my struggles. Thank you for the kind comments. Smiles to you...
Comment from SamanthaD.
Very touching story! I love the hope at the end. I also like the way you used the black & white photo with the gray background. It adds to the starkness of the woman's situation. Thanks for sharing this!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Very touching story! I love the hope at the end. I also like the way you used the black & white photo with the gray background. It adds to the starkness of the woman's situation. Thanks for sharing this!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
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Samantha
This really has happened to me and I feel very fortunate believing that someone is listening. Smiles to you...
Comment from RebelRose
sister's expect ... I assume this is pleural (more than one sister) no apostrophy needed.
A very poignant story. Sometimes it does seem that we messages from beyond.
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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sister's expect ... I assume this is pleural (more than one sister) no apostrophy needed.
A very poignant story. Sometimes it does seem that we messages from beyond.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Patty,
Thanks for the assistance and for the kind review. Smiles to you...